Ask the General Sherman Wannabe about joining the Union, Anarcho-syndicalism, and doing fun stuff in Georgia.
Every two nights, Twilight Sparkle wakes from her sleep as a bushy haired human named Hermione Granger. What will become of the Golden Trio now that their smart third has leadership experience in a world of friendship and idealism? What will happen to the Golden Trio's world when she attempts to save it? In a world of racism, cynicism, and darkness that impacts even Equestrians, will love and harmony triumph?
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Huh. Haven't read it yet, but I haven't seen this scenario before...
Though it WOULD explain SPEW...
Edit: Okay, I just read it. And I will be putting it under watch.
Ok that was not bad. Let's see where it leads.
I saw this premise in the Idea Exchange, and it looked interesting; I'm definitely watching this!
As it is right now, though, it looks like you're just retreading the steps of canon with a less-socially-awkward Twilight. I'm not sure why she'd be less awkward, though - at age 11, Hermione (as far as we know) hasn't found any friends either; in several months, she'll be crying at the Halloween Feast for lack of them. I'm not sure what you're planning to do here?
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Hermione is way more socially isolated than Twilight. Hermione's life thus far has given her zippety doo dah in the way of friends. Twilight's at the start of the story has given her three close friends, one mentor who she absolutely adores, and about five less close friends. She does have more perspective, and also note how Canon Twilight also thought that all her best friends were crazy at this point in the story. Hermione!Twilight wants friends, but isn't absolutely desperate for them in Twilight's life. In Hermione's life, after having had her appetite whetted by the coming events, she might be a lot more desperate for friendship on that side.
As for retreading the canon, no. I will be making noticeable changes at least as soon as the train ride. The great, big, you could drive the Hogwarts Express or a changeling army through them changes, will happen at a fight with Voldemort.
I loved the premise, but after reading this, I have to say that it needs a lot of work. It moves really fast, skips over a lot, and transitions abruptly between scenes without any indication that the current one is about to end. I want to love this story, but I just can't. I'll be putting it under watch anyway, just because I'm still curious about what happens next, but I seriously advise you to do some more work on it.
Not trying to be offensive or anything. Just honest.
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Hey, thanks. Can you tell me what parts I should add?
*thinks about it for a second.* Oh, I should make Twilight less of the Overly Sarcastic Productions definition of a Mary Sue. Well, that makes things simpler. Any ideas for scenes with characters that aren't her?
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Thanks! I'm actually working on chapter 2, but I need to give this 11/22 year old grownup most of the way to archmage some opponents that will actually trouble her. Nightmare Moon, perhaps? Or I need to shift perspectives to someone who's not doing as well as her.
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I've got it. A later baddie can turn up in a role as a more moderate antagonist.