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That was very beautiful. You could really tell they were making love but also enjoying each other's company. Can't wait to see how things continue as this story is beautiful and I enjoy it's every chapter.
Nice chapter, but you should change the rating of the story to mature or you will probably get in trouble with an admin sooner or later.
That was a gorgeous scene, Madam Bard. But I'm preeety sure you're just a lottle bit over the line into a mature rating, now.
Leave it to Twilight to be keeping count. There's probably a scroll, quill, and inkwell somewhere close at hoof.
ok just read this story and I try to figure how I miss it.
anyway good story keep up the good work
Honestly, I myself wouldn't even call this clop despite the sex. It's more...romantic than anything else, and it definitely fits in with the rest of the universe in which this story takes place.
This is one of my favorite stories. I can't wait for more chapters to come out
I remember seeing your blog concerned about not getting a lot of comments, sorry I didn't get here early, I've been slacking on keeping up with FiMFiction.
My feedback would be: It was a great chapter! I love Mustangia and the way you described it, I loved the way Twilight and Celestia were together, both intimately and intimately.
I have a little minor feedback on the sexytimes. I think you overused the word "ecstasy" just a bit, I'm not sure what it is but re-using words is really obvious in cloppy bits so I'd say be careful of that. Also some of your sex words were pretty clinical, her "mons pubis," her "labia," where I'd usually expect to see "mound" and "lips" or something more common like that. Your words became less formal after about the second or third sex act and that's the spot you want to aim for, in my opinion anyway.
But yeah, overall I really really enjoyed the chapter just like I have been the fic, and look forward to the next installment!