It's fascinating when you get displaced, especially when I gain the powers of the character. I was dressed as the all-powerful Majin Android 21. But creating a family and Helping to train and guide them will be sweet. But if anyone ever touches my little dinky or my honey muffin I'll hunt them down, beat them, heal them and rip them to Pieces over and over
Until I finally decide to have enough fun and turn them into candy for my sweet tooth.😈
YAAAAAAAAYYYYYYY ANDROID 21 WOO HOO!!!
You might want to include a status in your story description about cross-overs, that way you'll avoid getting questions or messages about it.
she's so cute that it almost hurts..... almost.
Finally a android 21 story I've been waiting for a good one ever since the character was introduced.
that sounds like she starts an herd, or Derpy is her wife and has two children.
In that chase I hope you write a different Sparkler, I don't like her attitude most of the time.
This is good so far. Now just add some “don’t buck with mama!” Moments and we got a party.
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Well i do like it . Not a bad choice of transformation, but beyond the images you placed into it. In truth that was not needed. Most fans are aware what those techniques are, if not you could easily pount them to the Dragon Ball wiki site. Still you will have to reveal her arrival point in that world, as it will help readers familiarize with the moment of time.
Nice story!
Your character is quite OP but really likeable
I have only read Chapter 1 but I am hooked ^^"
So this is after Nightmare Moons first defeat
ergo no chance for this Displaced to get stoned I approve :D
sincerly
J
Huh
the birth of a dinky cute baby unicorn :D
heartwarming.
Does she use her wishes at all? not even for emergency supplies like Senzu beans?
overall very nice story and great that ponies also can unlock Ki or in this case Chi
I wonder how strong the natives in this dimension can get I hope not stronger than Baby because even Frieza strength level would be dangerous for the planet itself...
How does Celestia compare? As I see it we are only 8-12 years from the storyline in which Nightmare Moon comes back from the Moon, looking forward to it... By the way does Android 21 age? I believe because of Boo Cells not... because telling your partner of your immortality is a must in my eyes... or they wonder why they grow old and you not...
sincerly
J
Wait.. Did.. did you just delete comments that contained constructive criticism? You shouldn't ignore those sort of comments, trust me, you don't want to be those types of writers whose storys and their future creations end up getting alot of thumbs down simply because you couldn't take harmless constructive criticism.
It's good but your grammar needs work and at some points it seems like an info dump.
More!
Not bad, but you need an editor/proof-reader.
Also, it's 'Capsule Corp'.
Aside from grammar issues this was a great start.
Looking forward to more
Holy mother of balls that bad grammar.
Can’t wait to see what happens next
Man awesome story can't wait for the next chapter
Android 21? Free like and follow from me.
Grammar could use some tweaking but other than that I really want to see what happens next.
Write you fool… I must have more.( in all seriousness write a chapter or tell us it’s dead)
it's been two years man where is the next blasted chapter
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The last chapter was posted on February 27, 2018
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Though it feels that long
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Oh,okay
The story is okay grammar could use some work
dawww!! *heart ASPLODES seeing dinky*
I like the start of it and would like to see more.
update this please
this is so good
please continue on with this more
at the very least 18 more chapters
please
any idea when we can expect an update and new chapter?
Why is it cancelled?
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If it cancelled, expect it to never update again lol
Porque
i love this so much
NNNOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO, WHY IS THIS STORY CANCELED?!
Dang so many of story of this author got cancel is he or ahe gone???