8974422 I was wondering that myself. I'm probably biased but I think I'm doing pretty well writing these pairing one-shots. :V
I'm just gonna assume it's people who see the cover, decide they hate one (or more) of the pairings involved, and drop a dislike and move along. It doesn't really bother me, I'm writing for myself and the people who are interested in these pairings. I'm just gonna keep at it and hope that eventually the likes outnumber the dislikes. :'D
oh thank god, I can endure and potentially like Twilight x Sunset even if that possibily means their universes are officially combined in this story, but for a second I feared it was Flash Sentry, not sure where that thought came from, but that is something that could have been a dealbreaker for me.
Nice, it seems Raritys time of thirty second dresses are over.
He lifted his head a bit, kissing along her cheek. “So how far are we taking this?” he breathed into her ear.
“As far as you want,” she replied, shaking a little with anticipation.
as far as a fanfiction goes, I hardly see anything that feels okay and moves foward that fast. While I noticed again that this is normally not exactly something I prefer in a story, you made me think of possible reasons why Rarity would move it foward so fast.
I would also normally say they could have gotten know each other more, but a big part of me thinks that it worked out, I don't think anyone of them is going to act like a jerk in your story later anyway.
I think I would have liked it to see some letters or meetings between them in your first story, showing that there already is a connection I mean. Maybe you can work in three or more letters?, showing them being pen pals or something? Now that I said it I can simply concentrate on the nice chapter,
In the movie it looks like Capper made the deeper connection to Rarity because she made him feel something he probably rarely felt up to that day and Rarity seems to have a few experiences here already and she is kind of desperate for romance situations, that and she just loves her romance stories I guess.
I missed the description and didn't expected the sex scene here, but after the suprise it was really nice, it just came somehow a bit out of nowhere. I hope my thoughts on this aren't looking uuhhhmmm mixed up if you know what I mean, i also hope i didn't gave you a wrong idea with my comment. I like to say that much in a story, but I can't exactly tell if I maybe give a wrong impression or something in english.
So now I finished it and it's nice, but even if it's diffuclt to decite I think that I liked the reactions and overall situation more in the first chapter with Rainbow and Night Glider. Not sure why that one was not mature and this suddenly is, but I liked how Rainbow acted. I wanted to say how she acted for once, but it happened a few times already, i Just keep remembering the times when some authors were telling me she had to keep her bragging personality in every situation, just like how Pinkie could never go away from being funny, goofy and as if she would never feel nervous.
While Rarity here got slightly closer to some cliches I think I remember right now it worked out to, I have "definitly" seen much, much worse. It wasn't even bad, I just have different tastes in my books, that is how you say it right?, with the pacing and everything.
9103737 I guess I just saw Rarity and Capper having a more spontaneous, passionate relationship than the others, hence it kinda moving fast into the sex scene. But then they realize how much they care for each other romantically and decide to stay together. Idk I guess it just comes from particular headcanons I have for the two of them. :') But it's perfectly alright for you to have different tastes, I still really appreciate seeing your perspective on my writing. I've definitely gotten into the habit of writing things a certain way and I like seeing how other people feel about it, it gives me a lot to think about when writing newer stories.
Why does this story have so many dislikes? I mean, it can't be that bad, right? ...Right?
8974422
I was wondering that myself. I'm probably biased but I think I'm doing pretty well writing these pairing one-shots. :V
I'm just gonna assume it's people who see the cover, decide they hate one (or more) of the pairings involved, and drop a dislike and move along. It doesn't really bother me, I'm writing for myself and the people who are interested in these pairings. I'm just gonna keep at it and hope that eventually the likes outnumber the dislikes. :'D
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That basically of it.
But I already said never judge a book by it cover.
So far I haven't rate yet. Not intil it little bit more written out.
oh thank god, I can endure and potentially like Twilight x Sunset even if that possibily means their universes are officially combined in this story, but for a second I feared it was Flash Sentry, not sure where that thought came from, but that is something that could have been a dealbreaker for me.
Nice, it seems Raritys time of thirty second dresses are over.
as far as a fanfiction goes, I hardly see anything that feels okay and moves foward that fast. While I noticed again that this is normally not exactly something I prefer in a story, you made me think of possible reasons why Rarity would move it foward so fast.
I would also normally say they could have gotten know each other more, but a big part of me thinks that it worked out, I don't think anyone of them is going to act like a jerk in your story later anyway.
I think I would have liked it to see some letters or meetings between them in your first story, showing that there already is a connection I mean. Maybe you can work in three or more letters?, showing them being pen pals or something?
Now that I said it I can simply concentrate on the nice chapter,
In the movie it looks like Capper made the deeper connection to Rarity because she made him feel something he probably rarely felt up to that day and Rarity seems to have a few experiences here already and she is kind of desperate for romance situations, that and she just loves her romance stories I guess.
I missed the description and didn't expected the sex scene here, but after the suprise it was really nice, it just came somehow a bit out of nowhere. I hope my thoughts on this aren't looking uuhhhmmm mixed up if you know what I mean, i also hope i didn't gave you a wrong idea with my comment. I like to say that much in a story, but I can't exactly tell if I maybe give a wrong impression or something in english.
So now I finished it and it's nice, but even if it's diffuclt to decite I think that I liked the reactions and overall situation more in the first chapter with Rainbow and Night Glider.
Not sure why that one was not mature and this suddenly is, but I liked how Rainbow acted. I wanted to say how she acted for once, but it happened a few times already, i Just keep remembering the times when some authors were telling me she had to keep her bragging personality in every situation, just like how Pinkie could never go away from being funny, goofy and as if she would never feel nervous.
While Rarity here got slightly closer to some cliches I think I remember right now it worked out to, I have "definitly" seen much, much worse.
It wasn't even bad, I just have different tastes in my books, that is how you say it right?, with the pacing and everything.
9103737
I guess I just saw Rarity and Capper having a more spontaneous, passionate relationship than the others, hence it kinda moving fast into the sex scene. But then they realize how much they care for each other romantically and decide to stay together. Idk I guess it just comes from particular headcanons I have for the two of them. :')
But it's perfectly alright for you to have different tastes, I still really appreciate seeing your perspective on my writing. I've definitely gotten into the habit of writing things a certain way and I like seeing how other people feel about it, it gives me a lot to think about when writing newer stories.