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Huzzah

Daytime is the chance for Princess Luna to have her free time in doing whatever it is she most interests. Gaming just seems to be a delighted pass time for The Princess of The Night!

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Rune Dancer #1 · Jul 18th, 2016 · 1 · ·

Not a bad fluff piece, transitions harder than a brick wall and could use some more detail work, but other than that I feel you have captured a very playful side to the sisters. Suggestion: see what details about Luna's gameplay you can add without breaking the flow. What kind of players is she playing with and how well does she actually play. How loud is she? Can she be heard from the throne room? Details like these can flesh it out a bit more and help go from "gaming time" to "duty time"

Just my opinion though. Cheers!