919562 Hmm... I see, now that I say the beginning of this story rather than thinking it... It does sound better with "are" instead of "is". I will have to remember that. As for Princess Celestia... A lot of people just aren't getting why I made this event happen the way it did. I've tried explaining the fact that she thought no name, or as I am currently calling him "Titan", knew he was the son of Discord, in which, when she realized he didn't know... Have you ever almost made possibly the WORST mistake of your life only to realize that you were doing the wrong thing seconds before you were going to do it? That's how she felt... Actually... that sounds pretty good... I might include that in the story just after she puts the sword down... But it still sounds sloppy... Let me finish the last chapter of this and then I will be able to deal with the other stuff. once again, thank you for your help.
919562 Hmm... I see, now that I say the beginning of this story rather than thinking it... It does sound better with "are" instead of "is". I will have to remember that. As for Princess Celestia... A lot of people just aren't getting why I made this event happen the way it did. I've tried explaining the fact that she thought no name, or as I am currently calling him "Titan", knew he was the son of Discord, in which, when she realized he didn't know... Have you ever almost made possibly the WORST mistake of your life only to realize that you were doing the wrong thing seconds before you were going to do it? That's how she felt... Actually... that sounds pretty good... I might include that in the story just after she puts the sword down... But it still sounds sloppy... Let me finish the last chapter of this and then I will be able to deal with the other stuff. once again, thank you for your help.
So you like comments? Here's my like and fav for you. Interesting story, I must say...
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"She knew I would be adopted my some pony and I was." Did you mean to say by instead of my?
Also, "I felt the grown beneath my hooves shake and rumble." Did you mean he felt the ground?
Here's a two in one: "Rarity and Twilight was at the punch boil sipping on some drinks." You should change was to were, and boil to bowl.