The battle of the Hoof ended 9 years ago. For some ponies, the scars are still fresh in the mind. As Threnody, a young heartmender working with the Followers of the Apocalypse will find, sometimes the hardest step is getting a Patient to speak.
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"even as the fighting started, I could sanitised the situation"
"even as the fighting started, I could sanitise the situation"?
"I looked down at my rail-thin barrel. Starting with eating better. Nopony liked a fat mare."
I'm a bit confused here. Is this something in Threnody's head, is there a fault in the text, or am I missing something?
Edit in a feature?
Welcome, Shimmercoat!
And a good chapter, Heartshine. :)
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Fixed, and that has a bit to do with Threnody's own psychology.
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Thanks.
And what did "edit in a feature" in the author's note mean? If you don't mind me asking, of course.
....WHAT??!!..... First off: YAY SHES BI at least or somewhere in the middle....but puddle?.....What about Blackjack?.... :(.......
great chapter like always. I really like the pacing and flow of each character. I can't wait to see more of Dealer, and how he fits in. Maybe a few other characters could return....like Boo? or Basterd and find his story. ((maybe a return of another character thought gone..*Cough cough* Morning Glory *Cough Cough*)) Can't wait for the next chapter.
- Ashley
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Oh! I've been putting a story for other people to read into each chapter. I've been trying to feature stories that maybe haven't been read yet, and I just didn't have one yet for this chapter.
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Just found this, definitely the next thing I read.
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Ah, right! Thanks.
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I hope you like it. I know it takes a while to get momentum, but hopefully it's worth the wait.
Fantastic chapter Heartshine!
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I can't remeber what happened to Boo, or Basterd, he did return from the moon, right?
Morning Glory's death__ made me very upset but I fear bringing her back from that death__ would be both a bless and Author suicide. Perhaps her story from before going below the clouds. Through that reminds me of FoE: Heroes.
Is anyone you know writing stories about these characters Heartshine?
saloon-cum-makeshift
You mean salon-come-makeshift hospital maybe? Because there is cum everywhere.
( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)
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Yes Boo and Bastard survived, remember bastard and Scotch had sex on the way back from the moon. I think he stayed out of the final fight too but in rereading it I couldn't find mention of what he went on to do. As for Boo you can read the Epilogue for her but here's a snippet.
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ha ha Oh yes the Epilogue. Thanks very much, forgot about that bit.
Awwwwhahahaww~ That was cute! Near the end I mean, the middle and beginning were hardcore and bloody just how I like my mornings~
Good show!
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This is Blackjack were talking about. She’ll ask to watch or join in. Weird surfacer pony hangups.
Oh and Daw. Puddle is nice. And Thredony is hormonal.
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Not that i know of, GM. I know that Somber had started writing a bit of Bastard's story, but I think that got lost in the depths of his hard drive somewhere. And Boo is kind of a mystery unto herself. I hadn't planned on bringing them back. Though I'll admit that I didn't intend to bring Nails in either, but he kinda showed up like the dark thing in the day.
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Lewd!
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I see, thanks for the response.
Ah, great chapter as always^^
I like how you managed to write the battle here, from the perspective of a character who doesn't fight and can't even see the actual fight. It was realy good^^
So the Family teleported away, huh? That's... alarming. Years of reading various types of fantasy novels and games and so on taught me that you can truly relax when the enemy is either dead or made into a friend; the latter only if it took place over a long period of time, not otherwise you should watch out for them to backstab you. To be precise, in this situation it would have been best of they had managed to kill all of the Family there, without any of them escaping. Can't help but worry that there will be a counter-attack of some sorts.
Happy that Threnody let herself "ask for something", considering her experiances I was worried it might be a while before that would happen; I suppose the fact that Puddle is the same age as her helped with that. A bit worried though how it will affect her, and how she will react next time she sees Blackjack after her night with Basalt (regardless if anything happened there).
Again, great chapter^^
Nicely written chapter; I'm looking forward to more!
I couldn't help but get the feeling that BJ had something to do with instigating Thern and Puddle's little foray into "alone time" and that they'll discuss the issue when Thernody's a little more herself.
Interesting concept regarding how the Dealers role is portrayed and has me rethinking his/it's role in Somber's original story. Keep up the good work!
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Im almost positive that the Epilogue, Somber said may or may not be canon. it was up to the reader
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I'm fairly sure he said that because Blackjack suddenly surviving again would probably annoy a lot of people. The comments from the NCR characters in that fireside scene were very much complaints he'd gotten from people about Project Horizons up to that point. "Just trying to one up the Lightbringers story", Blackjack surviving death so much being bullshit, etcetera.
So just got caught up, good story, like the characters so far. Little confused as to their plan though. They went from traveling to Junction City to traveling the complete opposite direction. I understand Threnedy wanting to put it off, but Blackjack putting off finding out whether the mother is taking advantage of Threnedy to the point of allowing her to travel in the complete opposite direction is a little weird.
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so says Lewdshine8510359
Threnody is like how I play Fallout. I play Fallout 4 to avoid my problems, and in turn avoid my characters problems by doing all the side quests and forgetting about the main quest!
That's how you're supposed to do it, right?That said, the idea was that Blackjack more or less got the impression that Threnody is not ready to confront her mom, and is taking the group on walkabout.
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Ah okay.
Awesome chapter!!!
Get you some Thren!
The bodyguard character felt like there was so much more hero to him than I anticipated. Neat!
-Yogi
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I personally thought 24 myself for whatever reason, actually... Maybe because I wanted to make a joke with another character in one of my own fanfic ideas...
i’m really interested in the development of Dealer in this story and Homelands. i like the idea of there being a spirit of the wasteland a whole lot! but i was always confused as to how you could explain the shift from Echo as Dealer to the Wasteland as Dealer. i think i like the explanation given here? ((putting that as spoilers jic)) honestly, i’m just enjoying the ride either way. loving this story! i hardcore ship Thren with self-care <3
Very good! Very good! Comrade Stalin approves, pass go, collect 200 rubles, and acquire "Get out of Gulag alive card".
Seriously, fucking loved. Would go into detail, but Isuck at that, and everyone else has pretty much covered it.
So... Threnody's Bi(ish)bisexuality: double the options, double the fun!...deal with that ark they way you should, but just know that the people and comrade Stalin ship the fuck out of Blackjack and Threnody, and will not be pleased if we don't get it.
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I feel like the People are going to revoke Heartshine's get out of Gulag Free card for this. That and like... you know, the minor death threats involved if Puddle dies. Is hard to be writer these days, nyet? Everypony critic.
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You misunderstand. Blackjack is "Get out of deep shit alive, including Threnody," card.
YOU get out of gulag alive card, just do not disappoint Comrade Stalin, or you may...lose your "get out of gulag alive" card.
Although im not to far in the story yet i will say this. the only two people i know of who could have pulled this concept off would be either kkat or somber himself. But even then the whole thing probably wouldnt have been as good.
Point is keep it up. I NEED MY FIX OF BLACKJACK LADY!
Phew, that battle was intense. It must have been going pretty badly for the Family for them to do a massive teleport retreat. Still, with the casualties that high, I just hope it wasn't merely a Pyrrhic victory.
Thren is indeed pushing way too much to help others. At least she got someone to help her now.
... as long as she doesn't freak out when/if things start to progress.
Wonderful chapter! Also that image of Blackjack's face half-blown and mending back together thanks to the Taint... welp, that's a wonderful image indeed.
So, there will be a lot of work for Threnody right now, considering how many have been killed and wounded, the doctor included.
At least that will be something to keep herself busy with.
Congratulations on 2000 views! Looking forward to the next chapter, though I'll leave out the common threats of duct tape. Instead, I'll try
emotional blackmail, err... I mean, incentive! Have one unit of Fan Art:derpicdn.net/img/view/2017/11/1/1575565__safe_oc_oc-colon-threnody_duster_fallout+equestria_fallout+equestria-colon-+project+horizons_pegasus_scared_svg_-dot-svg+available_vector.png
In all seriousness, thank you for writing this great story and take as much time as you need to get it just right
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EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
OMG FAN ART! <3! Thank you so much!!!!!! I am about 4.5k words into 13, and it may end up being longer than my normal 8-10k chapters, but I am working on it. Omg. That art is <3 and it totally summarizes Threnody's feelings on the inside about 99% of the time! XD
Olay now that im completely caught up. The story is amazing keep it up heartshine! Though i will admit that the group sorta became friends with bubblegum a tad bit too fast personally, coulda made last another chapter or two. But thats a minor nickpick dont think about all that much. Keep up the great work and i cant wait for the next chapter.
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Yeah, that's... one thing that's been bugging me because I keep having to retcon lines like "I added that to my rather lengthy list of things I should probably ask Bubblegum about."
But yay! I'm glad you enjoy it! :D
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Just cause you asked, I just finished with 13, and it's going to the editors. I gave them the deadline of November 15th to get comments in, and that's mostly because I share Bronode with Somber, and this weekend we'll be picking at Homelands.
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Yay! Thank you for letting us know, and I'm really glad you liked the fanart :D Expression-wise, it was a tossup between unrelenting terror and frustrated facehoofing, both of which are symptoms of proximity to the Security Mare. If I get a chance to make more, I'll try for a group shot next time, if thats okay.
Thanks again for letting us know; looking forward to the next chapter going live!
Can I get a meaty slapper?
Dam sun
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if the deadline is the 15 does that mean it will be out by then or do you mean for them to finish it then upload it later
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If Bronode and I can fix the continuity fuckery that I accidentally wrote, hopefully it'll be posted by the 15th, if not sooner.
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what fuckery
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Just some stuff in 13 that needed fixed. It should be a lot better now.
Dammit they're so adorable! *braces self for inevitable demise of Puddle* seriously please don't kill Puddle
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I keep going to defend myself on comments like these, and than remember this story started with the premise that PH was a thing, and suddenly I'm reminded of why everyone is afraid I'm going to Zeta Gundam the cast.