Sorry all, between Google Docs giving me issues and real life kicking me in the nuts I was late to editing this and that made the author late to posting.
this cliff hanger alone makes me need to know more and wonder what worlds will he show and if it more then 5 he can pull out a memory holding item for each life he lived from the time he spent in the time chamber all the places from his prospective and they will see all the monsters he faced i can see them shitting them selves and maybe the captains second guess fighting him out of fear
but as other writers I have read pointed out how is it that Nightmare Moon in the first episode was able to speak perfect modern English but Princess Luna still spoke like it was when she first went away?
because the Ye old English is actually royal speak thus meaning Luna (post purge pre nmn) was saying in normal speaking dialect for royals to their subjects (don't understand why nm went to commoner speak but ehh) so when Luna was apologizing to Celestia in the castle she thought it was just her and her sister not observing surroundings (and I mean could you with adrenaline and past memories pumping through you cause at the time Luna was terrified cause she was thinking at the time that her sister was going to banish her to the moon again but instead just went into an apology) so she would have no idea that there were commoners around (aka main six) so yeah that's how it makes sense to me
Should definitely not pick dmc.... of course the half angel will go right out the window when they hear half demon .... they might find skyrim interesting as him being dovahkin especially spike..... definitely star wars Luna would get a kick out of that one .... being a avatar will put him in celestias good graces. Hymn ... final fantasy xv? can't remember which one you used to get espers but empress guard is that empress remidi?... I hope he can get a carbuncle for fluttershy.. in your face angel... and Naruto should entertain the girls
9556718 I'm talking about Dishonored with Empress Jessamine oh, he doesn't have any powers from Final Fantasy because I've never played Final Fantasy unfortunately so I didn't want to give him powers without knowing what they were and how they worked. I didn't want to do a disservice to the large fan base at Final Fantasy has by giving him powers series I know nothing about
9556843 No he does not have anything from that universe but I am thinking about showing them stuff from Bleach because I feel like that would be equally hilarious given the right context
9556884 Show them Kenpachi, please! Kenpachi beats a character that can create things with his mind, he basically defeated a Discord from another universe.
you can almost just feel how much epicness that can be brought forward like a tingle down your spine and once they have there spar i think that he should release a wave of power and ask are you sure with a grin that adds to the intimidation so many tingles lol
The others agreed well enough after Luna said her piece and most of them look like they were okay with it, however Rainbow Dash, fat pony and the male unicorn captain we're all giving me the stink-eye.
I like a good self-insert power trip like the next person... that being said, this is not a good self-insert power trip. This is OP taken too far. Too many powers. Next time try following the phrase "Less is More" when it comes to the powers department. Also, rushed writing, barely-there character development and otherwise an overdone trope.
Good grammar though. Writing needs to improve only a little bit but otherwise it's just a bit juvenile.
Maybe lessen the number of powers available, have character start with one... then have to journey/quest/earn the others? Just my opinion. Did not hit thumbs-down... just didn't like.
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Alright then, you no longer have access to all of your powers
So he is no longer has some of gods' power? Wonder why the author suddenly decide to tone down his OP character. (seem strange for an OP story) I just have to wait and see, hope it will be an interesting plot.
9947127 I did not run out of ideas I just finally made a solid decision on how I want the story to go and after much thought and consideration I came to the decision that this was the best course of action to take
9947141 so, I'm guessing all the different "worlds" that jack had included in this chapter are the conclusive be all end all of where this story is going, like that one fic I remember but I think the author dropped the entire fandom at some point, it was never finished but he had included like 7 worlds and it worked out for like 2 chapters (after a chapter like this telling about the worlds which was after two or three chapters of similar to this of introduction but with differences like the mc being a male alicorn and could summon Arvvak but instead of bone horse he got ghost wolf) that were awesome but then he left, I sincerely hope you don't end up that way my friend Talion or the way of the talion in tear of graces videos about the middle earth series.
Well, at least I don't have to say it myself.
Very good to see this again.
Thank god its back!!
Sorry all, between Google Docs giving me issues and real life kicking me in the nuts I was late to editing this and that made the author late to posting.
I ask for you alls forgiveness
MORE PLEAS!!!!!!!!!!!
this cliff hanger alone makes me need to know more and wonder what worlds will he show and if it more then 5 he can pull out a memory holding item for each life he lived from the time he spent in the time chamber all the places from his prospective and they will see all the monsters he faced i can see them shitting them selves and maybe the captains second guess fighting him out of fear
because the Ye old English is actually royal speak thus meaning Luna (post purge pre nmn) was saying in normal speaking dialect for royals to their subjects (don't understand why nm went to commoner speak but ehh) so when Luna was apologizing to Celestia in the castle she thought it was just her and her sister not observing surroundings (and I mean could you with adrenaline and past memories pumping through you cause at the time Luna was terrified cause she was thinking at the time that her sister was going to banish her to the moon again but instead just went into an apology) so she would have no idea that there were commoners around (aka main six) so yeah that's how it makes sense to me
More plz :)
Should definitely not pick dmc.... of course the half angel will go right out the window when they hear half demon .... they might find skyrim interesting as him being dovahkin especially spike..... definitely star wars Luna would get a kick out of that one .... being a avatar will put him in celestias good graces. Hymn ... final fantasy xv? can't remember which one you used to get espers but empress guard is that empress remidi?... I hope he can get a carbuncle for fluttershy.. in your face angel... and Naruto should entertain the girls
Essa história é uma das mais fodas que eu já li!!!! Espero ansiosamente pelo próximo capítulo!!!!!!
9556718
I'm talking about Dishonored with Empress Jessamine oh, he doesn't have any powers from Final Fantasy because I've never played Final Fantasy unfortunately so I didn't want to give him powers without knowing what they were and how they worked. I didn't want to do a disservice to the large fan base at Final Fantasy has by giving him powers series I know nothing about
9556718
Also your suggestions about what lives I should show them is appreciated and I will be taken under consideration
9556788
yeah cause if he shows the wrong one he could be in hot water one way or another
I read the title of this story, and all I can think about is this video
9556829
I'm not going to lie that video made me laugh so thank you for that
9556788
Did he get anything from the Hellsing Universe? I can't remember! If he did then showing them Alucard would be Hilarious!
9556843
No he does not have anything from that universe but I am thinking about showing them stuff from Bleach because I feel like that would be equally hilarious given the right context
Can anyone else hear your mind blown coming soon
9556884
Agreed!
9556884
Show them Kenpachi, please! Kenpachi beats a character that can create things with his mind, he basically defeated a Discord from another universe.
can't wait for it to get into the real story gonna be good
do more bruh!
you can almost just feel how much epicness that can be brought forward like a tingle down your spine and once they have there spar i think that he should release a wave of power and ask are you sure with a grin that adds to the intimidation so many tingles lol
is fat pony suppose to be bat pony?
9560487
Yes thank you just fixed that
I like a good self-insert power trip like the next person... that being said, this is not a good self-insert power trip. This is OP taken too far. Too many powers. Next time try following the phrase "Less is More" when it comes to the powers department. Also, rushed writing, barely-there character development and otherwise an overdone trope.
Good grammar though. Writing needs to improve only a little bit but otherwise it's just a bit juvenile.
Maybe lessen the number of powers available, have character start with one... then have to journey/quest/earn the others? Just my opinion. Did not hit thumbs-down... just didn't like.
THE MEANING OF LIFE IS 42
Do more please please please more please it is good no great
I want to see this man snap
Great job keep it up
When are you going to post the nexs chapter to i have pwers of a god
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me too
I posted a Blog today regarding this story please check it out
Your fourth thing ain't showing
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Go to my user page and then blogs and it's the first one
Hope everything turns alright for you Talion
So he is no longer has some of gods' power? Wonder why the author suddenly decide to tone down his OP character. (seem strange for an OP story) I just have to wait and see, hope it will be an interesting plot.
.....Damnit!!!!!
9947055
the author ran out of ideas so he\she re-wrote this chapter so we can continue without starting over.
9947127
I did not run out of ideas I just finally made a solid decision on how I want the story to go and after much thought and consideration I came to the decision that this was the best course of action to take
9947141
so, I'm guessing all the different "worlds" that jack had included in this chapter are the conclusive be all end all of where this story is going, like that one fic I remember but I think the author dropped the entire fandom at some point, it was never finished but he had included like 7 worlds and it worked out for like 2 chapters (after a chapter like this telling about the worlds which was after two or three chapters of similar to this of introduction but with differences like the mc being a male alicorn and could summon Arvvak but instead of bone horse he got ghost wolf) that were awesome but then he left, I sincerely hope you don't end up that way my friend Talion or the way of the talion in tear of graces videos about the middle earth series.
Me: and "the plot" thicken
Alucard: Ooo catty😈😈😈😈😈