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I feel something inside me.
8095017 I hope you enjoyed the story. I mean, it's a good feeling right? (I'd seriously like some real feedback on this chapter.)
I liked it.
8134695 Thanks for the feedback! I know I have a problem with repetition. If it's not too much trouble, could you give me some feedback on the chapter after this one? It's not getting much attention and I'm not sure why.
8135191
I have no idea how but I somehow missed the next chapter being available... brain you okay?
Anyway, onward!
First so I don't forget
I think you meant that to be "through an endless abyss" or simply "through endlessness" not some of both.
Also
superfluous "be."
Okay with the formatting stuff out of the way, I thought it was awesome! It was badass and heartwarming in equal measure to see the flames of the past and how heavily they still weigh on Celestia all these years later. And having Celestia then go into Twilight's mind, letting her see that to us all, our own greatest mistakes are greater than anything a loved one could do was simply beautiful.
But yeah, that talk about boundaries is clearly needed
A talk about sharing wouldn't go amiss either, clearly Celestia's subconscious thinks she should be more open with her marefriend, maybe they can talk about doing that without mind-affecting spells
8135608 Thanks for the feedback.
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Sorry it wasn't as constructive as the previous one and basically boiled down to two corrections and "I liked it!" but hey, it's just as important to hear the stuff you're doing right aint it?
She politely asked that part of her brain to shut up for a second.
Yep, that's me in this sort of situation too.
Interesting.