Taking place during the time the Main 6 look for the Hippogryphs, and Tempest and Grubber going after Twilight, the Storm King arrives in Equestria for the first time in his life, making his true grand entrance to the land. While he is alone, he reveals his intentions behind why he does what he does, as well as what sort of villain he truly is.
Note: Even though this will be a very dark and sad story, there will be some slight comedic moments to compliment the contributions of Joe Ballarini, who co-wrote the movie’s story with Meghan McCarthy.
This cover art was done by artist Leondude.
Edited by Norm De Plume on January 21, 2021.
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Aside from the inconsistent use of past/present tense, I got to say that I quite enjoyed this fic. It feels very in character for the Storm King and wouldn't be too out of place if it had been in the actual movie.
The butterfly-eating scene and the random fourth wall break got the most reaction out of me personally, and I think the CMC scene would have worked pretty well for the movie.
Not bad. Not bad at all.
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Thank you both. Your feedback means a lot to me, and I’m glad you enjoyed it.
Ashamed what happened to the storm king though, great story
Wow, this ties the comics and the movie together almost perfectly. I mean, it dragged a little in some places, but the Storm King was totally in character.
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Thank you.
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I’m glad you like it. I think it definitely defines who he is as a character and what kind of villain he is.
I’m glad that you also told me that he was in character.
Good story.
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Thanks. I worked really hard on it.
Very interesting
Aside from the inconsistent tenses, I actually really enjoyed this. When the Storm King first appeared out of the airship, I thought of General Grievous at first. Look at the descriptions and tell me I'm wrong.
I liked the darker side to him and the malicious nature to him. It further fleshes him out and doesn't make him as much if a doofus as he was in the movie. I accept this as headcanon now.
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Thanks. I’m glad you liked it.
I think this story definitely fleshes him out too.
Who’s General Grievous?
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Dude! Star Wars! From the prequels! You haven't heard of the clone wars, or Revenge of the Sith? He is, like, the mostest awesomest character from the prequels, despite not having a lot of screen time.
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I have. I just never watched them before.
Thanks for the info.
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Thanks for showing me the video.
What did you think of the story, by the way?
Great, and I agree Storm King should've been more fleshed out and these scenes would've been perfect. But then again they couldn't afford to switch between the Mane 6, Tempest and Grubber, and the Storm King thinking it would drag out or something.
I have never seen MLP The Movie [And it's possible that I will not see it because I will not want it] but... I think, this is good, short story :)
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Thanks.
This is an interesting take on the Storm King's arrival in Canterlot and what his motives could be. Thank you for showing me this.
I loved it, they should have done something similar to this in the movie!
And im curious..........did you make the picture for the story?
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You’re welcome.
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The picture for the title was made by artist Koga13, and let me tell you, he did a fantastic job on it.
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Any improvements, now?
I approve. 'Tis enough, 'Twill serve.
This was a great way to introduce the Storm King. Kind of wish they did this in the movie.
O.O ooooooooookaaaaaaaayyyyy. Moving on.
Um, Storm King collecting taxes and plundering are the same thing. What’s your point?
This fic was getting boring as I read on, until Storm King got into his personal monologue with the princess...and then my interest spiked up. Overall, this was a good fic.
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The part where he breaks the fourth wall was mostly meant for comedic purposes, and I thought it fit his character perfectly.
The point in the plundering part is that he craves to do more than just sit around all day. Do some excitement.
How was it getting boring, exactly?
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It’s a matter of personal taste. Descriptions that are dragged on for too long makes me fall asleep. However, I prefer this than the other extreme where authors provide no descriptions and tell instead of show. Finding the perfect balance between the two is challenging, but your approaching it. Just gotta keep practicing
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Oh. Thank you.
It does remind me that I really wish something like this could’ve been done with the actual movie. It wouldn’t have been too out of place either.
Yeah, I think you made that abundantly clear in the movie
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Don't you dare hurt my favorite little fillies
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Amazing indeed...
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Like all villains do...
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Um, what
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Why would you mind
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Crap...
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Yeah about that...
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Is it now
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Very well done one-shot...I could almost feel the fear and emotion from this chapter
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This definitely gives an interesting perspective on the storm king. Given his personality, it almost gives him a minor Joker mentality. SK definitely seems like an enemy who only wants to watch the world burn, too.:)
Cool dark story! :D
Very in character for the Storm King. I could see him doing every bit of this.
I don't doubt the Storm King's sadism stretches this far, and if it does, Equestria's definitely better off without him. Since he hates cute I could imagine if he'd turned the Mane 6 to stone he'd have smashed Fluttershy to pieces. Probably Rainbow Dash, Rarity, and Twilight too. And who knows what he might have done to Sweetie Belle?
I kinda wish he'd gotten a villain song, or got more screentime, but at least he had more screentime and lines than the other evil king who died.
Wow, this needed to be in the movie!
Oh shut up! *pointing a plasma pistol at Storm King and shoot him in the face*
Oh yeah? Why not you talk to Arnold Schwarzenegger, you ugly mother-trucker?
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It’s a reference. And it comes from the Three Stooges.
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Oh!
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Ahh, okay.
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I really put that there for the laughs. People put references of other shows and movies into their MLP fanfics all the time. The characters don’t even know what they’re referencing, ironically.