Celestia tends to be cranky when she's stressed. So when Discord wakes her up to complain about feeling like Fluttershy has been ignoring him. She doesn't take it well. After a heated argument, a magical mishap between the two causes them to regress in age.
You are Anon, a member of Luna's royal guard and a unicorn with a special talent for transference magic. And when a magical mishap happens in Celestia's quarters, you become charged with being little Tia's new caregiver for when Luna is busy with her royal duties. And you soon learn that Tia was not an easy filly to take care of.
And between Tia, Luna having no experience with raising children, and Fluttershy's issues with little Dissy, life is certainly not going to be the same.
Inspired by Moonie Shorts by Eighth. Gene's point of view can be found in Little Dissy.
Yay a filly celestia story i can't wait to see what happens next keep up the good work update soon
Twilight reaction will be interesting to read.
Pretty cool story. But you have some broken URLs in both viewpoints. You might want to fix those...
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I'm not sure how that happened. Maybe it has something to do with Google Docs. But I think I fixed it.
7346305 Awesome. Now I'm going to go click them!
Wow. I am absolutely LOVING this so far! You are doing a great job with the story line, keep it up! I look forward to hearing more.
To be honest, I'm a little disappointed in this story. The dialog is loaded with exposition and unnatural, unrealistic structures. The pacing is jerky and either too quick that it doesn't paint a clear picture, or too slow and full of necessary information. What's worse, these first three chapters have all been about build up and almost not at all about filly Celestia. It's revolving around Anon. I was more interested in learning about his bastard child than Celestia by the end of the third chapter.
I hope to see massive improvement before I can actually say I like the story rather than the idea. Sorry I'm probably coming off as a jerk right now, I'm just really disappointed with this so far.
Personally, I think It's a shame you cancelled this. While it's not the best, it seemed like you had a pretty clear idea of where you wanted to take this and with practice comes improvement if you aim for it. I liked the idea, and how you've got two different stories of two character's different perspectives, doing different things. I feel there was a real potential in here.
Also more filly Celestia would have been a good thing. Just antics and time spent trying to care for her was something I was looking for when I read the synopsis.
I'd say my biggest criticism would be that there is a lot of telling compared to showing. Especially in the prologue. Like with the transference power, I think it'd be better to elude to it so we know it's a possibility then find a time to use it. Create a scene just for showing it off if you want.
I also want to say that I find it very sweet of you to say this was inspired by something I wrote.
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The problem is that I have too many fanfic ideas in my head. And this story I just didn't have a clear idea for other than the premise.
But as for being based off of something of yours, it's true. It was inspired by Moonie Shorts.