8981181
this is the kind of commentary i was hoping to get. i will try to correct all previous grammar mistakes and lower the use of parentheses so thanks for pointing them out. the prologue chapter was meant to be a sort of "life flashing before my eyes" kind of chapter, since the main character is being killed as he narrates, it is as if time is slowing down for him to reflect on his life while also talking to us simultaneously.
thanks for the feedback. i will try to put it to good use. i hope you give me more comments like this so i can better my writing!
stay frosty!

8981181
comments like yours are always appreciated. don't worry for leaving walls of text in the comments. for me, it is better if you are detailed when trying to explain when i am doing something wrong. i can get sloppy sometimes so to know what i can do to improve is always welcomed.

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Can’t wait to the next chapter

I like the character as well as the story with the small details such as the metal being heated and doing what it takes to survive. more chapters please

Mare nodded diligently only to teleport back to the road. Somber then directed his now focused and determined glance to aura, who now had a conflicted and confused glance towards the human. "Aura, it may be a longshot but use your scouting spell again. See if you can see any other cargo nearby. We have to salvage all that we can before we get out of here. It would be a shame if we lose anything else just because we weren't thorough". It took a few second for her to recognize her order. "You got it boss-man". Giving the human one last confused look, she shook her head while running back into the forest and disappearing from sight.

I don't think ponies say man anywhere. But it's you're story after all.

9230469
well they have to call the humans something other than humans right? calling him man it is just to say his gender. the say way they say foal, or stallion or mare, they call male humans men. at least that was my reasoning.

9230469
Actually they said it in Slice of Life.