While in the Depths of Tartarus, Screwball witnesses the death of her father. Finally, the reaper got the elusive chaos god. The chaotic magic from her father is absorbed by Screwball. The magical whiplash causes rips in the universe to emerge. An unfortunate human falls in. Unable to survive in the depths of hell, Screwball saves him without knowledge of the ramifications. This action thrusts our human Anthony Miles into the driver's seat, allowing him to control the body of the chaotic filly.
Report any grammatical mistakes or spelling issues you find along with plot holes. I'll be sure to address all of them.
Prologue is broken into two parts.
Chapters (3)
This is a good story so far, and I can't wait to read more of it,
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I'm glad you both like the story. It took me about three months of planning before deciding to prematurely post this story. Yes, I consider this story to still be in early editing stages. I had grammar and spelling help too.
There is a hidden message in the second prologue chapter. If you would like to see your OC featured in my story, solve the message. You have to translate it ACCURATELY. Word-order matters.
Give it a shot.
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good luck.
This story is getting very interesting to read keep up a good work update more on this story your doing great keep up the good work update soon. Question will there be a new chapter soon.
7196555 it is very possible. but i'm a bit busy. it may or may not come... but i have NOT given up on this story. ;) there will be more chapters
i have read over this chapter again and again, but i don't think i've found it.
Unless my guess about either of these is right, i don't get that camio. damn.
anyway, my first guess is this line from Hades: “May Zeus be with you.” Is that the message, a callback to star wars' “May the force be with you.”?
Or, option two, the crotch gag: “Order is ready for My Crotch! Mike Rotch! Your order is ready.” The man from earlier stalks up and takes his meal while the entire building is in laughter. I burst into laughter also as I realize what just happened. Mike Rotch? That is really funny! being a reference to The Simpsons and how Bart is always pranking Moe.
By the way, a hint to let the reader find the joke more humorous without making it lose some of it's appeal: don't right what it's meant to sound like. By writing My Crotch, the joke becomes obvious and doesn't let the reader realize it themself, as they've just been told the joke. Let them learn it on there on.
also, FUCK THIS GRIM REAPER! How DARE he use the one Discord loves against him like that. Fucking a hole.
Hades should've punished him for that shit
grammar kinda takes a back seat here and there and some things are just too random and not in the Chaos Random way, but, i'm looking forward to seeing what you do here. It's certainly turning out better than the last Human Turned Screwball story I read recently.
Also, not sure why, but i could've sworn i'd read this before. Eh. whatever. Good luck, my fellow Human trapped in a Chaos Filly's body writer.
7196555 Your avatar is just adorable
7974137 I appreciate your comments! Thank you! My life has sorta become a chaotic mess. I will return to finish this story, but right now, I see no time in the future for it, especially since my internet will be turned off... Ugh. You are right about the Bart Simpson prank call thing but "may Zeus be with you" was just that... Nothing else really to it.
hay continue this story I want to see more chapters
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I apologize but I have no plans to continue this story its only still up so I can look back at how far I've progressed. Theres only one story of mine that I want to continue but there are no plans for that just yet.