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    Of Hurdles, Stumbles, and the Fall...

    No I'm not retiring, but I couldn't think of a better title.

    I guess you could say I've been 'stuck' for a while now. A little while after putting out Fluttershy's House of Villains, I got to work on a new story, and quickly pumped out 5k+ words for it and had the entire plot outlined (10-15k words).

    Then, somewhere around 9k words, a third of the way through the second part of the fic, I realized I forgot to make the characters not suck. I'm really at an utter loss. I started out trying to write a Romeo and a Juliet, but after what one could call the 'honeymoon phase' or 'boy-meets-girl phase', I realized there was nowhere to go with their relationship and they were still far from their destination at the story's end.

    I've been tempted to scrap the story, but there plot underlying it feels really good, so I haven't been able to let it go. It feels like if I could just make the characters more of... characters, I would have a really great story on my hands. The problem frustrated me to the point where I just slowly thought about it less and less, until I barely ever worked on it, letting programming and other activities take over the time I used to spend writing.

    Usually when I hit a wall, I either find a way around or over it, or I accept the problems as mistakes that have already been made and carry on. This time I haven't managed to do either.

    I guess the main reason I'm posting this is to voice my frustrations, rubberducking in hopes of finding a solution, but also I feel like I owe some explanation.

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[Complete!] When Rainbow Dash crashes into the library one too many times, Twilight ends up becoming her coach for the upcoming Best Young Flier Competition. But Rainbow Dash wants more, and relationships are never as perfect as they seem.

First Published
5th Dec 2011
Last Modified
12th Jan 2014

Well written with natural sounding dialogue, though the end seems a little rushed. I'm keeping an eye on this one

I'm not a big fan of TwiDash, but I'm so glad I gave this a chance; this is very very good, keep it up. ^_^

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#3 · 150w, 3d ago · 6 · 2 · Chapter 1: Helping Hooves ·

Nice start, I like it.

It's not often that you find a shipfic where you get to watch the feelings develop.  I look forward to watching this one develop.

Shipfic of the year mang

No grammar errors, plot well developed, excellent writing

Perfect shit mang

( I also like the dialogue )

Tracking and five'd

Twilight being my Favorite And all, I only prefer ships with her.... Mostly....

Anywaaaaaay, This is a great Start, Im gonna track it.

Cheers

~iraqlobstah

Found some grammar mistakes and a few spelling mistakes like for grammar " Twilight said in a very flat tone daring for rainbow to make fun it" last 2 words need 'of' between them.

I'm not going to names them all but anyways it's getting tracked.

Damn spell check!!!!!

I didn't think I'd be interested in mane six shipping, but this caught my eye. Good writing, though at times the placement of actions in and around dialogue made it a bit confusing, like so:

"I-huh, what?-no!" Twilight gave her a peculiar look at the way she was acting. "I just... Yesterday was really fun, and I-uh, was wondering if we could hang out." Twilight's eyes widened a little in surprise.

Still pretty good, though. 4.5/5. Look forward to seeing more.

interesting start. I don't see how Rainbow suddenly went from wanting to be under a charm to truth or dare, but I guess we've seen weirder behavior before.

A lot seemed to happen in a short amount of time. It was a bit rushed, but not so much that it made me stop reading. I'm pretty excited to see how this slumber party of there's goes... :twilightsmile::rainbowkiss:

From 1 t o10, I give your  first chapter a 9.  this is looking to be really good, you have a good plot and you already have some conflict set up as well. very well done.

iiiiiiiiiiinteresting. i'll be watching this one.:pinkiehappy:  score:4.5/5 mild spelling errors, but they didn't detract from the story any. good first chapter man!

I have but one quip. "Anyways..." It's in dialogue, so it's technically not a grammatical error, but I think Twilight would know better. :derpytongue2:

Pardon my griping over it, but it's just one of those things. At any rate, 5/5 and tracking. Thank you very much for the gradual ship; most are too abrupt.

I have to say this story has better pacing than most shipfics, good writing to boot. :twilightsmile:

It's nice to see a story where they arent instantly in love, not that those stories are bad but its a nice change :)

The start had me thinking about dash and rarity, they need to have a bonding episode sometime.

Onto chapter two :D

I can tell you know a thing or two about writing. I'd say, 95% of times i would tell someone that wrote a story like this, that they used almost no descriptive imagery, and i couldn't visualise what you had put onto paper, but thats the beauty of this piece. It would be ruined if it had anymore descriptive imagery, simply because of its carefree, semi-firstperson aspect. the ending was a little... stressed. rushed, maybe, but i do applaud you of this piece. exceptional work.

#18 · 150w, 1d ago · 1 · · Chapter 1: Helping Hooves ·

i want to read.... but i have so much to do...... why can't teachers be all like " hey, awesome ponyfics that you haven't read yet exist! no homework for the rest of your life!! be free and happy!!!"  ???????

oh well, i can blow off band practice, can't I? :rainbowhuh:

I definitely can see where this is going. :twilightblush::heart::rainbowkiss:

liking this so far.

you're lucky i'm a binary voter ;) 5/5

And no one is asking for a picture of Dashie with a mustache.  I would think at least someone would want to see it.  Well, I think someone needs to draw it.

Holy crap! Way to get me super interested! So many words and not a single one wasted! You are brilliant. Time to read every last word of this story! :pinkiehappy:

Oh, and, tracked. :)

Natural-sounding, flows well.  Interesting start.

Twilight's annoyance with Dash in the beginning confuses me. She's practicing potentially volatile magic in her home at what is (according to the descriptive text) at or just after midday. So Dash knocks on her door and Twilight loses her concentration and the spell goes Kablooie. :twilightoops::rainbowhuh::rainbowlaugh:Twilight:twilightangry2:then expresses a certain annoyance with Dash:rainbowderp:for knocking on her door--again, at NOON, not in the late evening or early morning--when she... lives in the Ponyville Public Library. I'm assuming the library doesn't close before midday, and I really don't think little-miss-egghead would close up for anything as trivial as a lunch break. It's just, she lives in a building that is ostensibly open to the public, so you think she would make allowances and maybe plan ahead for such interruptions.:twilightblush:

>>331660 True, true... but it's ponyville. There's plenty of precedence for there not being a lot of business at the library- if you go with Fanon, that is. Most authors have it as an accepted fact that not many ponies frequent the library.

don't know if want?:coolphoto:

Impressive! favorited and watched!

Ooh. Somethings going down...

*sees no sex tag*

Ah. Never mind then.

#31 · 117w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 2: Burning Out ·

Did you rewrite everything? :twilightoops:

#33 · 117w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 3: Drive ·

This looks familiar... :rainbowderp:  Ah, it's been re-written! Neat-o!

#34 · 117w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 2: Burning Out ·

Nice chapter! can't wait for the next one! :twilightblush::rainbowkiss:

#35 · 117w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 2: Burning Out ·

soundslikeitsgoingtobeamazing

ok i had to do it just because of your name XD

anyways, looking forward to more...

#36 · 117w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 3: Drive ·

Wait, wasn't this the fic of the love triangle and was around a chapter with Celestia and Dash talking about Twilight? Or am I thinking of another fic?

#37 · 117w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 2: Burning Out ·

I really like it, I just have this voice in my head saying "only 20 pushups and a minute of plank, with 30 sit ups". I just realized that I may work out too much...

#38 · 117w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 3: Drive ·

Reading it again because reasons.

#39 · 117w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 2: Burning Out ·

I know how this story goes, yet I still be sad for the twilight, and happy, then sad again and  happy again

WHY YOU MAKE ME PASS FOR IT AGAIN

......

#40 · 117w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 3: Drive ·

Your writing has improved from the last version, to me at least.

I still want to see how this ends though. I hope it's happy and whatnot.

#41 · 117w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 3: Drive ·

Ugh, now I want more chapters! :rainbowderp:

#43 · 117w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 3: Drive ·

Sweet, Cute. I like where this is going. keep it up.

#44 · 117w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 3: Drive ·

thumb up # 1001 and well deserved at that.:heart:

#45 · 117w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 3: Drive ·

>>943853 Much better phasers this time around.

#46 · 117w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 3: Drive ·

why must you wright so well come on man i need to sleep.

#47 · 117w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 3: Drive ·

Hey you NEED to post more!:pinkiehappy:

#48 · 117w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 3: Drive ·

Yes! This is gonna be good... :yay:

I saw the cover picture and I thought this would be like that one story where R.D. gets a saddle for Twilight to ride on to help Rainbow Dash practice in the sky.

But apparently it's not. Gonna read the next chapter!

#50 · 117w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 3: Drive ·

le d'awwww

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