It was planned, every single detail, all the gear we could collect in order to pull it off. Was it all for naught when I left the hive running from my pursuers? I don't know, but they're looking for me and there is no doubt in my mind is that when they find me I will be as good as dead.
Must find a new place if I am to remain concealed, I only have one choice. To hide in one of the most dangerous areas in Equestria, home of the element bearers and student of the the reigning princess. Ponyville.
Before the events of the Canterlot Wedding
I hope you enjoy.
UPDATE - [CHAPTERS 1 - 6 CURRENTLY REVISED]
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This is pretty good, and I will be tracking it. However, a single spelling error near the beginning could be fixed.
7683608 Thanks! As for the spelling mistake, I've read through the first couple of paragraphs and found nothing so far. So I have developed a theory that shall ease your tremors. The word I think you are referring to is, 'someling', which can be, understandably, be mistaken as a spelling mistake for the word 'something'. But worry not good sir, I am delighted to inform you that this was not a mistake but intentional. Why is that? I hear you ask, Well don't worry as it'll come to you eventually. And if this is incorrect then I have succeeded in making a complete fool of myself and will be thoroughly disappointed. If you have managed reading this unnecessarily long block of text, I'd like to congratulate you.
- King of Eggs
P.S ;P
P.P.S. I'll stop now
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I like is so far, but...
Before the wedding invasion.... or before the most recent invasion?
7685445 Let me change that, I got this,
7685516 Lol I was still confused, but now I understand because I thought at first he was running from the royal guard after the invasion, but he was running from other changelings. I understand now lol
also it's invasions* with the s
Oh also second paragraph this part right here "I can't not stop thinking about them" is wrong, it's
"I cannot stop thinking about them" or "I can't stop thinking about them"
7685545 Thanks for pointing that mistake out, I try my best. And don't worry if you're confused about this, because I am confused about this as well. I'm just winging it off the top of my head, although I know roughly where this is going.
Probably roofies...Why would he be dumb enough to think that's a good idea?
7766044 Think about it, if she is hiding in one of the most dangerous locations then no changeling will even consider sending a search party. It is like hiding in a mine field. Really dangerous but can be really good because that would be the last place you'd go to find someone. And also, the next closest place is Canterlot which would've at least be a two day trip on hoof. So she really had no choice in the end.
Man this comment is much shorter then I intended it to be. Oh well ;P
Poor ling. Still, leaving the hive without permission brings that sort of trouble.
This was a neat little romp but I have one piece of advice should you pick this story back up...
Get an editor, PLEASE.
The entire story is a series of errors I've only ever seen on stories by people who don't speak English as their first language.
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Thank you for reading my story. I must agree with you that there is definitely room for improvement. I have begun rewriting this story from chapter one all the way to the current chapter, so this story isn't dead just yet, but it will take time. And, I'll be sure to find an editor along the way. I do intend on finishing this, one way or another.