Three years following the events of Legend of Everfree, the magic that Gloriosa wielded has taken its toll on her. Paralyzed from the waist down, she and her brother, Timber Spruce had no other choice but to give up their beloved camp to Filthy Rich to pay the medical costs.
Struggling to come to terms with how much things have changed, Gloriosa still waits for the day that her brother can forgive her for the actions she commited, and the people that she hurt with her own selfishness.
This story is part of a trade with kul for some artwork.
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I really didn't see the character Gloriosa as being selfish a bit deluded maybe but not selfish I see very little that was wrong with her wanting to protect the camp from filthy Rich. I saw Filthy as being the one that was selfish to take down a camp where teens can go to learn about nature and about themselves yeah that seems a bit selfish to me.
Filthy Rich may be a greedy person, but he has a heart of...
gold.
Very sweet, I enjoyed it. Timber and Gloriosa had some nice interactions, and it made for a nice ending to this story.
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He could have been setting up a nature spa.
Though three of the actual movies had pretty much the same ending, this could actually work as an alternate scenario. Bravo
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Wow.... wow..... this was a great one shot.
I probably shouldn't blame you, since this was a commission and all, but way to just completely negate the hard work of the movie characters. They put on that charity concert and saved the Camp but, nope, three years later and it belongs to Filthy Rich anyway. A shame.
7631894 Yeah. I wasn't expecting this to be popular or perfect in the least. There will be people who will say otherwise to my work.
Your words are quite welcomed here, Present.
Great work on this story, very touching.
I kinda feel bad for doing so, but I had to drop a thumbs down here. There were several major developments that were given no explanation; why did Gloriosa become paralyzed? Why did Filthy end up with the camp? What made the medical bills so bad?
I understand working within a word limit, but if there is space to describe the texture of a sandwich, there is space to provide the emotional development that led to Timber forgiving Gloriosa. At points I can see quality descriptions of the setting, but the characters do not receive the same effort.
I do give kudos for describing the issues of using crutches (I have had to deal with then too often myself), but how is a person "paralyzed from the waist down" walking with crutches at all? You need at least one leg able to support at least a little weight to move around with crutches. You could have given her the same issue with the fridge with her on a manual wheelchair (again, personal experience talking), and that would not have jarred this reader out of immersion.
Overall, this seemed to be a story that had a lot more potential that was able to be realized. Sorry for the wall of text, but if I leave a downvote, I feel the obligation to explain.
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It’s quite alright.
When doing a commission or an art trade story, you aren’t given much to work with at times.
I understand the downvote. Have a good day.
Although sad, I like this theme.
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More like too proud to admit she needs help.
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Yeah I thought if she can't stand without the crutches then she needs a chair.