Scootaloo's being worried about her inability to fly, she's about to give up on everything, even give up trying to get her cutie mark. The only thing she needs is within her, all she need is to have faith to surpass every challange that gets on her life.With the help of her favorite flyer.
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i love it bro keep on writing its very good
977881 Yeah, I will, I was just listening to some music and I found a song that fits perfectly for a sequel, so the sequel must be done by tomorrow or the day after.
977896 Maybe you should just add more to this story so it could be longer it doesn't really seem to right you make a sequel for this but thats just me
aaaaaanyways i really love your story man keep it up ill be checking for updates 
I wonder how this will end!
< "MAEK MOAR!!!"
I know that a writer with this imagination can make something out of this! Like, i dunno, writing about what happened in the next... uhm... 3 years? That would be awesome!
You heard her, make a sequel! :3
977931 Hmm, maybe you're right. I'll see how to continue this but for now I'll be correcting some mistakes I made.
This is a good story, and your writing will improve with time, so don't stop
One thing I would suggest: Don't use 20% cooler or other similar phrases. It rarely helps a story, in fact normally it detracts from it.
Edit to add: I forgot to say, it is usually better to show things than to tell them, as the below commenter mentions.
hmm... the plot of this story is decent.
But it lacks descriptions to get your thoughts across.
Some enviroment settings.
And descriptions of their movement instead of telling their movement.
I think those 2 points would help this story greatly.
Cause as it is now, you're saying that they are sad, instead of showing us.
And that do kind of kill the mood. (for me atleast)
Other than that, keep up the good work.
978066 I'll try to make something out of this starting: Now!
978084 Thanks a lot for the advice.
978088 Roger that, on the next uploads I'll try to improve those points.
Thanks guy for pointing out things that need to be improved, I'll promise I'll try to make the other ones better.
Hey man really good job on this chapter as well hope to see a chapter 3
And hope that everything goes good for you bro
Great story so far, but you should really find an editor to help you with all the nuances of English. It's a complex language and getting the grammar and punctuation right without it being your mother tounge can be... irritating, or so I'm told.
Notwithstanding, a thumbs up and favourite to you sir!
989428 I'm already working on chapter 3 so it'll be finished soon. Thanks for your concern it's just a little depression, I'll be fine in short time
989857 It's good to see you liked it and about the editor thing I asked some of my friends but they weren't interested on the idea. So, I'll read again my school notes an examples for the punctuation facts.
I always asked myself: "What's behind Rainbow Dash and Scootaloo's private life? Do they have a family? Or had? Why is Scootaloo all alone? How did Rainbow Dash manage to live without a family (if she doesn't have one)? Is Scootaloo secretly Rainbow Dash's sister?" There's only one way to answer those questions: Ask directly Rainbow Dash
I'm just gonna D'aaaaw. After what i read, i really needed of this!
Another great chapter to this story
good job!
awww
awesome job dude awesome job *slowly claps*
1053740 Glad someone liked it. The ending was supposed to be different, but I ran out of ideas. Next chapter will be better.
I liked the story but it is a little hard to follow with some of the minor English mistakes. Such as some words are being used incorrectly or there is a better word to use.
I have never done this before but if want a proofreader, even if its just temporary, that English is there first language send me a PM and I'll be happy to. You don't have to if you don't want or you have found someone else or better.