When the Changelings attack Canterlot on the night of Twilight Sparkle's wedding, the Queen and her minions bring about pain and tragedy that leaves the young unicorn heartbroken--and uncertain about entering a new chapter in her life when the former has ended so abruptly.
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Good story, sad for sure, tbh i didn't cry for princess celestia's death, i'm not all that emotionally attached to her, but i find this an interesting concept, a "recuperating" story, the story of a trial everyone must overcome in their life.
Great story. I got a little teary since I'm a big dumb baby, but none fell.
While this story is strong on emotions, it feels somewhat contrived... Chrysalis acts entirely irrationally--to the point it seems her role would better be filled by Discord--and after that it's found that including her is entirely unnecessary, as Celestia's letter seems to hint she was close to death anyway. In fact, I think you could have worked her dying naturally of old age as being more emotionally impacting for both the characters and readers.
I'm not trying to put you down, as this is technically and emotionally excellent, but your plot development could use a lot of work.
My face:
847900 No offense taken at all! When I started this--which was quite a while ago--I was on a real Canterlot Wedding high and wanted to feature Chrysalis in the story. I will admit this is not one of my better executions, as I think I write drama better than adventure, so it was more of an experiment than anything. Thanks for your input!
I loved it! It wasn't quite what I was expecting when I went to read this, as I chose it based on the Chrysalis tag, but it was still a fantastic fic!!!
Okay, so NOW I can comment on this.
While the story seems interesting enough - enough to for a fave and a like - it does seem to me that the inclusion of the changelings is not entirely necessary, and the story would carry more emotional depth if Celestia died of natural causes. (Or possibly committed suicide so that she would not have to go through the indignity of senility)
But aside from that, a reasonably good read. good work.
First I was like:
Then I was like:
Then I was like:
Wow, great story! All this time I thought Midnight would get cut down while under fire, but it was Celestia who went down. I honestly didn't see that coming.
Silver out!
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It fine that that's your headcanon, but that directly contradicts the fanon used in this story. Note these sentences from the letter:
All of this not only clearly indicates that Celestia was already dying of old age, but that she suspected she would die within Twilight's life time.
You can have whatever headcanon you want, but you should also have the grace to leave it at the door when reading fan fiction which, given the nature of headcanon/fanon, may not agree with your view.
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Never doubt the power of FANON! 
But seriously, age and aging is relative. Some turtles (I'm not well versed enough to say "all," which for all I know, may be) can live for more than twice the average expected lifespan (in first-world countries--lifespans being notably shorter in the third-world). Similarly, there are a number of bugs that don't even live a month (maybe even less than a week? Like I said, not my forte). What I'm getting at is that "everyday" ponies could by "the bug" to the alicorns "turtle" so that from the perspective of non-alicorns the princesses might appear immortal, as they live for a ridiculously large number of non-alicorn pony generations.
(FYI: Just potential fanon I made up on the spot; this isn't really what I think).
I'm sorry but I had to give this a thumbs down. The fanfic felt kind of rushed in the beginning and the personalities of some of the characters were very out of place. Not only that, but Fancy Pants is already married in the show. His wife was with him during his first scene in sweet and elite. Sorry about the negative things in this comment but a simple dislike would not cut it without and explanation as to why I did it.
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You killed best pony and made Twilight hurt...
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THEM FEELS!!!
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AND "“Now, Pinkie,” Twilight clarified, her voice hardened, and Pinkie sighed and pecked Milky Way on the nose before joining the others in a far corner of the room where Twilight had led them." Nose?
such an amazing story, heck all of your work is amazing. Please do more.
THE TEARS WON'T STOP FLOWING! WWWWWWHHHHHHYYYYYY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Hey now, those are some intense feels you're working with there, I didn't come equipped with my feels protection.