(If there are any spelling mistakes, or if something doesn't make sense, send me a message immediately!) After Sunset steals Twilight's crown, she follows her through the mirror and discovers her crown is now the prize to be won in the Battle City tournament. Now Twilight, her new friends, Yugi Muto, and his friends must work together if they ever wish to defeat Marik and his Rare Hunters, Bakura and Sunset! But can Twilight make to the finals? And if she does, can she defeat the best duelists in the world? Or will she stuck in the human world, FOREVER?! Next story is Sunset vs Bakura.
Chapters (10)
nicely done; there were a few grammar errors here and there throughout the story, but I didn't feel it necessary to be one of THOSE readers...
I'm sorry, I just finished this story, so I'm a little exhausted. Could you please explain what's wrong with these two sentences? I'm a little lazy right now.
Change that to 'prize'.
7607376 Got it. Thanks.
7606767 Hey, I like everything to be perfect. So if you want to point them out. Go ahead, it helps me.
Not much into this sorry. I really loved the original series and well the fact that it all boiled to Twilight and Sunset didn't sit good with me. I wonder what would have happend in a story were is yugi entolls in CHS (and maybe kaiba in crystal prep)
I think I found a small error, during turn 12: Twilight, it suddenly says turn 13: Twilight, then all the turns are off by 1 for the rest of the duel. Fun though.
7609667 You were right. Thanks a lot.
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I would, but truthfully it only stuck out to me a couple of times... 
7607674 it's fine now: I guess part of the problem was that I would occasionally forget the original Attack Points for the monsters that were affected, you know?
7611283 Don't worry about it. We all have those days where we forget. Plus, thanks for showing me those errors.
7611269 Sorry about that, they are fixed. Thanks for the update.
I like the running gag where Tristan always gets beat up by Flash Sentry and Spike(or someone else) when he looks down on Twilight
7692337 Thanks, glad you like it. I hate Tristan in case you couldn't tell.
nicely done, but I caught a slight error in the play-by-play:
ironically, the math ISN'T the problem here...at least in the traditional sense; apparently the Hermit only gains 300 points with it's effect; don't believe me? have a look: http://yugioh.wikia.com/wiki/Hermit_of_Prophecy
7778645 I believe you. Pardon me, my bad. Thanks for the update.
7780151 in order (because reasons): fair enough, not a problem, and your welcome
You know I always felt the Fluffal/Frightfur's would be perfect for Bakura. At first they seem harmless but they have a hidden darkness just like him.
...Marik won't be the pushover comedic relief he was in the abridged series, right?
7917696 Of course not.
I think in this situation Marik and Sunset would team up, remember Sunset wants Equestria not the human world so they could help each other get what they want without fear of getting in each other's way later.
7964626 Yeah, if you ignore the fact that Yami Marik is an insane nut-case out to inflict pain and misery strictly because he wants to, they'd make a greeeeeaaaaat team. /S
With all of this abuse, something tells me you have a thing against Tristan.
So a bit of a plot hole, in case I missed something, but it should have been impossible for Twilight and Sunset to use the Gods. Not only did Sunset not recite the ancient text needed to gain control of Ra (Not that she could even read it), but only those with a connection to Ancient Egypt are allowed to use them.
nicely done; also:
😁 I see what you did there
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not only that but once they arrived to CHS joey gave Ra to yugi because he said he needed it more so sunset shimmer shouldn't have had it i don't know if shadow kick forgot about that or not but when i read the fanfic it said that joey GAVE Ra to yugi and it never mentioned that yugi gave it back which leads me to assume that it belonged to yugi so sunset should have won a different card not Ra
then who's on first?
This feels quite rushed, and a little sloppy. HOWEVER, it also shows promise, and I'm a sucker for Yu-gi-oh crossovers.
I have hope for this story, don't let me down.
And you lost me. Your writing is moving too quickly and you are glossing over huge plot points from both original series. I'll read a few more chapters, but you have officially earned my dislike.
I TAKE BACK MY DISLIKE! I'll admit, it still feels like you are rushing things. BUT, once we got into the actual dueling, that's when your writing really started to shine (like rainbows
).
I'll give you credit, the interactions between the Yu-gi-oh and EqG characters is spot on and really fun to read. I would like it if you went more into the descriptive side of writing, but I also shouldn't let it stand in the way of me enjoying your work.
what
just
happened?
Okay, AJ beating up Tristan was way to much. A swift kick in the shin would have been enough.
That was actually one of Duke's and Tristan's nicer moments. Not sure they deserved such a brutal beat-down.
Thievery once again backfiring for Mai and that particular card being Sunset's Ace...absolutely flawless.
Most excellent.
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Tristan and Duke both. A bit scary, really.
Pretty sure Twilight played a spell card while Imperial Order was still active...
Tristan/Duke hatred aside, along with everything else others already mentioned, this was an interesting take on a classic.
Most excellent.
Joey with Ra..... I get the feeling him summoning it in his Brooklyn accent would be the most hilarious thing I'd ever see. XD
Could someone make a list of the cards that Twilight uses?
Because I have made a mess.
Twilight Sparkle vs. Yugi Muto ?!
THE MILLENNIUM DUEL !!!!!!
Perfect music for the final battle's begin:
I re watch all of yugioh sesame 1 on neftex
Imagine this scene with Twilight (Yugi), Rainbow Dash (Joey) and Applejack (Tristan):