In the land of Equestria, the Wrath of Achilles comes. Sing, O Muse, of that rage that sent so many souls down to the dreary House of Death. Sing to me, O Muse! of the wrath that brought Ponykind to its knees.
8772051 well, you know how dreams are, sometimes you know things that should be impossible to know or act certain ways that would be out of the ordinary for you. all in all, i applied allot of dream logic in the dream sequence. if you think it should be addressed in the story i can edit it later.
8772232 more like a percy jackson crossover without percy jackson :D it will have elements of both the books series and the iliad as well so if you like the iliad or percy jackson stick around!
Humans could be really deadly and powerful when trained properly, but even the most trained and disciplined of humans could ever match a common soldier in terms discipline and efficiency, so armoring a human up was rather pointless and a waste of time.
I think this is supposed to be couldn't ever match a common soldier
8773243 Your main character would take too have of an edit to fit into the group genre and I'd rather not you do that if your current readers like what he is currently. But if you want to change him, the only things required are: The Void being mentioned, a Merchant or Void Dweller being the cause of the main character being sent into Equestria and given new powers.
Having a second read into the story, I think I've messed up and forgot you did mention a void.
Twilight gave the human a look she couldn't quite place.
It was somewhere between complete adoration and caring worry, as if she was really glad to see him but also incredibly worried of him being here.
pretty much confirms that this is a Twilight x Human fanfic. I wonder how Twilight’s friends would react to finding out that their friend has a crush on a demigod from another plane of existence. Also on how they would react to finding out just WHAT a demigod is.
8774284 Well, if you DO decide to do that, then just so long as all the ponies that Noah is dating know about each other and are comfortable with being part of Noah’s harem, then I won’t judge.
A ”Your human and You” story starring a demigod, i am sold
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glad to see that you like it!
but wait! the best is yet to come!
You’re actually doing pretty well for a first fanfic. A few grammatical errors but that can easily be fixed.
However, I have to say, how can Celestia get a good look of Noah’s face when he’s wearing that helmet?
Also, I hope the Greek Gods find out what’s going on and unleash their wrath on Equestria.
I like the idea but I’ll wait for more chapters to read, until then you have my attention.
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well, you know how dreams are, sometimes you know things that should be impossible to know or act certain ways that would be out of the ordinary for you.
all in all, i applied allot of dream logic in the dream sequence.
if you think it should be addressed in the story i can edit it later.
8772232
more like a percy jackson crossover without percy jackson :D
it will have elements of both the books series and the iliad as well so if you like the iliad or percy jackson stick around!
Did you read the Displaced lore or did you post it in there because of the word 'Displaced.'
My feed is flooded with your story.
I think this is supposed to be couldn't ever match a common soldier
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yeah you're right...i better get to fixing that.
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...maybe
8773009
Because right now, there are no Displaced elements in your story other than 'take character A and place into World B'
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yeah...sorry about that.
what could i add to make this story worthy of being a "displaced" story?
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Your main character would take too have of an edit to fit into the group genre and I'd rather not you do that if your current readers like what he is currently. But if you want to change him, the only things required are: The Void being mentioned, a Merchant or Void Dweller being the cause of the main character being sent into Equestria and given new powers.
Having a second read into the story, I think I've messed up and forgot you did mention a void.
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i am sorry, i don't quite follow what you mean.
hmmmmm, I wonder if he could get humans to follow him to battle and/or clear the fag that clouds their minds into a free-thinking people.
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maybe...it could happen.
you will have to wait and see. :D
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Good luck with your story! ^^
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Yeah, I think that this:-
pretty much confirms that this is a Twilight x Human fanfic. I wonder how Twilight’s friends would react to finding out that their friend has a crush on a demigod from another plane of existence. Also on how they would react to finding out just WHAT a demigod is.
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i am currently experimenting on the idea of a multiple paring for noah but i am not sure if i will go that direction just yet.
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Well, if you DO decide to do that, then just so long as all the ponies that Noah is dating know about each other and are comfortable with being part of Noah’s harem, then I won’t judge.
that this using POV gives me a good signal.