Tis was the night of Halloween. Trick-or-Treaters from around the neighborhood are getting ready to go to either party hard or go to houses that would give them candy to eat.
Dyanna, a seventeen year old teenager, is getting ready to go to a Halloween party to be with her friends. However, upon this Halloween night, she receives a box that contains a very realistic costume of Queen Chrysalis of the Changelings. She doesn't realize that her life changes upon this night.
Thank you Terabye West for pre-reading my story.
This story was suppose to submitted on Hallowen, but I was still working on it during the night.
EDIT: I have decided to add more chapters to this story.
Chapters (4)
COMMINCING READ!
Well meh I give it a 6 out of 10 ;P I would list why but its hard writing on a phone xP cheers
Hey, great story!
I wish I had one of those costumes... I really wanna be my OC. <sigh>
What's next? They build a hive?
Eh, decent, but having the girl faint through the transformation was a really bad call.
It really should have been one of the center-pieces of the entire story, not a footnote. At least not with the end being her just going to a party with a boy.
As is, there's just not much that actually happens. The suit could have been utterly normal for all the actual in-story consequences putting it on brought.
Hey, I had fun proofreading! If you need a proofreader in the future, gimme a ring.
Also, Blood-Splatter17, I doubt this guy was aware of your existence, so don't go ripping on him for being unoriginal.
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Nah. It's alright. I really appreciate you reading my story. I have decided to put more into this story.
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All shall be explained in the future, my friend.
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Thank you for your critism. I'm gonna do a lot more on this story.
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I really appreciated your help, West!
I've seen that guy you are talking about. I did read his stories along with the costume one, but those were not the things that influenced or inspired me to make this story. This idea came to me when looking at Anthro artwork of Queen Chrysalis on DA.
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Thanks! I'll be adding more chapters soon when I have time!
6597901 Well thats good ^^
6598170 Totallly.
6598199 XD I'm sorry its funny for me when people say totally
Plz continue...
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I will. Chapter two is in progress my friend.
After this read, I have only three words.
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More is on the way.
6608142 Bro, I think he means a costume like the one given to Dyanna.
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Oh I know that. I was telling him that I'm gonna be adding more chapters to the story.
6608920 with an estimate...time remaining until next chapter.
Heh five minutes later I reload the page to see the second chapter.
Fan-bloddy-tastic. Keep da good Work up.
6614896 thanks bro! Chapter three is almost coming!
6634713 Nice!!
And pleas refer to me as Sister.
Just kidding, I am a man.
6636282 XD
Now that sounds like a good way to start making friends with the Ponies.
Chrysalis X Ghost! Ship it like Fedex!
You my friend, got yourself a tracker. This goon be fun.
And here we go
Hit the pony on the head. That's always a good stat. Now we just need a couple diamond dogs, a few evil laughs and we will be good to go.
I like it, stays away from the tropes and isn't aukwardly written, also manages a lot of characters while not leaving them bland personality wise.
Hope you keep up the work on this one, I'm enjoying it.
This story is GODLIKE!!!!!!
6773176 Get ready for the next chapter! XD
You got your idea from the series called "The Costume" didnt ya?
Any chance of this getting an update???
8050612 That probably won't happen until I graduate from college. I just don't have time anymore to write stories on here sadly. My education is more important to me, the stories can wait.
Sweet Celestia! So many favs on this story. Thanks to all the people who still enjoy this fic of mine! I don’t know when this will be updated, but I will try and find a way to do so!
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Totally
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So, when's the next update?
Over 2 and a half years since last update why have u abandoned the story like that plz come back
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Wow. You made this comment 3 years ago. Holy cow. I feel old.
Well, I've had thoughts in looking back at my old stories that I made 5 to 6 years ago. There is a chance I might remake this story, with doing a better job in improving it. So, keep an eye out if you ever see me remake this story.
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Will do, thanks for taking the time to respond
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You're welcome. And sorry for how I didn't respond back then. University life wasn't pleasant to me with how much work they gave me.
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I'm currently at a University myself so I understand
It's sad, but it really was a good story, if you put your hand on it.