At first, Starlight wasn't doing well in Ponyville, until she was taught by Twilight and her friends.
Now she is like everypony else. But life in Ponyville isn't easy.
One night, some magic meteor strikes Equestria, transforming everypony into monsters.
And Starlight will need all efforts to fight against her now monster friends...
To win against the darkness...
To make them remember the magic of friendship...
This story is being edited, so you'll probably notice grammar errors, but don't worry, I'll make sure everything gets fixed.
EDIT 1: I changed the image, putting this one, which can be located on my DeviantArt page.
Chapters (10)
I'm sorry but Discord doesn't get tired.
>> MadManMeller
It would take a lot of effort to get him tired, but it's not impossible.
Hehehe
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The Season 6 finale says otherwise. Especially when kept complaining about having to walk to the Changeling Kingdom, without aid of magic.
Only in your dreams, Dash. XD That made me laugh.
*struck*, not stroke.
Nice joke there. You legitimately fooled me, Discord!
Okay, I've read the whole story. Here are my thoughts on it:
- I love the premise for it. Dark magic on Nightmare Night turning the Mane 6 and CMC evil, with Starlight having to defeat them all with the aid of others? Great stuff, really excellent material there.
- A lot of the evil Mane 6 stuff is interesting. Some of it has been done already (Flutterbat, Nightmare Rarity, Midnight Sparkle) but the evil Pinkie with her pipe organ stuff, Trixie the Cerberus, and the evil CMC were all clever ideas. Good job coming up with those concepts.
- Now, the execution of it is a little bit underwhelming at times. There are some spelling errors and typos that kind of interfere with the flow of the action ("stroke" when it should be "struck", etc.) I'm a very spelling-minded person, and I know that it might not bother everyone, but it detracted a bit for me.
- My biggest criticism is that this story feels really brief. And I don't mean in the number of chapters. I mean that some of the action related stuff just feels really light, and jarring because of it. For example, there's a line in one chapter that is simply "Oh, and Discord got hurt too" or something like that. That kind of writing, such a small mention, just does not work on a lot of levels - it feels casual, extraneous to the scene (why bring it up without mentioning any details? Is it meant to be funny? I didn't see what the point of it was) and actually a bit sloppy. The scene is Discord and others fighting an evil Rainbow Dash who's attacking them with Rainbooms - that's an awesome image for a fight scene, and yet we have no understanding of how the near-all-powerful draconequus got hurt. Did he take a Dark Rainboom to the face? Did he stub his toe? What?
Don't get me wrong, I enjoyed this story well enough, but I do think it could use some real spit and polish to really make the best of its premise.
8765772
Well, I already saw the "stroke" thingy.
"Discord got hurt too." Yep, I should have explained briefly how he got hurt. It was meant to be funny.
And the last thing, Tank you for the review!
PS: The pun was Rainbow's courtesy.
8765852
Ah, okay then. I wondered if it was a joke. It just didn't land for me.
No problem. I hope the review helps, and I did have a nice time reading it.
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I think Starlight had the same face as you at that moment.
Discord rules!
Well, well, well. Shame on that editor for taking away Discord's thunder like that.
Very interesting and fun start of the story. Can't wait to read more.
9170441
Heh, yep. Discord can be there, but I had to take care so he didn't make the story finish earlier. After all, the main protagonist is Starlight.
Anyways, glad to know you like it.
9170456
Spike might help too, maybe. I will have to see.
That is very true. A good story comes from the main character beating the odds. But having somepony as awesomely odd as Discord himself on your team helps a lot.
9170465
Totally agree with you.
Well, so long to the one way for everypony to get around Equestria.
9173081
Yeah, but don't worry, they will fix those issues.
Poor, poor crystals they never stood a chance.
I liked it! Keep up the good work!
9195042
Thank you!
Read the first chapter. ....so far so good. A wierd topic to start something but I guess that good.
9761469
Heh, thanks.
Also...
By that, you mean how the story starts? Or what?
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No, I mean a metiore, thats not a common topic to Base things around.
9762864
Oh, the meteor? Yep, I understand what you mean.
Ok. Finally did it, it took alot to read, I guess it should have taken much more to write though. I really liked it since discord was there. I might read more of your storys but, at the moment I need to fucose on my own storys and try to attract some pony.
Discord is just COOL!
9811972
No problem, friend. Glad you liked the story.
And yes, that's right!
9813727
You have done so well with your storys. Can you check mines, I think there is a problem with them.?
9813733
Heh, thanks.
Oh, I'm gonna be busy for some time, but I'll read your stories.
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Thanks.
9813792
You're welcome.