Roseluck would think herself a pony reasonable enough not to make questionable decisions. For example, accepting a dare to gather the blooming flower of woodland starsalvia that happens to open its petals at night only, to prove that she is not a crybaby.
Roseluck would think herself a pony reasonable enough not to get lost in the woods for the sake of a dare just like that.
Roseluck would think herself a pony reasonable enough not to venture through a dark cave if she were to find herself in one. Nor to disturb its inhabitant, even inadvertently.
Roseluck thought herself that...
"Sex" tag a generous precaution for risqué, suggestive content of the hypnosis kind.
Chapters (10)
Is this complete?
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It depends, as I have stated in the Author's Notes. I'm... checking the water before diving in.
7629821
Okay, then.
As for the story, it kept me at the tip of my seat. The snake gave me a bit of Jungle Book nostalgia. And well, just one of the best Rose stories I've seen to date.
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That's very generous of you, thank you.
That was... an interesting read. I will admit I liked the the way you wrote it, and I didn't notice any mistakes in spelling or grammar. (but I don't pay attention to those things in the first place) Anyway, I would love to see this continued. It's an interesting idea that you could do a lot with, since this could go multiple directions. Such as Roseluck escaping, or being permanently hypnotized, or Stockholm Symdrome. Do what you like, and I'll be keeping tabs.
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Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Simply incredible. The dialogue, the setting, Cyrus's design, it was all so sublime! Definitely one of my favorite hypnofics on this site, perhaps ever! I'd love a continuation, even if it would only be for one chapter! There are just so many exciting ways things can go from here. It has great potential!
Very well written, I'd love to see more, but no pressure.
I'd say have her stay hypnotized but slowly regain control over time, turn it into a Stockholm syndrome love story, maybe. Or it'd also be nice just to learn more about the naga species.
However, these are just my ideas, so write what you feel like writing, because it's really hard to force yourself to write something.
7630528
Screw recovery, how about the exact opposite of that where Roseluck is ordered to bring her friends to meet her new master?
Any continuation is great, but please don't turn this into a "oh, but they're not that bad after all" thing.
7630528
I agree with this one.
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Thank you very much! I do admit, I was checking out the stories of this kind, yours most attentively, and thought of a possibility of throwing a little challenge the lamia community's way with my style of writing.
7630528
That it is, hence why I've decided to give myself a little space with this fic. Thank you for the comment.
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:chuckles: Oh, don't you worry. Anyone knowing me better realizes that I am far from squandering redemption all around.
That got pretty intense! Well done!
7631014 For my part, I like redemption endings
; but whichever way it goes (assuming this continues) I have no doubt you'll make it interesting! 
7631190
Redemption endings its something that the show is often trying to force down our throats. I wish to believe that there is more to fiction than the fanatical pursuit of Good.
Wow, this was incredible.
I like the whole scenario of Lamiaponies hypnotizing others, but this a whole new level of magnificent writing, when it comes to these kind of hypnofics.
You sir, are marvelous.
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Why, thank you. I do realize that it is not a popular scenario (and seeing the ratio of likes and dislikes - not for the faint of heart), but I am overjoyed to receive praise from people actively intrigued by the premise.
I'd love to see more. Something more 'romancy' though. Like if cyrus allowed roseluck to keep herself to keep her wit that he valued about her. And that allowed either roseluck to begin to 'like' him more through stockholm syndrome or if cyrus began trying to win her heart and struggling with it by not really knowing how to go about it.
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An intriguing premise, though not something I can promise. A naga's mind might be more whimsical than we imagine, after all...
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I wouldn't call anyone around here a "degenerate", friend, even if the topic at hand is not the most popular and is connected to some... questionable preferences when taken too far.
*stares into your eyes while using magic* You will continue the story. Please. ~hug
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:chuckles: You will find that I happen to be quite immune to such blatant techniques. However, hugs of adoration can get you really far.
7636171 *5 million* hugs for you.
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:accepts the hugs: I will find a good use for them, thank you.
is very good, I hope it works out to a happy ending if you continue. :)
7643993
If I do, I cannot promise anything.
*takes deep breath*
Oh no, she's going to scream, take cover! *leaps under table*
PLEASE CONTINUE THIS IT WAS SO AMAZING AND I HONESTLY DONT CARE WHAT YOU DO WITH IT BECAUSE IT WAS SO AMAZING!!!
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:withstands the soundwave, clutching to his chair desperately:
I'm glad you liked it. I will, probably, continue it in a couple of weeks.
7674757 Why why WHY did you tell her that?
THATS THE BEST NEWS I'VE EVER HEARD!
Sorry about my sister. She's a bit...eccentric.
Who the heck are you calling eccentric?
*dives on Aqua Drops*
And now both sisters are in a full on punching fight. Fantastic.
LIKE I SAID! ECCENTRIC!!!
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"There is a lot going on there, isn't it?" :he asks of himself:
"Indeed..." :himself replies:
7677388 FINALLY! Someone who does not think I've escaped from an asylum! See that Azure Breeze?
*drags Aqua Drops back into the fight*
OH COME ON!!!
Wow great chapter I can't wait to see what happens next keep up the good work update soon it has my full attention
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I am hoping to add to this quite soon, I just need to finish another project of mine.
Is this based on the rose and the snek/vice versa?
7761868
Prane parodied me.
7761894 /_|_-/||<=||-||-
Snek led me to a different but delightful
snakedanger noodle.Neat!
This looks like a pretty interesting beginning.
With ponies generally considered as a prey species, there's a surprising lack of fics exploring prey/predator interaction dynamics.
I've been seeking stories with such a premise for a while now and have failed spectacularly, so thanks for writing this!
"Value? As what?"
"My dinner."
Roseluck has fainted.
"Lol, so easy!" Troll naga.
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My danger noodle would like to have a word with that disgrace of a danger noodle, actually, but...
Glad you enjoyed both tales.
7763784
My honest pleasure. I wanted to try and take a story of such premise to a different level than the one often presented. I'm in the middle of the next chapter, actually, I hope to post it fairly soon. Stick around.
7764132
"Wit tastes like fine wine!"
Fantastic work! I look forward to you add, if you add to it.
7777754
I am writing the next chapter right at the moment of this response...
7777783
Wonderful!
I should have seen that in your previous comment. Sorry.
Mighty fine!
Love to see more
7819198
Working on it, working on it!
7819968 Take as much time as you want, but I am eagerly awaiting an update
Admittedly, I am torn.
I like Cyrus and what you've done with him, but in two very different ways between the two chapters. In the first chapter, I liked Cyrus as the more seductive (best word I can find for it) smooth-talker slowly convincing Roseluck to stay with him while still being tender. Here, I like Cyrus in terms of a villain; I am not sure what you intended, but he's gone from being enigmatic but enjoyable to something of a sociopathic maniac. Though admittedly I am viewing this with something of a bias as I don't like master-x relationships anyways.
I probably would have stopped reading by now (though still keeping it liked and faved - the quality of the writing, your pacing, and your descriptions are all excellent and that first chapter is still amazing) though the fact you imply something is about to change even about this situation with that ending means I'll stick around and see where it goes story-wise.
I am truly enjoying the story and finding Cyrus to be a good balance of creepy and kind.
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If that is how you are feeling about Cyrus, then I am thrilled to learn that. I always desired him more complex and intricate, as he is a member of an ancient race, with a perspective diametrically different from a pony one. When he needed Roseluck to trust him, he was more sweet and alluring. Now that he has her more subjugated, or so he thinks, he can allow himself some despotism. How coiled is the mind of a naga.
I am glad I convinced you to stay. I hope I will be able to deliver.
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I am very happy you think so. Stay tuned.
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Alas, that is where I am torn. The use of a naga for despostism is rather common enough I'd like one who's either more straight-up crazy or even simply benevolent without strings attached. Again, what keeps me reading here is the fact that it is well-written and there does seem to be more of a semblance of plot than naga-hypnosis-for-naga-hypnosis' sake.
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I see where you are coming from and I will take it into consideration. My main goal was to show in the story that creatures like nagas do not have to be used purely as an excuse for the trance scenes, but can be far more complex as characters.