Meeting the Grandparents

by RuinQueenofOblivion

Cloudsdale

Rainbow Dash's POV.

"See you next week, Rainbow Dash," Pearl said as she waved a hoof as we finished working with the other weather Ponies.

"See you, Pearl," I said with a smile as I took off, flying towards my Cloud Mansion. It had been a week since I had adopted Scootaloo, and it had been a pretty quiet week.

I came in for a landing in front of my house and was surprised to find Spitfire waiting for me.

"Private Dash, I'm glad I caught you at home," she said. "I heard about what happened and wanted to check on you."

"Oh, yeah," I said as I flexed my wing. "My wing's all better now, and Scootaloo is really settling in."

"That's good," Spitfire said with a nod. "So does this mean you're going to be ready for the Cloudsdale show on Tuesday?"

Cloudsdale show on Tuesday? Oh dang it, how could I have forgotten about that? I mean I had been distracted lately with Scootaloo, but still...

"Yeah, I should be ready by then," I said nervously, besides I knew the routine, I'd be fine, I hope.

"Good to hear it, why don't you bring Scootaloo with you? I'll bet she'd love to watch," Spitfire said as she took off.

"Yeah... I'll do that," I said, suddenly very nervous about the idea.

Truth was that I had never told my parents about Scootaloo, well except that she was a filly I had taken under my wing. They didn't know that she was my daughter, and I wasn't sure yet how to tell them.

So if I had to go to Cloudsdale with her and met with my parents, then I'd probably have to tell them. Maybe it would be for the best, she was family after all.

I shrugged and headed inside, I'd figure it out later.

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"Mom, I'm home!" Scootaloo said as she came into the living room where I was reading the newest Daring Do book.

"Hey Squirt, how was your day?" I asked as I set down the book.

"Great!" Scootaloo said with a smile as she got up on the couch next to me. "I learned some cool new tricks on my scooter and we played at Sweet Apple Acres."

"Glad you had fun," I said. "Hey listen, the Wonderbolts have a show on Tuesday in Cloudsdale..."

"Cloudsdale? That sounds great!" Scootaloo said happily, her wings buzzing. "I've always wanted to see Cloudsdale, and your shows are always awesome!"

I couldn't help but smile at Scootaloo's energy, I just had to hope that telling my parents would go easy. I pulled her close and nuzzled her gently.

"You'll love it, its awesome," I said with a grin. "Next week is a break from school, what do you say we go there a couple of days early and I'll show you around town?"

"Sounds great!" Scootaloo said happily. "Hey, maybe we can go by your old place, it would be cool to see where you grew up and meet the rest of my family!"

I paused to think about it, she wanted to meet her grandparents, which I understood. She wanted to know more about where she came from, I could get behind that, but I had to admit that I was really nervous about it.

"Mom, is everything okay?" Scootaloo asked as she looked at me confused. "I thought you'd be happy about it."

"I am, but, honestly..." I said and paused again. "I, never told them I had a daughter..."

"Oh," Scootaloo said. "Come on mom, it'll be okay."

I looked into my daughter's purple eyes as she looked at me pleadingly. She wanted to meet her grandparents, and this was probably the best chance we were going to get. I ruffled her mane and smiled. I knew that I had to take this opportunity now that I had it.

"Okay Scootaloo," I said with a smile. "We'll leave tomorrow, does that sound good?"

"Sounds great," Scootaloo said and gave me a hug. "So what's for dinner?"

I smile and we head for the kitchen to start getting ready to eat. I was just glad that we were a family, I just had to hope that we'd be able to keep it up.

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Cloudsdale, it had been awhile since I had come here to see my family. I came in for a landing in front of my childhood home with Scootaloo holding on to me tight.

"Here we are," I said as Scootaloo climbed off my back. "Cloudsdale."

"Wow, its so cool!" She said excitedly. "I want to see everything!"

"Later, I promise," I said as we headed for the front door. "Are you ready to meet your grandparents?"

"Sure am," Scootaloo said as I opened the door and I knocked at the door. After a minute, my mom Firefly, a pink Pegasus with a dark blue mane answered.

"Rainbow Dash, its so good to see you!" Mom said as she ushered us inside. "And who's this cute little filly?"

"I'm Scootaloo," Scootaloo said with a big smile on her face.

"Oh wow, Rainbow Dash has told us all about you," mom said. "I'm Firefly, its nice to finally meet you."

"Hey, is dad home?" I asked.

"Yeah, he's upstairs, I'll call for him," mom said and called up the stairs. "Blaze, Dash came to visit and she brought a friend."

My dad Rainbow Blaze came down the stairs and smiled when he saw us. After some quick introductions we sat down in the living room.

"So what brings you to town?" Dad asked.

"The Wonderbolts have a show the day after tomorrow and I'll be in it," I said, pausing for a moment, I had to figure out how to tell them this part. "Mom, Dad, there's something I should tell you."

"What is it Dash?" Dad asked.

"Well, uh, remember ten years ago when I spent that year in Manehattan?" I asked and they nodded. "I... had a child while I was there and gave her up for adoption. I'm sorry I didn't tell you."

"Why are you telling us now?" Mom asked, I looked at Scootaloo for a moment.

"Mom, Dad... Scootaloo is my daughter," I said, my parents exchanged glances at that, not sure what to even say about that.

"Where's her father?" Dad asked.

"Ran off to Las Pegasus or something," I said. "I'm sorry I didn't tell you before."

"Dash, we're going to have to talk about this," Dad said. "Why don't you show Scootaloo your old room?"

"Okay," I said and headed up the stairs with Scootaloo.

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Scootaloo's POV.

"Is everything going to be okay?" I asked mom as we went upstairs.

"Don't worry Scootaloo, its going to be just fine," mom said, trying to put a reassuring smile on her face. "Your grandparents just need some time to talk is all."

"Okay," I said, I had hoped that would've gone a lot better, but it might not be that bad.

We stopped at the top of the stairs and mom pushed a door open to reveal a bedroom. There were posters of Wonderbolts lining the walls and plenty of memorabilia, I couldn't help but smile at that, mom really hadn't changed a bit from when she was a foal.

"Wow, nice room!" I said and jumped up on her cloud bed. "You really lived here?"

"Yeah, I did," mom said as she sat down next to me and put a wing around me. "Scootaloo, don't worry about it, mom and dad will come to love you as much as I do, I promise."

"I love you too mom," I said and nuzzled her. In all the years I had lived in orphanages, I could've only imagined what it would be like being part of a family like this.

I felt like the luckiest filly in the world right now.

"Dashie? Scootaloo?" Grandma Firefly said as she poked her head inside. "Can we come in?"

"Come on in," mom said as my grandparents came in. I suddenly became nervous, were they going to accept me?

"Rainbow Dash, we wish you had come clean to us before," Grandpa Blaze said.

"I'm sorry, I, just didn't know what to do," mom admitted. "You're right, I should've told you..."

"But what's important is that you told us now," Grandma said as she gave us both a smile. "Scootaloo, your mom has told us a lot about you, and we're happy to have you in our family."

"Welcome to the family Scootaloo," Grandpa said and the two older Pegasi pulled me and mom into a hug.

"Thank you..." I said softly.

This felt, nice, it felt like I was home.

Comments

[andrizzi]

I like the idea and the story is good, but it's way way way waaay too quick and short.
Those events should be filled with emotions and drama, but you skip them in order to tell only the events. But for this sort of story, the reader wants emotions and drama. There are no points in the story where the reader can stop and think about what's happening, or how he's feeling about it. It's even difficult to say what the characters are going through since you don't describe it.

"Well, uh, remember ten years ago when I spent that year in Manehattan?" I asked and they nodded. "I... had a child while I was there and gave her up for adoption. I'm sorry I didn't tell you."

Not only that came practically out of nowhere, but the dialogue itself lacks emotion. How should I picture it? Is she saying it really fast because she's scared? Or is she talking slowly because she's hesitant? Is she crying? Is she avoiding eye contact? Now, you shouldn't write plain emotions unless you don't know how to avoid that or you're pointing out something final. But you should leave hints of how they're feeling. Describe what's happening. If you read Ezn's guide you'll find the line: show, don't tell.

Still, thumbs up for you. I'm looking forward to reading the next chap of Deepest Desires.

[StarDancer1123]

Wonderful storyline, I think you can make a great fanfic out of it! I agree with andrizzi in that you should slow down a bit and try to add some more emotion to your dialog, an easy way to do this is to go through your writing then think "ok how is she saying this, how does she feel?" and replace said for one of these words.

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[SumDankPony]

10/10
That's some quality rainbow pony

[RuinQueenofOblivion]

7509786 Thanks

[ExoDemonG]

I like the story, I really do. I like the idea of it and it pains me to say that there's a nitpick about it, well two but the other one is small and it's me probably missing something.

Main point, it's came and went to fast. I literallyb blinked and it was over and all I got out of it was that happy feeling that Scoots has been accepted into the family by RD parents and that was it. I don't know if it's the writing style or something wrong with me. Don't take this the wrong way, I'm just one asshole saying his nitpick.

Second thing, why is it when bringing up Rainbow Dashes parents her mom is named Firefly? It always confused me, sure her farther is named Rainbow Blitz but that somewhat makes sense. Was there an episode that there's that RD said the Firefly is here mothers name?

[DanvilleBengal]

7542165 Long story short, the general fandom is that a few of the mane 6 are the daughters of some of the ponies from G1 The best guess of a generation gap is with Twilight, Fluttershy, and Rainbow Dash. Applejack is a G1 bringback, similar to Spike, and the general idea is that our Pinkie Pie is just Surprise from G1, just without wings. Or to be easier, one could say that the wings simply came off Surprise and were put on Posey, hence G4 Fluttershy and Pinkie Pie. Rarity is completely new. But that's for another discussion.

Anyway, back to the generation shift, and of course, it starts with the leader of the Mane 6, Twilight Sparkle. We have seen Twilight's parents before, even in speaking roles, and many have noticed that the mare that is Twilight's Twilight's mother, Twilight Velvet is the same pony that G1 Twilight comes from, complete with her love of astromony and her gift of magic. Obviously there is a redesign for modern day, but the same concept is there.

A similar situation goes with Fluttershy, which prior to the episode "Flutter Brutter", we all assumed that Fluttershy's mother would be the G1 Earth pony Posey, who remarkably looks just like Fluttershy in mane and coat color, just that Posey's cutie mark is a bunch of flower (tulips, if you want to be specific), and obviously Fluttershy is a Pegasus. I have to admit though, when "Flutter Brutter" premiered, it kinda blew up headcanons but gavanized them as well. Mrs. Shy is a Pegasus, same as Fluttershy, but she has the same yellow coat, if a bit paler than Fluttershy's, a darker shade of pink than her daughter's, not to mention the cutie mark on her is--you guessed it--flowers, similar to Posey. And also, she has the same timidness from Posey, similar to her daughter now. So, there is a lot of discussion that G4 Mrs. Shy is still Posey, just redesigned--similar to when the team at DHX redesigned Moondancer but still had the same cutie mark she had in G1.

Now as for Rainbow Dash, Word of God (meaning Lauren Faust) have mentioned that G1 Firefly is the inspiration for the Dashie that we all adore and love, and to completely blow up that G3 Rainbow Dash that would make today's Rarity a run for her money, but remember it is pretty much opinion on that. A lot of people that remember the MLP from the 80s know that Firefly is brash, and pretty much a tomboy, similar to Dash now. And from some episodes, particularly Games Ponies Play, we know that Dash has a father, but we have yet to see a mother. So the general consensus is that G1 Firefly is G4 Dash's mother. And until a future episode says otherwise, it just works that Firefly is Dashie's mom--Dash has so much in Firefly in personality and style. There is some opinions that Firefly is or was a Wonderbolt at some point as well, which could explain Dash's admiration for the Wonderbolts. There is the mystery of what happened to Firefly though if that is the case and Dash is her daughter. And some of those can get a little dark, but that's for another day.

[ExoDemonG]

7711500 ohhhh okay that make sense ty

[DanvilleBengal]

7711537

No problem.

Though, have to say that I remember a lot of it, even though I was born in the 80s...thank goodness for YouTube and the Internet!! And honestly, I was surprised that I remembered a bunch of it, considering that I was like 3 when those movies came out. Kinda weirds me out that I know that much about what's considered a show for little girls and I'm a guy, but can't help what I like to watch.

[Foxhelm]

A little short, but good. So is the father going to pop up?

[RuinQueenofOblivion]

7725032 Read Deepest Desires next.

[Foxhelm]

7725043 thanks

[RuinQueenofOblivion]

7725759 You're welcome.