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determamfidd

Joined October 2011
758 followers

A Brony of non-US origin (pause for gasps of horror),thus I spell things slightly differently. Well, not 'things', specifically, but words like surprise, colour and centre. You weird people.

Stories (2)

  • It Takes a Village
    Spike only wants things to stay the same. Time, however, has other ideas. He's going to need help...

    148,765 words · 27,829 views · 2,952 likes · 51 dislikes
  • The Jewellery Box
    In the dark, six voices dwindle. And then suddenly, there is colour.
    34,670 words · 6,355 views · 510 likes · 7 dislikes

Blog Posts (3)

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In the dark,six voices dwindle. They drift, forgetting life and love and hope, eaten away by time and void.

And then, suddenly, there was colour.

First Published
18th Jul 2012
Last Modified
15th Dec 2012

Comments ( 190 )

#1 · Chapter 1 · 115w, 1d ago · 7 · ·

Self: why am I following this person?

*checks author's other stories*

OHHH!

*moves "The Jewellery Box" to the front of 'to read' cue*

#2 · Chapter 1 · 115w, 1d ago · · ·

>>928526

Thats exactly how I felt... lol

#3 · Chapter 1 · 115w, 1d ago · · ·

Excellent as always!  I can't wait to read more.

#4 · Chapter 1 · 115w, 1d ago · · ·

Surely this will be worthy of the attention of millions!

The feature box at very least!

#5 · Chapter 1 · 115w, 1d ago · · ·

I'm liking this, not as much as it takes a village but i'm liking this :pinkiehappy:

#6 · Chapter 1 · 115w, 1d ago · · ·

Oh my gosh! Oh my gosh! Oh my gosh! Oh my gosh!

Yes!! This is awesome!!

I'm in love with this story already! I can't wait to read the rest!

#7 · Chapter 1 · 115w, 1d ago · · ·

Oh my goodness <3

#8 · Chapter 1 · 115w, 1d ago · · ·

Woah.

This is brilliant. Absolutely wonderful! From the Mane Six's self-rediscovery to Spike breaking out of his stasis to grow up... Sad, exciting, intriguing, and intense! And yet, you add enough levity - like Rarity's "Princess Celebrity!", that one got a guffaw out of me - that the whole thing does not overwhelm the reader.

It's an intriguing idea, executed extremely well. I'm eager to read more of this!

#9 · Chapter 1 · 115w, 1d ago · · ·

This is magnificent.:eeyup:

#10 · Chapter 1 · 115w, 1d ago · · ·

Poor them, shut  away in the dark for 500 years. :raritydespair:

#11 · Chapter 1 · 115w, 23h ago · · ·

>>930122

You sir have taken the very thoughts from my mind.

#12 · Chapter 1 · 115w, 22h ago · · ·

I was wondering how in the hell you could possibly follow up It Takes A Village.

A great start to what will surely be a great story!

#14 · Chapter 1 · 115w, 18h ago · · ·

WHY?! Why can you take any concept and make it good? ps, AMAZING, and the rest please?:scootangel:

#15 · Chapter 1 · 115w, 14h ago · · ·

Very well-executed concept of 'forgetting/rediscovering' everything, emotional moments that weren't beat-the-reader-about-the-face-and-shoulders, and enough mystery in alluded-to events to keep the reader interested.  

And I love the concept of Professor :moustache:

#16 · Chapter 1 · 115w, 13h ago · · ·

I'll admit, I think I like your first fic "It Takes a Village" more than this, but I'm very interested in where this goes.  It certainly has a much darker feel to it than your other story...And I'd be lying if I said I didn't like it.

Not sure about giving it a favorite yet, but I'll sure be watching.

#17 · Chapter 1 · 115w, 11h ago · · ·

I've already mentioned all my points about this story awhile back. And it looks like people are really liking it. :pinkiehappy:

#18 · Chapter 1 · 115w, 10h ago · · ·

Holy shit! From the author of It Takes a Village.

Will read

#19 · Chapter 1 · 115w, 9h ago · · ·

And so my love/hate relationship that I share with my few favourite authors continues.

On one hand, I know what to expect and love your work, on the other hand, I have to wait for updates.

And me being me, waiting just doesn't work.

#20 · Chapter 1 · 115w, 9h ago · · ·

I AM READING THIS WITH ENTHUSIASM!

Seriously, excellent work.

#21 · Chapter 1 · 115w, 8h ago · · ·

Instant favourite.

I NEED chapter 2, I have indeed allowed myself to want, and I have no shame in saying, there is so, so much want.

#22 · Chapter 1 · 115w, 6m ago · · ·

DUDE. YOU HAD BETTER CONTINUE THIS THING OK IF YOU DON'T I'LL KILL YOU (and yes, it's MMS from FF and DA. :pinkiehappy: )

#23 · Chapter 1 · 114w, 5d ago · · ·

Interesting idea. I feel so bad for them, being jewelry for 500 years. I'm keeping an eye on this one. :twilightsmile:

#24 · Chapter 1 · 114w, 5d ago · · ·

As opening segments go, that was a hell of a job. Good on you.

And you tell me there's going to be five segments in total? :yay:

#25 · Chapter 1 · 114w, 5d ago · · ·

WOW!  That was fantastic!

I read this twice out of pure appreciation.  The organization was brilliant, the characterizations spot on, the comedy wonderfully timed, the sorrow real and moving, and the setup simply divine!  I can't wait for more of this!  You amaze me, deter.

#26 · Chapter 1 · 114w, 4d ago · · ·

>>928526 I just did the exact same thing...

#27 · Chapter 1 · 114w, 3d ago · · ·

Oh buck yes, I've been wanting a good fic to read and you're one of the best in my book.

It's as if Christmas came near the end of summer. :rainbowkiss:

#28 · Chapter 1 · 114w, 3d ago · · ·

I don't think there is any phrase that can properly describe this story so far, other than...

"This is... interesting..."

Anyways, completely amazing so far, and I have to say, it be definitely original. I'll keep looking on... :pinkiehappy:

#29 · Chapter 1 · 114w, 2d ago · · ·

Very, very, very good to see something new out of you, sir!:pinkiehappy:

I very much enjoyed the way you had the Elements slowly regain themselves. I especially like how you made random words float through their consciousness as they re-established their consciousnesses... ess... es, ess...

The conversation between Spike and Celestia flowed naturally and, as always touches like "my Spike" showed off the wonderful Spike/Twi dynamic that I adored about your previous story.

As I said, very, very, very good to hear from you again!:twilightsmile:

#30 · Chapter 2 · 114w, 1d ago · · ·

Woo, new chapter!

Can't wait for more!

#31 · Chapter 2 · 114w, 1d ago · · ·

Hulk like chapter

Hulk want chapter 3 already!

#32 · Chapter 2 · 114w, 1d ago · · ·

… Nice.

#33 · Chapter 2 · 114w, 1d ago · · ·

I love you.

#34 · Chapter 2 · 114w, 1d ago · · ·

So, are you going to explain what happened to the Mane 6 that trapped them in the elements? Regardless of how you end this story, It would be nice if you at least put their spirits to rest by the end. No-one should have to endure something like that for so long.

Great story regardless. I will be following.

#35 · Chapter 2 · 114w, 1d ago · · ·

so much emotion. joy at their conversing with spike, sorrow at Diane's family's fate, and general feel-ishness all around. good for you, determamfidd. you're writing another masterpiece here. :twilightsmile:

#36 · Chapter 2 · 114w, 1d ago · · ·

This is a really interesting concept. I can't wait to see more.

#37 · Chapter 2 · 114w, 1d ago · · ·

Oh, damn! Spike's "Milady?" got genuine tears out of me. :raritycry:

Please, keep on writing. This is a very interesting, very touching story, and I can hardly wait for the next chapter!

#38 · Chapter 1 · 114w, 1d ago · · ·

you enjoy making me tear up, dont you?? :fluttercry:

#39 · Chapter 2 · 114w, 1d ago · · ·

you are taking the tears of me with a screwdriver Y.Y

#40 · Chapter 2 · 114w, 15h ago · · ·

Lots of thoughts all the sudden, and they are kinda random, so here we gooooooo!!!!

Not going to lie, I thought it would take longer for Spike to start actually "conversing" with the six, but still very nice.

Nightmare Discord? Hmmm... I can work with that. Would've rather had a new "villian", but I can deal. Sucks about all the damn ponies, but whatever. They were NPC's, and as any roleplayer knows, NPC's don't mean anything! :pinkiecrazy:

I still think the baby should've been named "Pinkie Jr."

Finally, now that he knows how to get the other ponies to materialize, will that hinder him in doing any of it? Kinda like in Buddism with Karma, if you do good deeds for the sole reason to GET Karma, you don't get it. Will Spike doing generous things for the sole reason of making Rarity appear make the generous deeds not work? Something to think about...

No lie, I'm looking forward to the next chapter :pinkiehappy:

#41 · Chapter 2 · 114w, 14h ago · · ·

Discord's back and fused with the power of Nightmare Moon?

First thought, why isn't that a plot for an episode already?

Second thought...Oh God...

This story is definitely way darker than "It Takes a Village" but I just don't want to put it down.  We haven't even seen any of Equestria beyond what Spike and the others witness and I'm already dreading what the new Nightmare Discord might have done.  And might still do.

Huh, guess I just settled whether this is going on my favorites list or not.  I seem to add a lot of Spike-centric fiction there.

#42 · Chapter 2 · 114w, 11h ago · · ·

Beautiful.

You're establishing something wonderful here, Deter.  (Mind if I call you Deter?)  This is really exquisite writing, and I would expect nothing less from the author of ITAV.  You sure have a way of making Spike incontestably lovable.  The ethereal nature of the Mane Six here is fascinating and very well described.  I like the way they communicate with Spike.

You've made me laugh aloud, tear up, and smile profusely in just two chapters of what very well turn out to be one of my favorite fanfics ever.  Nightmare Discord is a terrifying concept; I'm worried (and darkly excited) for Spike's first interaction with him.

A captivating, well-described, truly touching chapter.  I look forward to the next.

#43 · Chapter 2 · 113w, 6d ago · · ·

Everything about Diane made me squee. Squee. I am amazed at this and will gladly look forward to the next chapters.

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#45 · Chapter 2 · 113w, 6d ago · · ·

You just love Spike don't you? The second amazing fic centered around Spike you've written. I am super excited for this.

#46 · Chapter 2 · 113w, 6d ago · · ·

I can't really think of any comprehensible wordsw right now so i will say this:

I like it A LOT! :twilightsmile::pinkiegasp:

#47 · Chapter 2 · 113w, 6d ago · · ·

It has been years since I've read almost 20,000 thouzand words in one sitting while actually being intrigued by-- no, being glued to its contents.

It's been an amazing story so far, and I've enjoyed every moment of reading it. I already can't wait for Chapter 3!

#48 · Chapter 1 · 113w, 6d ago · · ·

:rainbowderp: Oh, WOW This is incredibly intriguing, sad but interesting. A strange concept, but amazing. I just can't help how much I love this!!! It's just so....WEIRD, but in a good way!

Also, you know this was featured on Equestria Daily? And rightfully so, too! I just have so many questions! What in the world does Spike need to protect the world from? How did the girls become necklaces (and a tiara)!? I MUST FIND OUT! So, on to chapter 2~! :pinkiehappy:

#49 · Chapter 2 · 113w, 6d ago · · ·

Nightmare Discord... not sure if megusta.

I dunno, I'm having a tough time rectifying this fusion of entities.  I will wait for a more thorough explanation.

#50 · Chapter 1 · 113w, 6d ago · · ·

Fabulous start!

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