The timeline in this story will follow what we could see of King Sombra's universe in the Cutie Re-Mark episode, but with a significant change: instead of a seemingly never-ending war, war ends upon both parts reaching a hard agreement that would bring peace and tensions. Luna would stay at the Crystal Empire by marrying Sombra, and she would make sure things didn't take a turn for the worse. While also trying to reform the villain by her side.
[Cover image is not mine, if author wishes for it to be removed then I shall do it]
Thanks to my best friend/proof-reader Faithy, I would be lost without you girl <3
Chapters (4)
It was alright, but it did feel a bit rushed. If you could slow down, that would be awesome! Overall, pretty interesting idea!
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Glad you liked it!
I'll try slow down when I begin writing a chapter itself, though it might be difficult for me as I tend to rush things even in my daily life. This was just mostly a summary to hold the main idea I want to develop.
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That was a summery?
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I'm such an idiot. I thought that was the entire story!
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no worries! I put it on the title of the chapter and at the Authors Note so that people wouldn't think this is all. It's pretty short to even be a one-shot and I just went over the mayor points.
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Well, you have a loyal follower forever now.
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Thanks!
Okay:
1) write that summary into actual chapters and you will be good to go. Set the bar for 1k each, minimum and you'll be learning a lot.
2)if English is not your native language, get an editor ASAP! They can help you with your story and spin it into something awesome while working with you!
3) always have a plan and push through your writing blocks. A summary should be a guide, not something you publish.
4) Thank you for writing this ship AND for starting your first story.
5)more.
6)write often to get better.
Some interesting ideas that deserve to be explored further; this could become a really good story given time.
Especially well done as you say that English is not your natural language.
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Thank you! I'm working on the first official chapter but it's been difficult to find time to write as I just went back to college. Also, I'm still in the search for an editor to help me polish it and make it better.
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Well I hope you can continue this story but until then good luck in college!
It's great to see an update on such a nice little Lunbra fic and to see that you redid the first chapter! Nice job~!
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Thanks! :D
I like This story
It's great to see that you're back and this story is moving along!
Try 'a bit for your thoughts'. The plural of superhero is superheros, there's no '.
Though, is Sombra really still a villain if he's going to be marrying Luna and is in a story with a slice of life tag and e-rated? You seem to be setting up a potentially sympathetic portrayal here~
Unless he's going to eat all the wedding cake. That's very evil.
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At the cost of not giving away much spoilers, all I'll say is that I'm going more towards a sort of 'reformation' of Sombra. Something similar to Discord, but he's going to play his fair share of cards here, I tend to think of him as quite intelligent so obviously he's not going to let the ponies walk over him.
And that there'll be no wedding right away, if I manage to portray him the way I want with Nightmare's help, you'll see why. I really, really don't want to give any BIG spoiler even if you're my favorite Luna x Sombra author
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Wait Iām what :O
Ayyyyy welcome back to the land of the writing
Some advice! When there's a new speaker, it's best to start a new paragraph š
You seem to have done it for most, but a couple were missed
aaaaaaa why do i lack consitently reading updates-
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he's my favorite too
Dis is awesome.
ContĆnua a histĆ³ria por favor š
Please update š
Ah you bitch. Leaving a really good story abandoned. . .