If you happen to cry, I will be there. If you happen to smile, will you do the same for me?
Every filly dreams of having her birthday party in a Princess's Castle. When Sweetie Belle offers just that—for the low price of a hundred bits—Silver Spoon can't help wondering if she's being scammed.
Written for the WriteOff prompt "Princess not included"
Huge thanks to Fahrenheit for pre-reading, advice, and helping fill in the plot holes.
Special thanks to fourths for editing.
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Aww such a clever scam.
whoa......... cool...........i dunno wat to say XD but this is goin on my favorites
I like the way you get into her fathers head! My biggest takeaway from this story is that her father sees no value in learning from history!
Minor edits: [the typos have been vanquished!]
7556319 :) Belle is a cunning one :P
7556326 :) Thank you! Glad you enjoyed :D
7556422 :D Her father could be short sighted :) Glad you enjoyed and huge thanks for finding all those :))
7556455
I'm always available on short notice for a final polishing pass, drop me note next time.
7556513 :) Thanks!
OK, This is gonna sound stupid, but I don't really get the scam...
Also, I can't be the only one who wanted to whack Silver's father over the head with a rolled-up newspaper.
7556579 :) The scam is tricking her father to think she's scammed so that he'll let her spend her birthday with her friends
Hmm... Which newspaper? A financial one, hopefully :P
Very nice. This was expanded wonderfully from the Writeoff entry, giving us the full context necessary to understand what that only hinted at. Excellent work all around. Even when I knew the ending—or thought I knew the ending—this still surprised me with both the plot and the depth thereof. Thank you for it.
Also, I do find it interesting how both Silver and her father assume castle = princess. That was never part of the deal. At least, not the parts of it we saw. Still, both clearly have a nasty tendency to make unfounded assumptions, even if the elder tries not to.
Aw, this is great!
7556596
Thanks for clearing that up. ^_^
And sure; whichever paper is thickest.
Sweetie is a sly one. She never mentioned Princess Twilight was going to be there.
It's a Stupid Scam.
The only thing I dont understand is why did she have to pay for her own Birthday Party?
7556659 Thanks :D Always great to hear from you :) Very glad things are a bit clearer in the long version.
Tried to fill in the blanks of the WriteOff (and hopefully explain things better :)
On another note, sorry for Complete Surrender. It might have been a bit too dark
And, yes, you were right :) My take was that they both were so dazzled by the prospect that they didn't consider the fine print :)
See you in the next WriteOff :D
7556699 :) Thankee :) Glad you enjoyed the update :)
7556800 :D If anyone could become the new Princess Platinum, I bet it's her. :)
7557946 Aww... Well, it still worked? O:)
7558453 :) It was more to get her father to notice. The castle was free, and her bits—along with everyone else's—went for ice cream and streamers. :)
7558479 Ah ok :3 that makes a little more sense
This was cute. How many ponies can say that the Princess let them have her castle all to themselves for an entire night? Sounds like a win to me.
So, was Sweetie actually scamming Mr. Spoons, or did she honestly ask him because she thought he'd come up with the money on the spot? 'Cause I could see it going either way.
7559743 :) Hey hey :D Well, it is a win, though if one intially thought she'd be spending time with Twilight, having to "just" be in her castle would seem like a letdown.
7560506 She just wanted to get his attention. :)
Aww, I'm so glad Silver got to have a nice birthday party for once!
Well written, I found it to be an enjoyable read!
7600621 :) Thank you. She deserves it :D
This version definitely makes the story clearer, especially the (originally) confusing ending. The little snippets of her father’s advice was a nice addition. Overall, I found reading it enjoyable as well.
7621522 :) You softy :P
Smart idea on Sweetie's part- reverse psychology for the win!
I liked this take on Silver Spoon's family. Don't think I'd ever seen one quite like it before.
7841361 :D Thanks. Sweetie Belle = cute but deadly :)
7857037 :D Glad you liked this fic as well :D
7858039 Haha yas.
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With Pinkie helping, it'll be a party worth remembering.
Silver's parents can have their bland, under-cooked, rich-pony dinner. Silver's going to have ice cream, chocolate, and party games!
...And maybe they'll play with the magic table in the throne room.
Gotcha