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A Warning to Others

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Pinkie Pie feeds Fluttershy some pony-bacon cupcakes. Fluttershy knows exactly what they are, and she likes them anyway. They decide to become vigilante cannibal serial killers, as you do. But have they bitten off more than they can chew? And what will happen when Twilight finds out?

Based super-loosely on KingMoriarty's Horsemeat for the Springtime-Sequel-Slash-Sandbox Switcheroo contest. Gore and violence are low-key in execution, but super disturbing in concept.

Edited by Scoots.

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Comments ( 38 )

Highly disturbing, and it does have a fairly steep entry requirement in terms of character deviation, but the story is sound. Little details like Applejack's brief bout of cutie pox help alleviate the horror. All told, this makes for a great guilty pleasure fic. I feel bad about enjoying it, but I still enjoyed it.

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ye..a..err...you know the...one thing...
scuse me for a sec

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Thanks!

I feel bad about enjoying it, but I still enjoyed it.

Imagine how I feel having written it. :rainbowlaugh:

I say that's a nice comic, I didn't get disturbed, not because I want to be edgy, but I think criminals and douchebags that are the most hated people in the world should deserve what they deserve, since they're willingly do what they do to make others life more of a hell. And I got used to seeing animals opened up, so it's a normal thing for for me. Also, I think meat is meat, it doesn't matter where it comes from, only matters what you hunt down. In other words, if I would be in a situation where someone would serve me up human meat, I would taste the meat if it's well cooked then ask who the person was.

Humor just adds to the quality:)

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This response is exactly what I didn't want from this story, and makes me consider rescinding it. :fluttercry:

I didn't think I needed to say that I don't advocate vigilante cannibal serial killing, I mean, that's absurd, right? But either you're trolling me (I'm too sleepy to tell) or I do. :facehoof:

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I mean, I probably won't? I hate writing stories with clear messages, so I have to accept being misinterpreted sometimes. And... IDK I have a super-tender conscience, so writing transgressive stories gives me some release from being wound up so tight all the time. :facehoof: I trust the reader to bring their own morals to the story. Which creates problems if the reader's conscience is distorted. Fiction is a mirror, I suppose.

The only story I've rescinded for moral reasons is Tender Blood, and I'm still torn about that. One has certain fantasies that may not be proper fantasies. :raritycry: Even if in these fantasies one is the semi-willing victim, and furthermore one has made the sacrifice of portraying oneself as Trenderhoof. :duck:

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Woah there, I never said I want to be a serial killer cannibal, it wasn't the story that changed my mind about cannibalism, I just said I have nothing wrong with that. I just say that in my eye, if people want to make others life much more miserable or ruin them, it's less wrong to have them gone, not that I'm bullied or anything like that, but that's just my point of view. It's not that I don't believe in reformation, but when you see a person simply can't change their bad intentions, no matter how many chances you gave him/her, what's the point of feeling guilty over that person? Cannibalism comes here, because I like if everything is used, I'm more of a maximalist (and also a bit curious how it tastes, since I like meats alot). It's not that I can't be kind or a good friend, I'm almost always like that, I never killed anyone and I don't intend to until I have a reason for that. I just think people who decide to make very bad decisions against people should deserve punishment for their actions. For me, good and evil are just point of views, in the end, we are neither of them.

Don't worry, just because I enjoyed this comic, you shouldn't stop doing these if you like them. Life is not all about rainbows and butterflies, it's good to read something that take serious stuff and succesfully write it down in a funny way, without becoming cringy or cliché full. Even though it's about ponies:D

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I notice that there’s an offscreen death before the start of the story and an offscreen death after the end of the story. Was that intentional?

Um... sure! Sure it totally was. :trixieshiftright:

I wouldn't be too sure about Raw Deal; I had an idea that if this story did well I might write a sequel about what happens in Raw Deal's camp. The short version is 'everything goes apocalyptically teats up'. Of course, with my lack of concern for the concept of genre, the sequel would be more war/adventure than horror. But whatever.

Of course I can't tell if this has done well yet. A lot of my stories have a pretty long tail; its more common with clop where people are looking for their fetishes, but it happened with Horseraiser, too.

Also, good lord, what about if a good Changeling such as Thorax or Ocellus happened to stumble across bug spray? It is a ridiculously-common household item after all.

Once again, I didn't think a world building element through deeply enough. :facehoof: I just needed a way Fluttershy could use her existing talents to defeat Chryssie.

In my defense, I think the bug spray potion is more of a boutique item; ponies seem to have a high magical 'tech' level but less of a mass production culture than we do. Still, it exists, and the Changelings learning about it might make an interesting story.

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I mean, fair enough. I'm... Christian-ish, and believe in good and evil, but if you don't that's... possibly okay? :fluttershysad: I'm not going to argue about it, anyway.

Anyway I'm glad you enjoyed the story and that it made you think! :yay:

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Well, I always like to think about psychological stuff like these, I find interest in them.

I can understand if you're christian, though cannibalism is highly forbidden in it. I find religions the limiters of life, so I don't really want to follow them. I also don't really like to be called 'God's sheep'.

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Technically...

Whoever eats my flesh and drinks my blood has eternal life, and I will raise them up at the last day. (John 6:54)

And in context people are horrified by this, like he meant it literally. Many denominations believe in either transubstantiation or real presence in communion.

But that's in a specific ritual context; generally its frowned upon yes. :trollestia:

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Well, honestly I just remembered a scene in Robinson Crusoe where Friday eats the heart and Robin comment on it later that it's forbidden and against God. Also, bread and wine are said to be God's body and God's blood, so it really likes to joke around with that concept.

The main thing why people find it highly disturbing is the fact that it is not a daily thing.

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Interestingly, in some admittedly very cursory research, I cannot find any verse that specifically forbids cannibalism! Though there are several that portray it as a negative experience.

Of course, the Bible is a terrible instruction manual, in desperate need of errata, and I think you'd be hard pressed to find an Abrahamic sect that endorsed cannibalism outside the context of the sacrament of communion. I mean, there are probably a couple, just not big ones.

Still, its a curious omission. :trixieshiftright:

The main thing why people find it highly disturbing is the fact that it is not a daily thing.

Well, it can be a vector for prion disease, as among the Fore people. Though IIRC that's specifically from eating brains, and yes, I have researched this. Its hardly my first horror story about cannibalism; just my first pony one. :trollestia:

Anyway, this conversation turned interesting. :twilightsheepish:

This fic was the ACTUAL BEST. Love it love it love it; laughed my ass off every step of the way!! :twilightsmile::heart:

“There are no such things as Shadowbolts, silly,” said Pinkie Pie.

Pffft. Right? Where do ponies come up with this stuff? :rainbowlaugh:

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Yeah, it was a good conversation.

Typically horse meat is pretty lean. It's kind of why horse steaks aren't that great. That said I had fun with the story and in a I way kind of reminded me at times of certain Tales from the Crypt stories.

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But... but... the ponies are so fat! :raritycry: Stupid reality.

Anyway, the Tales from the Crypt comparison is high praise. Thank you! :raritywink:

Dark, but also very humorous. You get a thumbs-up. :)

This is absolutely horrible and I fucking love it.

This story is horrific and I genuinely didn't enjoy it. However, I greatly appreciate all the technical details, the studious attempts to make sure we don't feel bad about any of the victims, and especially the cutie pox joke.

Technically, a solid piece of work. In terms of subject matter, something I would never have read if I didn't have a passing curiosity in knowing what you did for the contest, not to mention dregging up one of the stories I'm most disappointed with and, to salt the wound, doing a much better job of it than I did back in those novice days.

So, good job, I guess.

Great story! Love it. It was very well done.

Have a great day!!!!!

Ps love the cover picture!

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Nope. Deathcount is only ††

The problem with Redpill was, that he should have offered a blue one as well....

This needs more upvotes. A few spelling errors here and there but a solid story.

I absolutely loved Ocellus in this.

"Oh My God! It is Chrysalis. I must eat her."


Twilight pieced it together so quickly.

“I don’t think those are party cannons, Pinkie,” said Fluttershy, flapping after her. The misery and defeat in the body language of Raw Deal’s slaves should have affected her more, but even under Twilight’s care, her love was returning only very slowly. Still, she knew right from wrong.

You know, this is the entire basis for my headcanon that Equestria is about to invent guns. If all cannons were party cannons, the modifier party would not need to be there, therefore, it is safe to assume that cannons exist in Equestria.

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The show is deliberately inconsistent about tech level, but when I have to take the setting seriously, I tend to put it at Europe somewhere between 1850 and 1910. The extensive use of airships and trains makes advanced firearms plausible to me. And kkat already did a lot of work on how ponies might shoot guns; though I prefer the bite trigger to pulling the trigger with one's tongue. :rainbowlaugh:

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That is also something I have thought about, admittedly, only briefly. I imagine the firearm itself would be mounted with a sort of harness to a shoulder, sights extending sideways, and all the controls being oversized. A mouth trigger would be a must, and I imagine magazines would have some sort of wire extention to allow manipulation without fine motions.

I would very much like this to be a series please.
Also, I would have joined them when they were going after Teddy Bear. :twilightangry2:

She always wondered what it was like to turn evil. Was this how it worked? Just finding something that was wrong that you wanted so badly that you were willing to do it anyway?

Speaking from experience, sometimes but usually it means you're impulsive.

I like it better than those pony.mov vids.
But I noticed most targets were OCs. I guess to avoid changing Equestria too much?

“Hush now, quiet now, it’s time to lay your sleepy head,” sang Fluttershy, stroking her mane. “Hush now, quiet now, it’s time to go to bed.”

I recognize that from Bronywriter's Serial Killer Rarity story.

Congratulations, your story has the (dubious) honor of being the 250th added to my bookshelf titled "Too Darned Weird.":pinkiehappy::scootangel::pinkiecrazy::yay:

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If the shows I've seen on Discovery and Animal Planet (and part of an episode of Supernatural I saw once) are to be believed, Humans taste like pork. It'd probably taste like it'd gone off though.

As to your views on justice, it might interest you to know that some people say child predators and others who victimize children are frequently better off getting the death penalty, because it separates them from other rapists and murderers. And people who victimize children are hated even by them. Google "Katie's Revenge" if you don't believe me. Or look at the real life section of the "Friend to All Children" TVtropes page, which is where I learned it.

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I don’t remember what views on justice were expressed in this, but the views expressed by my characters are not necessarily my own. I suspect especially in a story where the MCs are serial killers. :rainbowwild: I’m a writer, Jim, not a philosophy major. :moustache:

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I know, I'm not saying I agree with it, just that even violent killers hate child predators.

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