On a peaceful day with nothing to do, Twilight realises it's been a while since she's last seen her own friend Sunset Shimmer. When she goes to visit her, Sunset confesses that she's ready to return to Equestria and make amends with Princess Celestia. Once back in her old homeworld, Twilight, Spike and her friends accompany her to Canterlot to do so.
Unfortunately their plans are put on hold when in the desert of Somnambula, in the deepest tombs, an ancient evil awakens. Someone that has deadly plans for the ponies of Equestria...
Chapters (4)
Ooh, this is promising.
I'll be tracking this, and I can't wait to see just what menace has been unleashed on Equestria (this time!).
(Caught a typo - Field Walker says that they'll have to come back "from the rest" when it should be "for the rest".)
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Ah, thanks.
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I've seen it spelt both ways.
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Huh.
So... I take it that the "ancient evil" is the sphinx that Somnambula chased off?
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I don't know what kinda sphinx has "multiple legs" and "monstrous claws".
This was fun. I rather like this first glimpse of our villain - Alsum, eh? I laughed at the line about his "wretched, yet potent and stylish" body, that was funny. (And I laughed more than I should have at Spike's line about Starlight and kites.)
One thing, though. There's a paragraph break right in the middle of "I'm sure Princess Celestia would appreciate that."
Still, this was another great installment, and I'm really interested to see what'll happen with Sunset's return to Equestria and her adventure with Twilight!
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Heh, yeah, it's Egyptian for "venom". Fitting, huh?
Thanks for pointing that out. Fixed.
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I figured that "Alsum" had some particular meaning. And it fits him quite well
This was good.
And let me also say, that I love Alsum the more and more I see him. This guy is really enjoyable, quite funny!
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That's the idea, not another "I'm sad so I'm gonna destroy the world" like we've recently gotten multiple times in a row. Just a good old-fashioned straight-up villain like Tirek, Discord, Chrysalis and Adagio.
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I definitely approve. Sometimes a story just needs a bad guy who actually enjoys what they do.
Good work with this installment. I liked a lot of the material with Sunset and the Main Six in the first half, with my favorite bit there being the gag with Pinkie wanting to take pictures of Sunset with others XD
And the latter half of the chapter had a strong bit with Alsum's more menacing side. (Well, I did chuckle at him lamenting about glowpaz's rareness XD) But still, him threatening to test his stinger was a good villainous moment, especially for the casualness with which he suggests it.
Also, last thing... I like that Lithic Dust and Field Walker are going to be sticking around, especially to see one chasing after Alsum and the other going to warn Celestia. They seemed like interesting characters and I'm hopeful to see more done with them!
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Yep, look out, we got a shipper on deck!
Glad to see I'm balancing out his menace and comedic moments.
Well they're more minor side characters to get the plot going than anything, but I'll see whether or not they can play a big role in the rest of the story.
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Close. The title's actually based on the song Night Boat to Cairo. Good guess though.
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This guy gets it.
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It was a joke, but ok.