Chapter 5
Dreams.
Hopes.
Desires.
The Future.
All of these whirling through my head.
Dreams, to be normal.
Hopes, for people to like me.
Alone.
Pathetic.
Desires, to be happy.
The Future, Bleak.
Nothing going for me.
It was me against the world.
Again.
I cry myself to sleep.
Again.
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Awww poor Derpy
* hugs Derpy* 
Perhaps, for dramatic emphasis, put all the words like Dreams, Hopes, Pathectic, etc. in Italics.
This was pretty good.
AT first I was surprised at how many words were in it, but then I read the chapter. This is actually pretty good. It's sudden and unexpected and helps build sympathy for the character. Nice job.