So... She told about Moondancer... Is she going to talk about Sunset and Starlight? Or Starswirl banishment and the pony of shadows? Tirek? The Fanfictions?
And if she want to make a religion, what better that the Jedi religion? Unless she want to make the ninja religion and praise the Log.
9091444 It might be touch and go for Warm Smile, simply put she just doesn't know what to do with the information she has. Considering she is now in her own body and still a filly, she can only do so much unless she trains herself. but she also doesn't things to spiral out of control if she tells them about the big foes Twilight has to face.
Twilight remembering her friends was after she became a alicorn and didn't impact the timeline to any sort of degree, so in the moment she figured it was okay to tell her. Besides since Lyra is such a cool pony why not have her around
As for Starlight and Sunset, I havent thought that far but they will know the power of the Marshmallow Lord
I’m just waiting for the time when the cmc meet up again, and apple bloom and scootaloo want to try kissing again. That is going to be all kinds of awkward.
“Twilight, take a deep breath like I taught you.” Celestia said in her motherly tone, smirking ever so slightly as she looked down at me I gave her a wink and my own grin.
The three great sources of all change, all chaos and all the wonder and majesty of the new are thus: Faith, who holds true that something is worth living for, that all the world has at its core something worthwhile that should be cherished and upheld. Hope, who faces the darkness and fights it back, who ushers in miracles when all else has failed. Love, who will tear apart the world and smash it together again, who will kill and nurture, who will change the very foundations of the world.
I was a coward, I always dreamed big and would often say that ‘If I was there I would do this and that’
Made me think of if I was on the Titanic I would take all the doors off or anything else that floats and use it as a life raft.
“I always had a soft spot for trains… I can't remember why, but I always felt safe here in the moving cart. Watching the world flow by like watercolors, it’s soothing.” I said looking out to the green and brown blurs of trees outside the windows.
“I… I'm sorry…” I wailed, I was stupid in so many ways and I couldn't even blame it on the brain I used. I should of went with her, I should of walked her back to reality.
I was crying during this whole scene.
of friendship and becoming a better friends,
“In the wise words of a Jack Black animated film I quote ‘The past is history, the future is a mystery, but today is a gift that's why we call it the present’ as cheesy as that is, it means that the you here in this very moment, you are a gift to this world.” I said earnestly.
“I’m… happy that my assumptions were wrong.” I said recovering from my laughter.
I am here with you so you don’t fragment.
Turns out she was unbearably ticklish around the barrel of her chest, and I was just as more ticklish. (——
It was starting to hurt a little with how much
She said softly into my ear which twitched because of her breath,
blue was splotched on her neck but other than that she was clean.
“Side effect of the separation process, simply put your souls are experiencing a fictional lack of connection. The two of you were so melded together it took hours of spell casting to stretch them so both minds had control of their own respective bodies. Even then Princess Luna had to keep both of your minds separated long enough so they would imprint. I can’t imagine how confusing it would of been if both of you were aware of one another but controlled both bodies.” Twilight said in her best professor voice seeming to be proud of her hoofwork.
We chatted with one another on all the things we could do while at the clubhouse. We couldn't think of anything that didn't involve death defying feats of skill, so I suggested a bit of wrestling. Which they both readily agreed too (to).
“I… I don't mind… if we are that is! I-I love you both, its (apostrophe)… um Fluttershy told me to wait t-to grow up a little before… becoming apart of a herd.” Scootaloo said panic in her voice as she was torn between listening to Fluttershy and her own confusing feelings.
The familiar sight of the same woods I had been staring at revealed something, I could see the six elements of harmony standing there smiling. Behind them was Spike, Sweetie Belle, Scootaloo, Apple bloom (capitalize), even the sisters themselves holding a small pony, just a filly in their hooves.
“If I understand correctly, to (I) think that your body type is going to resemble her’s (no apostrophe) someday.” She finished with a huff looking down at her standard pony form and poking at the very light fat on her chest.
“S-She i-is y-y-your f-friend from C-Canterlot, y-you d-dork!” I laughed grinning at her with a smug grin, “Y-You got....(so)…. caught u-up in s-saving e-equestria (capitalize) that you l-left your f-friends in Canterlot, t-they aren't mad. W-well o-one of them is, Moondancer is f-furious a-at you.” I said feeling drained suddenly from all the action of late.
“Well shoot Twi, you never mentioned havin anypony else as friends before. Ah know Lyra moved in last year and she ain't say (said) nothin either.” Applejack mused looking thoughtful.
also should have an apostrophe after "havin" (for the missing "G")
It’s odd to think I'm now related to all those ponies now, Fleur was practically my mother seeing how much she wanted to be apart (2 words) of my life and the DNA samples she hoofed over. Vinyl and Octavia were also mom and other mom since Twilight told me they were happily married, Doctor Whooves of all ponies was my only father.
Oh boy, hopefully she wasn't too intense about her love for humanity. I wasn't going to dismiss the mirror to the alternative version of Equestria wasn't apart (2 words) of the canon. So maybe someday when Sunset Shimmer decided to show her bacon haired tail, I could give Twilight the grand tour of the somewhat human world!
Ugh boys, you know it's okay....(to)…. love the fact that your surrogate mother was happy with her herd. Spike and I will have to talk about that at some point.
Rarity however was probably a different story, She probably had the vegetarian equivalent of ….(a)….beef with me. I was after all the one who had been pretending to be her sister for the last couple of days and that probably didn't sit well with the fashionista.
Rarity was a kind mare, generous even as is her element, but family is a matter in which those who are the purest....(comma) ….kindest people can become a eighth layer devil that Asmodeus himself would have to lock up in the infinite abyss just because it gave him nightmares.
“Hmm, I don’t know! But thats (apostrophe) kinda exciting isn’t it? I mean I always wanted a baby sister since Rarity is so much older than me, it's kinda hard to play with her outside because she’s so busy usually and doesn’t like being dirty.” Sweetie said lifting her head so both our foreheads were touching and giving me a smile, her right eye glowing like my left a molten green and blue color.
Sweetie seemed to fair (fare) no better than I when I looked her way, sweat was visible on her face and her belly was plotting with my own. She yawned heavily rubbing her right eye with a hoof, how she continued to walk I had no idea, some kind of hop walk thing that looked natural when she did it.
It's good that you've got proofreaders but they need to step up their game ALSO apart = separate from a part = a piece of a larger thing
“Warm Smile, we would never do that to anypony! Let alone somepony who was clearly lost in a new world.” Luna said agape, shocked to even think she or her sister would do that to someone so young.
Twilight stepped aside, removing Azure's hiding spot. She appeared to shrink, the large size of the princesses didn't really help her. "This is Azure, she is really talented and..."
"Oh Twilight, you know very well I only take unicorns as students," Celestia cut her in the middle of her sentence. "After all, I mostly teach magic and..." The princess didn't finish her sentence and Twilight was staring at her with an angry look she had never seen before.
Azure simply ran off the room crying. "Azure! Wait!" Twilight shouted, but the filly wasn't listening. Once Azure passed the doors, Twilight turned her sight to Celestia. "I can't believe you said that! Azure is one of the most talented..."
"Twilight, she might be able to learn the notion of magic, but it would be a waste as she cannot perform it." Celestia cut her once more with the look of a mother who's explaining natural stuff to a child. To her surprise, Twilight managed to look even angrier.
"Would you have taken me as a student if I hadn't been born a unicorn?" Twilight asked.
"Of course not Twilight, I..." Celestia stopped in mid-sentence, realizing what she just said.
Twilight eyes widened and she instinctively took a few steps back as tears were coming to her eyes. "I... I can't... I can't believe..." She turned around and ran off toward the doors.
"Twilight!" Celestia shouted.
The purple mare stopped in front of the doors and looked back. "I think... I think you have nothing left to teach me Princess," she said with a soft voice, tears flowing from her eyes freely. She crossed the doors, running after Azure.
“The Kingdom does not rule itself and after this I must catch up on paperwork.” She looked vaguely annoyed but resigned to the fate, she turned her pretty magenta eyes back to me.
I should of wrote 400 some more words so my word count says 69,000
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Death is a grumpy old and tired of bullshit dude
So... She told about Moondancer... Is she going to talk about Sunset and Starlight? Or Starswirl banishment and the pony of shadows? Tirek? The Fanfictions?
And if she want to make a religion, what better that the Jedi religion? Unless she want to make the ninja religion and praise the Log.
Very good chapter.
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It might be touch and go for Warm Smile, simply put she just doesn't know what to do with the information she has. Considering she is now in her own body and still a filly, she can only do so much unless she trains herself. but she also doesn't things to spiral out of control if she tells them about the big foes Twilight has to face.
Twilight remembering her friends was after she became a alicorn and didn't impact the timeline to any sort of degree, so in the moment she figured it was okay to tell her. Besides since Lyra is such a cool pony why not have her around
As for Starlight and Sunset, I havent thought that far but they will know the power of the Marshmallow Lord
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Exactly
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Yeah I know, I found two so chapters will be a lot better, I might even re upload them after they get edited
Wow... deep.
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on which part?
I’m just waiting for the time when the cmc meet up again, and apple bloom and scootaloo want to try kissing again. That is going to be all kinds of awkward.
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It so totally is
Which makes it great writing material for a slice of life~ Soon the Marshmallow duo will kiss everpony
YAY!!!!! MORE CHAPTERS!!!!!!
I thought that was Cadence?
https://m.You mean the Talk no Jutsu?
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Where do you think Candy got it from
More cmc herd please :)
Apart = separate from
A part = one of many / a piece of something
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Hehehe I got proof readers now so everything from chapter four and beyond is gonna be better
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When is the next chapter coming?
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I'm working on it these chapters seem to get longer and longer
Give it a week or two, I've been doing other things this week so it's been slower
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Looking forward to it :)
Ominous but heart warming
The three great sources of all change, all chaos and all the wonder and majesty of the new are thus:
Faith, who holds true that something is worth living for, that all the world has at its core something worthwhile that should be cherished and upheld.
Hope, who faces the darkness and fights it back, who ushers in miracles when all else has failed.
Love, who will tear apart the world and smash it together again, who will kill and nurture, who will change the very foundations of the world.
Made me think of if I was on the Titanic I would take all the doors off or anything else that floats and use it as a life raft.
I was crying during this whole scene.
Oh I know what it would be like.
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/126741/dash-of-humanity
That sounded like a cheesy pickup line!! Or a meme!!
also should have an apostrophe after "havin" (for the missing "G")
It's good that you've got proofreaders but they need to step up their game
ALSO
apart = separate from
a part = a piece of a larger thing
Ha!!! That’s a laugh!!!
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/23609/4/never-judge-a-book-by-its-cover/rejection#comment/9184088
translation: being cuckhold by your mother is happy buiness.
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