Ever since Spike and Sweetie Belle became a couple, Rarity couldn't help but feel jealous over their relationship. As years go by, she finally decides to talk to Spike in order to confess her feelings towards him. Only to realize that she isn't prepare for what Spike has to say about her.
WARNING: Contains mild language.
Not a Foalcon, takes place into the near future.
To those new to my stories and are not comfortable with any mild profanity get your butts outta here.
A big thank you for flutterdash94 for editing this out.
Chapters (1)
*Incomplete*
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You seriously need to work on your writing, even though it's a decent concept for a story.
7119610 Yeah. I'll be honest, though my writing isn't that perfect, at least I'm trying.
7119525 Fixed. My bad
Some grammar and punctuation mistakes. But overall, not bad. Not bad at all.
7119668 Why thank you.
7119816 Thanks for pointing that out. I'll be sure to edit that out.
so many grammar errors that i cant even partially enjoyed the story itself
Thank you, Spike! Rarity does not deserve Spike and never will. As for this story, I agree with a lot of other people. You need to look into getting an editor. I will give this story a like, but not a fav.
Christ, that was unreadable. Between the typos, grammar errors and the switching from past tense to present and back... It was just too much. Please find an editor or run your story through a spell check program.
SEQUEL!
please?
7120525 I'm afraid not for a while. I might consider it, but not for a long time my friend.
7120566
aaawwwww mann.....
Bruh, that story was amazing. Looking forward to more.
7119610 I second this.
Also, sorry to say this, but the premise is far more interesting than the actual story. I know you can make it better and add more context to it. As it stands right now I can't like this but you have a great concept, as I stated before, work from it better and improve.
7121017 Thanks for the feedback. I'll keep that in mind.
He didn't have to be brutal to her.
I personally think that it has potential with a continuation. Just proof read and make the correct adjustments to spelling. I liked what i made out and wish to see a sequel or at least a continuation.
7122964 Thank you, I really appreciate it.
7123967 there really isn't any reason to thank me
7124213 Ever since I released this yesterday, I've received nothing but negative reviews and comments saying what a unreadable and awful story. But you've given me a little bit of hope making me realize that even though while it's not that perfect, I can actually do better. I can't thank you enough.
I really enjoyed this, sure there are some grammatical errors that can be a bit jarring at times, but overall I thought it was a cute short story that could be even better with a little polish!
7122863 ...Really? She's been leading him almost her whole life so what you just said is total bullshit. Sorry but it's true.
7132535 None taken. But I felt that I had to put this out.
7132675 nononono I wasn't talking to you, sorry if it seemed that way. The story is perfect but this OmniFox person person said that Spike was being too "brutal" which is total bull.
7133255 Oh I see. Well I felt that I had to make Spike a bit brutal. Don't get me wrong, I never planned on doing it.
7133935 I didn't see him as being brutal, and even if he was I think he deserved to be considering how long Rarity had led him on over the years and then actually has the nerve to try and be Spike's marefriend, after he starts dating Sweetie Belle.
7134898 Oh well. What's done is done.
7135789 lol
Wow! I must say, I really enjoyed this story. The idea of their relationship, even though it makes me pretty sad to see it this way, it certainly does make sense. :) Great job!
Story has been fixed everypony. Now stop with complaining how terrible the story was at first and enjoy it.
I understood the last story just fine. I still like this though. Spike actually calling out Rarity on the fact that the only reason she said anything was because she was jealous. Like I said before, Rarity does not deserve Spike...and she never will. Why do I have the feeling that Rarity looking for that special stallion, but her soulmate is actually a she?
I didn't read the other version. What was so wrong with it?
7239266 Incorrect grammar and misspelled writing.
DAAAAAAAAAAMN!!!
Rarity just got rekt and rejected!
So... rekjected?
Spike just had some nice intimacy with Sweetie Belle, and Rarity knows! What'll she tell Twilight? Will Spike have to disguise himself?!
I mean... he's a purple and green dragon. Pretty easy to spot. A moustache won't help Spike very much.
And Sweetie Belle... she's posting that whole conversation between Spike and Rarity on YouTube.
I've got nothin'.
All in all, it was a great story.
Agreed.
You got your chance, Rarity and you blew it big time. I don't blame Spike. I blame you
Come on, Even if this story is six months old, everyone should have been thinking of this at the first word of the title of this, and even more so as you read this.
Great premise, although I do feel for Rarity slightly here... keyword being 'slightly'.
Fix up the grammar and you will have quite a one shot on your hands.
Wow... This was amazing. And something that'll probably happen too.
I loved this quick one. I also ship Sweetie Spike! Or Spike Belle? There's no good way to say it... How do you ship this? 
Ships are supposed to click... I'll find out how to make this ship sound better eventually.
He gave you plenty of chances, Rarity, but you blew it. While I'm still a Sparity fan, I think this story taught a very important lesson: If you wait too long to confess, you might lose the one you love, especially if they've fallen in love with someone else.
Quick! Before I read this...why the sex tag?
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You might wanna read it first. But I see what your trying to point out. I was young when I did this.
8451205 My favorite episode!
You should consider making a sequel.
I love this story! Hope you show more of this in the future.