The battle of the Hoof ended 9 years ago. For some ponies, the scars are still fresh in the mind. As Threnody, a young heartmender working with the Followers of the Apocalypse will find, sometimes the hardest step is getting a Patient to speak.
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I've never read PH, but I've heard some bad things about it, mostly from Interloper. This trope won't happen in this story, right?
I enjoy that this entire chapter is around mending and strengthening relationships. I enjoy that Thren's week of honesty is helping her with her friends and 'family'. I really like how Thren is finally realizing her perception of herself is flawed, and openly acknowledging them to those that can support/help her move forward.
Now I just wait with dread for the chapter(s) where all of these emotions get curb-stomped because anything related to PH just doesn't like nice things sticking around.
"Peculiar my blood sample logged on his computer"
"Peculiar had my blood sample logged on his computer"?
"but she was always said that she knew it wasn’t Radar"
"but she was always saying that she knew it wasn’t Radar"?
"for the fact that one of my friends is probably the most dangerous mares in the wasteland"
"for the fact that one of my friends is probably one of the most dangerous mares in the wasteland" or "for the fact that one of my friends is probably the most dangerous mare in the wasteland"?
"the sky, and made stepped as lightly as I could back up to my room"
"the sky, and stepped as lightly as I could back up to my room"?
"Pony sight was based on vision, right?"
"Pony sight was based on movement, right?"?
"how I feel about Threnody, Sandalwood, then. A. Me."
"how I feel about Threnody, Sandalwood, then. Ask. Me."?
"That and two caps will buy you a applecore"
"That and two caps will buy you an applecore"?
Sorry the chapter was so painful, Heartshine.
Another great chapter^^
So deer are sapient here, like ponies? I recall they had been mentioned in one of the previous chapters, but this seem more definitive mention. Okay, good to know^^
Ah, so that's when the Hour of the Wolf is? Cause ever since I read the book about the World of Fire and Ice with the whole history there, I've been wondering which hour is the Hour of the Wolf, and the internet provides mostly movie or song titles when searching it up on google
Wow, as I read about Sandalwood deciding to talk with Slate I kept thinking that the chapter would end with him making out with Bubblegum or something, why do I keep expecting chapters to end on heartbreaking cliffhangers? (No like really, it's like every chapter I read, I keep thinking that something bad will happen.) Please let this work out for 'em crazy heartmenders! ;p
And on the side note, good that somebody spoke to Threnody about her eating habits. Sucks about her never hearing "I love you" from mom and all... yeah, even know what she had been through that makes it even more messed up. But yeah, glad that the chapter was about relationships and caring and love, and spending time with others, and I would be lying if I said that I wouldn't like to see a fanart of all those mares in those hot springs
I have to say that this was worth the wait. I mean damn, so amazing. Absolutely brilliant character development and oh...my the way you tease Threnody. I love it. Your writing reminds me so much of Littlepip in FoE and Blackjack in PH.
Also good to see that you haven't abandoned this story. Please for the love of all that is holy under Luna's moon, do not end this story anytime soon.
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Given that I absolutely loathe that trope, I sure hope not!
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Thank you, as always, Hinds!
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Hot, steamy alicorn and other pony cuties!
Yes pls. I swear I'm not a thirsty lesbian of bisexualThe hour of the wolf actually came about from an episode of Babylon 5 aptly named 'The Hour of the Wolf'. I always loved that episode, and the story behind it. I just adapted what Ivanova said about it to ponies, and I figured it fit with the Deer. It's a great scene as well, and well, I was struggling with terrible insomnia for the start of this chapter. So Threnody got to live in the hour of the wolf with me.Something rly good hapend today i did get an e-mail a new chapter is aut!! Yay
Now after an hour of reading Realisation Hits I have to wait month til the next Update
Loved this chapter so much! Threnody's bet has turned out to be an amazing way to get her to be more open and honest, and it was really nice to see Blackjack also being extremely open about her own feelings with her. It's something we never got to see much of from BJ, but doesn't at all feel out of place here.
Can't wait for the next chapter, this is really turning out to be one of my favorites stories.
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Well, hopefully this time it's only a month, and not like last time where it was 3... >.<*
I kid you not, when I saw this updated I just lay there in bed with my jaw hanging and started flapping my hands around happily. please help me...
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You're welcome. :)
i’ve missed this story will be ecited for the next chapter
I was pleasantly surprised that no one died in a horrible fashion. Historically when characters get thier emotional problems worked on they die in the most gruesome way possible (especially in fall out fiction) in the next scene. I was expecting everyone to die by some horrible spa monster by the end of the chapter.
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Unlike a lot of the FO:E stories which seem to be about 90% edge, and 10% action, I've... well, I've tried to remember that Fallout is a dark comedy. That said, Speak has ended up with a ratio of about 2% action, 90% feels, 3% comedy, and 2% whatever Blackjack is.
I liked this chapter very much Heartshine, it was more then worth the wait. I can't wait for 16.
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Selling yourself short... whole chapter was making me smile.
There sure should be more percents of comedy in there, or your type of comedy got potency of capsaicine.
Blackjack really went from War Doctor state to 11th Doctor state in your story here.
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It did not happened to any of "proper" FOE fics, neither it happened to PH. They are nore of "Emotional rollercoaster". Also there is a wise rule to never believe someone about content of book, unless you consider yourself a copy of themselves (figuratively).
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There's a quote from Violet Evergarden that always reminded me of Slate: "You're going to learn a lot of things. But it might be easier to keep living if you didn't learn them - if you didn't know them. You don't realise your body is on fire and burning up because of what you did. You'll understand one day. And then you'll realize for the first time that you have many burns"
Slate is honestly one of my favourite characters, and part of the struggle of getting this chapter out was trying to get him into it. He's... I don't know what he is to me, because honestly he's not like any person I've ever met. But he's a father figure to Threnody, and he's probably one of the few heartmenders that understands where Blackjack and Threnody are emotionally.
I love that Thren's personality is becoming more... Blackjacky, and I love that Blackjack is nearly half Rampage personality now. Project Horizons is still one of my favorite stories of all time, and this side bit to it just makes it that much better.
Not gonna lie, if Thren gets with Puddle I'm gonna be pissed and I don't even know why. BJ x Thren all the way!
Christ I forgot how much I loved this fic.
It's kind of funny. It wasn't until I was in the middle of reading chapter 12 that out of nowhere if simply dawned on me that the reason I enjoyed reading this so much, and the reason I eagerly await each new chapter, was that this piece gives me a wonderful dose of escapism, that few other fanfics on this site (or others) give me. There are some really good fics I've read that I enjoyed very much, but if I was reading them at 3 in the morning when I should've been finishing my schoolwork (which I'm kind of ashamed to say I have), I was conscious of the fact that I should be doing something else. I find this piece so good that that doesn't happen. And all I can say is, thank you for that. Keep writing. We demand moar.
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Heartshine, keep up the good work. When I seen this update from Saturday today I literally jumped in my seat. This story filled with emotions is wonderful. Also I just imagine what thren sounds like with the moan. It's so adorable! Eeeeeeeeee. ~Stardust Scratch
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Dude, bro... as much as I greatly support the Threnjack ship I actually wouldn't be opposed to seeing a three-way between the two of 'em and Puddle.
Heartshine, darling… please for the love of all that is holy… DO IT!
Once again, this was another wonderful chapter.
I'm really enjoying this story and am looking forward to more.
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Well, I'm glad to hear that my own escapism into writing is helping others escape a little bit, too! Honestly, thank you so much for this comment. I... have tendency to actually 'hear' them, as opposed to buying into my own innate sense of lack of worth as a writer. I'm not perfect, as I still struggle with spelling errors, random grammar bits, and sometimes my ADHD brain goes 'yes, you totally meant to write dildo when you meant "didn't", this is fine!' But it gives me the strength and courage I need to get back to it, try to pay a little more attention each chapter, and be able to bring the little world I have in my head to paper so others can enjoy it as much as I do.
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Neato. That's honestly pretty fricken coolio. Good job on the chapter i loved it alot.
I've gotta admit that one of the most fascinating elements in this story besides the dynamics of Thren and BJ’s interactions/relations has to be that of “the Dealer”. It’s as if he’s trying to educate our
whinystalwart heroin in how the world works regadless of how creepy he comes off to those around him. It’s a really interesting dynamic within the story that makes the reader wonder what his ultimate goal is.Once again, I’d like to say that I'm really enjoying this story and am looking forward to more.
Awesome chapter, it’s neat to see how much Tren as matured.
Wheeeew... long chapter, but well worth the read! Took me a while but it was certainly a nice read!
Giving me some inspiration to try and get my fics written up some more, hehe.
Nice job!
Awesome work Heartshine! I’ve been feeling pretty down lately, but your writing really helps me feel a lot better. I loved that bit at the end with the wing massage and embarrassed Thren. Keep up the great work! I’m looking forward to lots of awkward Threnjack adorableness.
One too many 'I''s I think?
'It' should be 'I'?
I sort of feel there should be a space between '4' and 'am', but that's just because I found it visually distracting. I don't know that it's actually improper.
That line made me laugh and visualise it as somewhat similar to this: [1]
It probably wasn't quite like that though.
The part where Sandalwood and Threnody were having a heart to heart felt strange somehow in the way they spoke to each other, like more expository than realistic, but it could also be perceived as the sort of way that heartmenders naturally yet awkwardly talk to each other when they are more used to explicitly using their empathy to repair others. Sandalwood's 'Don’t talk like a heartmender' felt like a really good way of expressing that state of what happens when heartmenders talk to each other (if I am seeing things right, that is) and how Blackjack earlier spoke against Sandalwood's forwardness seemed like a realistic portrayal of someone seeing that kind of line of questioning as strange. I'm sorry for making gibberish about it I just felt it was fascinating and compelling how those three interacted.
I also really liked Sandalwood opening up to Threnody about why she behaves and thinks as she does and finding her respect for the pegasus growing. I almost wonder if Sandalwood knew the extent to which the culture of Tenpony had burdened her before she talked it out with her.
Also also, Threnody's 'little pegasus in her head' imagery is cute and funny
I hadn't noticed Threnody's theme until Slate pointed out the convention of heartmenders' descriptions of emotions, and it's pretty neat to see that individuality of expression between heartmenders.
I very much liked this chapter, especially that Threnody gets to relax in a safe place. I could almost feel the wing joint pops in the hot water with her.... except I don't have wings but you know what I mean right? Hope that wing heals fully and properly! Last thing I want to have to see is another pegasus grounded!
I look forward to the next chapter and for the unrolling of the story as much as everyone else does!
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Why would you let other people think for you? I really liked PH. Though the one rape scene on the Sea Horse is really horrible, I found PH a damn good read. It is a little over the top, but that's the point of FOE fiction isn’t it?
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Thank you so much for comments like these! It's... a reminder of why I'm hiring on two editors to catch grammar related issues for the future chapters, so hopefully they're more polished! @.@ I'm really glad folks are enjoying the story, and y'all deserve the best. Though at this point I'm frustrated that my brain still autocorrects what I've written to what I *meant* to say, and y'all deserve better than annoying little grammatical hiccups that I end up leaving in the story. >.<*
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and this is bad because....? First off, you're selling yourself short (nice to see you break the Dunning-Kruger effect, ish). Second off, feels keeps us invested in everything else. No feels, less investment. Less investment, more likely to invoke Eight Deadly Words.
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You're welcome? Yeah? You're welcome. And not to tell you how to deal with your problems (I suck at dealing with mine), try not to let Dunning-Kruger get to you
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*Sees while re-reading probably 6th time.*
Glad you're enjoying it!
*Returns to stockpiling
wondersuper glue and duck tape*I'll give her an offer she can't refuse. *Passive-Aggressive threats intensify*
Although, you've dropped a lot of foreshadowing, and a good bit od doesn't seem to have a conclusion in sight. Loose ends to remain forever unanswered? Stuff you didn't have time for/decided not to do? You forgot?
Also, isn't she mostly deaf in her right ear now?
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Her hearing is coming and going at the moment. Which is why I drew attention to that in the initial section of the chapter that she thought her hearing was out again, but no, it's just darned quiet at 3am. As for the other stuff... I'm working on it. This story has already gotten a lot longer on me than I intended. >.< I have a lot of loose ends for a reason, mostly because I am planning on sending the crew further north. Oh, there's lots of stuff with Blackjack that Threnody is freaking out about, and there's the whole eventual confrontation back in Junction City, but why deal with your problems when you can fix other pony's problems, right? Right?
Threnody you're bad at this.Also you keep referencing the Dunning-Kruger effect in your previous comments, and I was scratching my head about it at 3am when I first read them. The Dunning-Kruger effect is the cognitive bias that people of low cognitive abilities mistakenly think themselves to be of superior intellectual capacity. If anything I've oft claimed to have lower abilities than most writers, and unfortunately it sometimes shows in my writing through small errors that are missed in the editing process that should have been obvious at first pass. I'm working on that, and I've hired on two new editors to try to help with that particular gap in my skill set. But based on what you were saying, it sounds like you were attempting to reference the Imposter Syndrome
which I assure you I have no idea what you're talking about.I pretty much like your story.
While it seems that somewhere are some minor eye-catching mistakes(for example i sense quite a lot of some loose ends), but i still like the overall story. I definitely care what happens to those ponies =)
The non-combatant point of view is pretty much new for me in FoE, and i like your description of Thren's actions and feelings.
And BJ. It's like she's still the same pony we love, but now evolved, more... steady, more thinking before acting. I love what you and Somber make of her, great job!
Do you have a patreon or something?
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I'm fine with her being bad at this. Just don't be like Somber, where, (as I'm sure you know), he originally intended for it to be shorter than kkat's.
I'm very sorry, I should've been more clear, I wrote that on my phone and didn't want to type the whole thing out, especially since I have a tendency to ramble on in monologues and go one multiple tangents and digressions. What I was getting at was (which is apparently a whole syndrome of its own, that I'm sure you have no personal experience with, and totally don't offer moral support if you want) was that Dunning-Kurger was more addressing incompetent people, but (if you take TED-Ed at face value) also addressed how perfectly competent people (and even those who are pretty darn good at their jobs) suffer from something a lot like Imposter, where they know what they don't know, which I'd imagine could play in as a factor in Imposter Syndrome. Personally, I think you are a wonderful author, and while that probably doesn't have too much weight coming from some random guy who's only qualification for being a literary critic is that I've read a lot of stuff, which means next to nothing at best, it's still my opinion, which matters to me, and based off this, you seem like a pretty darn good (hopefully I'm remembering this right) Mental Health Therapist. (? If not that, a related profession.
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Oh! Ok! I hadn't seen that TED talk. I might have to look it up! And yes, I am a mental health therapist by trade.
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You don't happen to live in Idaho by any chance? (I'm guessing Pacific NW, for several reasons).
Oh, and please be like Somber! I love stories that i can read for half a year and it doesn't get boring.
It's kind of like a second life. Lots of folks would love to have a second life, i guess.
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Nope! Not Idaho! I live in Coastal Oregon. I had several friends who lived out in Idaho, and wanted to swing by Kkat's when I was out there, but she was usually out of town or sick the couple of times I went to see friends and could have swung by and met her.
BTW. I guess people mentioned this before, but just in case. Please make some space and/or marks between paragraphs, especially if it's different time periods(for example, between evening and morning activities). It's a brain stumble when i don't notice the change =)
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???
Fimfiction should have this lovely horizontal rule that shows up. It should look like this:
If there's a spot where that isn't showing up, please let me know and I'll go fix it. Grammar and spelling and random weirdness I'm used to, but this one is new to me, and it sounds like it could be a fimfiction issue. @.@
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After obsessively going through all 15 chapters, I couldn't find the issue. On my end, all the horizontal rules I used to denote timeskips and changes are all there. So... that's... weird. I don't know if you're looking at Speak on Mobile (which may change a few things) or Knighty did another update (which probably broke everything again).
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Hmm, maybe it's because i read the story in .epub on my mobile.
That's strange because in FoE:PH it was okay.
I checked some places online, and this rule is where it should be.
Sorry, looks like it's something wrong on my side.
Upd. Looked for it in PH, and noticed that there are simple *** symbols. Guess my reader recognises them and doesnt recognise Fimfiction's spacing.
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Oh! That would do it! On my draft document in Gdocs and on the work that I post on FimFic, I try to make sure it's there. I remember Somber did his own thing for it, and I stuck with the rule. I'm so sorry that your epub isn't reading it that way! :< I'm not sure how to fix that other than to switch to what Somber was doing.
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Well that sucks, I'd love to meet her.