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DJLowrider


Longtime fic author for other series, father of two, and I enjoy MLP:FiM with my whole family.

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When Twilight Sparkle comes down deathly ill, it is a race against time to get her the help she needs to recover. Will her friends be willing to accept any help to save her, even if it comes from the most unlikely pony imaginable?

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Comments ( 22 )

Your resident grammar Nazi would like to remind me that question marks go after questions.

Other than that, it was pretty well written- the dialogue was IC and the storyline was rather captivating.

Just something I have to note is the fact that Pinkie and Fluttershy were actually in Trixie's crowd when she was performing, so they know who she is. They were only background characters and didn't speak, but it was kind of a "Blink and you miss it" deal. They're standing right next to the other four members of the Mane Six when the camera pans to show the character's reaction. Just it's just a minor detail, and I wanted to mention it. Great story btw. :pinkiehappy:

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In subsequent viewings of Boast Busters I came to realize the same thing. When I originally wrote this story it just didn't register to me that they were actually there since their appearances were in cameo form only.

I'm tempted to take this story down, give it some revising and put it back up for re-consideration, but if I do it'll be after some of the other writing projects I have in the pipeline currently.

Real nice story... but I can't help but laugh at the ending...

"instead of discarding it as she usually did with her student's reports"
Trollestia attacks again. Problem?

Faved, i like this story and it's portrayal of trixie as well as the rest of the mane cast.

But to err is human. :eeyup:

Ah, love this story. Read it on ff.net as well. Great way to have Trixie go back to Ponyville there.

And to forgive equine. :trixieshiftleft:

Very nice story, quite touching. I like the idea of redemption stories for the minor quasi-villans of Season 1. Beautiful background you came up with there for :trixieshiftright:

As much as I dislike Trixie, I AM willing to read redemption fics for her if it's done plausibly and without pairing her with Twilight. I must say this is the second best Trixie Redemption I've seen, and thankfully, no Twixie (I always found that ship impossible, as there's no way Twilight would be infatuated with somepony who treated her friends that way. Considering she was willing to engage her mentor's wrath to protect one of them, for example)

The whole thing feels a little rushed, but then this kind of context can't be dragged out, and I still found it reasonably in character. I especially liked the part where Pinkie was watching over Twilight, very moving, and bringing in Sweetie Bell to watch Twilight as well was a nice touch. Loved the part with the Pinkie Swear as well. I almost broke off from this when you brought in that seventh Element of Harmony, as that is way too easy a cliche to go with. However, in my opinion it was handled well, so I stayed through the whole thing and found it quite plausible, especially with the characters themselves not being able to find an explanation.

Solid, well thought out fic overall, and one I've added to my favorites, like I did over on Fanfiction.net :twilightsmile::moustache::trixieshiftright:

27305 Indeed. An obvious reference... but what did you expect? The story fit the title perfectly.

On another note... WHY IS THIS NOT CANNON!?:flutterrage:

Liking everything so far, except Twi not wanting to contact the Princess. If she was "just sick" I would understand, but she's the Element of Magic. Her life is more than just her own, her powers are needed to safeguard the world from evil. Her life being threatened is a matter of national security.

Also, shouldn't she be in the shower to cool that horn down a bit?

Chapter 2, was touching but I had issues with it.

First, I don't really like the way you handwaved Trixie's arrogance and cruelty. Her tragic story EXPLAINS a lot of her behavior, but does not really excuse it. The part of her act where she humiliates others is not something that makes sense in a "misunderstood" character.
Second, I'm pretty sure Celestia doesn't throw out Twilight's reports. Even before S2 this is a somewhat silly idea, considering these are technically school project reports.

I remember reading this over at Fanfiction. Glad to see it here.

I liked it. Good job.

I have to comment...

Where was Zecora during all of this?

The field of herbs is too far for anypony but Rainbow to get there in time, but Zecora's is only an hour or so away, and she's known for having a stockpile of rare and medicinal herbs. Considering Horn Pox is a fairly common disease (and Zecora had the cure for Cutie Pox, an extinct disease, regardless of whether or not it was magically implemented), You'd think the mane six (five?) would visit the resident potion master first.

Just a bit of fridge logic.

I like redemption stories like this that really make me feel bad for the character. Also the way Trixie cared for Twilight was sweet. :3

I was lead to this story due to a post in a group that I am a part of. I normally try to stay away from stories that have the 'Tragedy' tag which is why I haven't read it sooner. I am so glad I read this though. This was a very touching story. Have a like and a fav.:pinkiehappy:

This was beautifully done. I love redemption fics, and I've always liked the idea of there being other lesser-known elements, but it's nigh impossible to write such a story without entirely upending the canon universe. You've done a masterful job of it.

"Hey there, Twilight," she said softly. "It's Pinkie Pie. But I guess you knew that. Well, you would if you were awake. But don't bother waking up just now, you need your rest. In the meantime, I'll tell you all about the party I'm gonna throw for you when you're up and around again! It's gonna be off the hook! I'll get Vinyl Scratch to DJ for it and we'll have some sweet jams to rock out to. Oh, and there'll be all kinds of cakes and pies and other stuff to eat on hand. I'll make sure to have whatever you want there. Don't worry about imposing; it's your party after all.

"Oh, oh! And games! We'll have a ton of games! Like hide and seek, and pin the tail on the pony! Oh, and maybe bingo too. Would you mind if we played bingo? I really like bingo, especially since there's all the numbers and…and the numbers remind me of you because…y'know, you're so smart and all. And you can make sense out of numbers and all sorts of stuff that I don't understand."

Pinkie didn't even register the tears streaming down her face as she continued to talk to an unconscious Twilight. She just kept smiling as she talked.

"It'll be a really great party," she told her in a wavering voice. "Maybe even the best I've ever thrown. And it'll all be for you. So…you've just got to get better. You've got to. I can't throw this party without you there, after all. It just wouldn't…it wouldn't be a proper party without you. So just…get better. Okay? Please, Twilight…please get better…"

Pinkie rested her head on the bed next to Twilight, muffling the sounds of her sobbing with the mattress as she continued to plead quietly with her over and over to get better.

What is this weird feeling in my chest? :fluttercry:

As Trixie strained and Twilight suffered, a light began to permeate the room from above. The five pony friends looked up and saw the Elements of Harmony materializing above each of them briefly before forming around their necks into their respective necklaces. Twilight's crown also became visible atop her head. As they all wondered what was going on, another stone similar to those that represented the Elements came into view above Trixie's head. This one had what looked like a teardrop carved into it. It burst into a shower of sparkles that then formed around Trixie's neck into a necklace of her own, with a pearl-colored gem set in the front in the shape of her cutie mark.

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