The Spark

by rikkuidol

Prologue

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Mirrodin(?) "???"

Tezzeret.......Tezzeret.........how fare you in the planes of Mirrodin?

Bolas?.....again you invade my mind?! will you not leave me be? if you continue to invade and play with my mind i may not be sane enough to be of use to you anymore...

hmhmhmhmhm....foolish tezzeret....you are already insane, now, what has happened to mirrodin?

mirrodin?.....mirrodin is nolonger present

i see, so it is safe to assume that it is now "New Phyrexia"

I presume, yes, but there are still some mirrans loitering about, our Blighted agents have confirmed that most of them reside near the "Great Furnace", but the Preator of the Furnace take's no interest and is willingly letting them stay there.

i see, well, it's just a matter of time before they battle against each other for dominance of the plane, and after said battle that is where we come in...

I assumed that much... now leave me be dragon!

hmhmhm...i will come back to you another time, i must take hold of another plane....till next time tezzeret the seeker

I truly must be insane....just being here with these Phyrexians, being sane is insane.

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Zendikar "Eye of Ugin"

Sarkhan....sarkhan vol....

Master?.... it has been a long time!

how fare you sarkhan vol? what news have you for me? what of the eye of ugin?

I am fine master...i bear good news master, the Eldrazi's have been coming out of the Eye more and more often now, it will just be a matter of time before we take hold of this plane master.

hmhmhmhm.....it is indeed good news sarkhan, i will come back to you, for when i am not sure, but continue your obeservation. till next time Sarkhan Vol..

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????

hmhmhmhm.....It seems, everything is going according to plan in one way or another...now, it is time to visit this plane again after a very long time.

I pray that things have been the same as before...

A plane that is resided by two Planeswalkers and is treated as Deities

hmhmhmhm...

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???

"!?!"

"is everything alright sister?" said a Black coated Alicorn with mane that resembles the night sky that flows like a void.

"Im fine,but I believe that we will be having a visitor." said a White coated Alicorn with mane that resemble a lighter rainbow that flows like a void.

"a visitor? who? your student and his friends?"

"not quite..someone from long ago i believe, i pray that his intentions are different this time"

"don't tell me...is it him?"

"i believe so sister...let us be prepaired for his arrival"

"indeed"

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Celestia....Luna....You best be Prepaired for what i will be bringing to your Plane of......

Equestria......

hmhmhmhmhm...........

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End of Prolouge

Comments

[Verdant Sea]

A M:tG crossover, yes! I always thought Nicol Bolas was pretty cool, I even tried to shoehorn him into a lot of decks and failed miserably, lol.

Anyways, this story seems promising from what little is done so far except one thing.
You're using "plain" where it should be "plane." They are Planeswalkers as in traveling planes of existence. Plainswalkers would be like nomads traveling on huge open stretches of grassland.

[Jeff Belinger]

MY MIND IS FULL OF WIN!

Nicol Bolas and Discord would make the most powerful team!!!!!
i hope the other planeswalkers come in too!!!!!

[Brony Tom]

Okay, a little cleaning up and this story seems like it should be deserving of a thumbs up.

1. Each new sentence requires a capital letter.
2. "i" should always be capitalized when referring to one's self ("I went to the market", as opposed to "i went to the market")
3. Every sentence requires some form of ending punctuation, be it a period, question mark, or exclamation point.
4. Proper nouns like "Mirrodin" require capital letters.
5. Verbs do not take apostrophes, and nouns only take them to show possession. ("take's" should be "takes", and "Eldrazi's" should be "Eldrazi", unless you are talking about something that belongs to an Eldrazi, in which case it would be "Eldrazi's")
6. Whenever a speaker addresses his/her audience directly, use a comma before the name of the listener. ("Leave me be dragon" should be "Leave me be, dragon.")
7. Run your text through a spellchecker. Too many spelling errors to point out.
8. Be sure that your verb and noun are in the same case. ("Planeswalkers is" should be "Planeswalkers are")

If I missed anything, I'll add it later.

Anyways, the plot itself seems fine so far. I shall read the rest now.