Welcome, this is my really first shipping story.
Rainbow Dash has told Fluttershy, that she is in love with her.
But Fluttershy is unsure, if she shares the feeling,
or even if she worths of it.
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- Member Since 9th Jan, 2016
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Lethrael
I'm a German writer, who just get into the Brony fandom a year ago. I love to write and do it usually in German, but am willing to improve my mediocre English with the translation of my first fanfic.
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7428279 DON'T HURT ME NO MORE!
7428438 OOOOH OOH OHH
OHHHH
7429088 So what is right and what is wrong
Gimme a sign
7430730
Oh, I don't know, what can I do?
Okay, I admit it, the title isn't a good one.
And I feel a little ashamed to use it.
But could you please set a comment for the story.
I ask you for a little constructive criticism.
Thank you very much.
7429088 You are literally everywhere and it's amazing.
This was pretty good. The English wasn't shabby, either.
The Grammar is basic
Paragraphs are okay
The characters seem fine
But there is no wow factor
Overall: 5/10 (not any less than 4 though)