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Well, this was...something different. However...an explanation would have been nice as to why the house was full of ghosts and who these are.
Who or what was the Twilight that banged Dash at the end?
The 2nd chapter has almost no connection to the 1st other than a few lines reffering to it. You could've made the 2nd a seperate story on its own.
The whole thing just feels so...random. Im not saying its bad quite the opposite its interesting, you dont see many stories like this involving ghosts.
Just from the first paragraph of your story I can see that you need a proofreader, especially to correct the punctuation.
I hope I will find the time to check it out this weekend as the premise seems interesting, though
pants pants pants.... :3 "AHHHH AHHHH AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH."
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This story is complete and I have no proof reader.
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8515599
This was a requested clop story, so I didn't bother building on who haunted the house or even why the house was haunted. The second chapter was meant to end with Rainbow going back, but the requester and I enjoyed this ending better. In short, this is a story simply for the sex and nothing more.
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I see. That explains quite a lot, thanks for clearing things up.
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You're welcome, if you want you can expand on the idea of the haunted house. And have whatever fun you can come up with.
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Well i would love too but sadly my writing skill is somewhere over there in the 5th dimension next to the endless void.
Jokes aside im not much of a writer and more a reader who gives feedback, but thanks for the offer.
8518172
Well you know where you stand as a writer, now all you can do is improve. I suggest starting with short stories and working up from there.
I hope some day these one-shots gets the sequels they deserve.
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They are left open for a reason, anyone and everyone who wants to can continue the one shots. Even if I did a sequel I would not disclaim the works of others, I'd accept them as part of an intricately woven web of stories.
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Cool