Why does Fluttershy have stage fright?
Fluttershy was a beautiful filly but also very shy. One thing that would make her come out of the shell, was singing. She had the most beautiful singing voice in her home. A talent show was coming up and wanted to perform, but some colts from Flight School make her have thoughts of singing ever again.
This story is special to me because I love to sing but I worry people might not like to hear me sing and some people have told me to not sing or perform.
No, this is not a FlutterDash story, I just make them super close friends, sorry about that...
This is labled sad for how fluttershy feels. Not super super sad. Its like in the show sad.
Proofread and edited by atronosthelast
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No comments? On a Fluttershy fic? Well we can't have that, now can we?
The only bit of constructive criticism I can give is thus; The chapter looks cluttered and cramped. Common practice is to seperate each paragraph with a single spaced line, in order to make it so each singular paragraph is in itself distinct and stands out.
So far, it reads like a standard Shy Flutts fic. It makes me feel, and I enjoy it for that.
P.S. The word 'catched' in your authors note is incorrectly spelled 'cached'. Also, in this context -grammar nazi-izm, you know- the word 'caught' might be a better one to use instead.
There are a ton of dialogue portions in this chapter that lead off with periods, and then after quotes descriptors.
Example: "Look Fluttershy, just because they say mean things doesn't mean you have to let it get to you." Rainbow Dash stated.
Instead of ' get to you." Rainbow Dash stated ' these sentence structures should have a comma before the ending quotation mark, to allow the intent to flow instead of stopping dead with the period.
I really reaaaaaally like how you keep focusing on Fluttershys' musical talent, and how she uses it to 'defend' herself and deal with her emotional anguish. I can't wait to see where the story goes from here.
7837040 Thank you. Music helps me with my life, and mine is really tough.