Interesting start. I am curious to know what or who this voice is and why it's trying to plague Spike's mind with hate and vengeance. I know this is your first story and to be fair it does show a promising start. Just remember that when you write the initials of a character, make sure you begin the letters with a capital. For example, Twilight Sparkle, Spike, Discord. Same goes for the names of places like Canterlot and Ponyville. You have developed an intriguing start with this story and I look forward to how it will continue.
Really good But I'm honestly really conflicted right now sense I know if he agrees it could turn out really bad ,but I also really want to see a bad ass Spike with dark powers
This sounds like a Jason story am I right?
No
I like it :3
Interesting start. I am curious to know what or who this voice is and why it's trying to plague Spike's mind with hate and vengeance. I know this is your first story and to be fair it does show a promising start. Just remember that when you write the initials of a character, make sure you begin the letters with a capital. For example, Twilight Sparkle, Spike, Discord. Same goes for the names of places like Canterlot and Ponyville. You have developed an intriguing start with this story and I look forward to how it will continue.
Really good
But I'm honestly really conflicted right now sense I know if he agrees it could turn out really bad ,but I also really want to see a bad ass Spike with dark powers