After years of getting shot down by the famous fashionista, Rarity, Spike decides to give up hope on ever finding love...that is, until he learns of Twilight's true feelings for him. Rarity finds out what she was missing out on when Spike begins to bother her less and less. When she makes a move on Spike, unknowing of his and Twilight's relationship, tension rises and relationships break. Now, will Rarity be able to fix what has been broken before lives are changed forever?
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I find myself intrigued by this concept, and Twilight/Spike is always interesting when it's well written like this.
Consider this favourite'd and me interested.
Keep up the great writing! 
Um...no.
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This looks interesting.....
I'm really looking forward to the next chapter.
I got your back 100% on this, Spike/Twilight are my FAVORITE pairing and I wouLd truely love to see more of this...please keep going good sir or madam, I will be tracking and reviewing each and every chapter.
Spike + Twilight
= FOREVER!!!
Avoid fast pacing the confession and you're on your way to a great story.
Bring the next chapter soon.
I'm not a fan of TwiSpi or whatever you call them.I see a mother/son relationship or big sister/little brother than lover/lover relationship.Plus he is a DRAGON and she is a PONY.Age ,Species,Backstory
Relationship,must I go on?
Nothing makes my day like finding some TwiSpike, particularly if it's very well-written like this. I'm looking forward to the next update. Keep up the good work!
THIS IS GREAT!
I'd normally NEVER ship this, but you pull it off very well.
I can't wait to see where this goes.
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765698 *Brohoof* You know that for a fact.
FIRST! Now I'll go read.
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That was...surprisingly fast.
Anyways, happy reading!
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Why zank you!
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No problem!
Oh, and do be sure to tell me any problems you may come across while reading it. Constructive criticism is always a pleasure!
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Okey dokey lokey! I'm working on it right now!
I'm going to record my thoughts as I read the story.
Now, there is a lot of criticism in this, but remember- I'm just super nitpicky. This is a very good story, and I love reading it. You've even made me begin to like Spike pairings! That is no small feat. Actually, I get swayed towards pairings a lot. But still. It's very good.
First, a few paragraphs in- You keep using the wrong "its/it's".
Second- Why is there a name for a gem that she's just discovered?
Third: AWW SPIKEY WIKEY!
Fourth- Those are spines, not fins. He said so in the first episode, "How are my spines? Are they straight?" and comes up several times later.
Fifth- TYYPPPOOOOOOO *degree
Sixth- AAWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW
Seventh- AAAAAAAAAWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW OH MY GOD I MAY JUST CRY
Eighth- AW HER DIARY!!!!!!!!!!
Ninth- Oh, okay, she named the gems.
Tenth: OH MY GOD SO MUCH D'AAAAAAWWWWWWWWWW!!!!!!!!!!!
I.. I get emotional, okay?
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Aw, man! I knew they were spines! I just heard them get called fins for so long, it kinda stuck. I'll go fix it.
Also, DAAAAAMMMMMMNN TYYYPPPPOOOOOO! I need a pre-reader!
Anyway, I'm really glad you like it!
Now if you'll excuse me, I've got some corrections to make! *rushes off to make said corrections laikaboss*
I found no errors with spelling and grammer...I am very impress by how slow your taking their love to come together, most people just throw them together without any thought of falling for one another or thought of how they want them to be together and it's very annoying. Your doing perfect, I wonder more about the No-gems, I'm hoping to learn more about them, and why Twilight does not wish to speak to Rarity about such a matter as breaking Spike's heart.....on to the next chapter, please
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Hehe~ Glad I could help. ^^ You know, if you'd like we could probably figure out a way for me to proofread for you. I'm always in the mood for sneak previews!
If you want.
Or not.
Whatever!
Anyway, yeah, happy I could assist you~
774144
Sure, let's find a way to make that happen! We could exchange emails and I could maybe send you de magicks the day before I post for editing purposes...
...Or, you know, whatever you wanna do is fine...
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Why thank you, new buddy! I'm glad you like the story so far!
I'm thinkin' of doing something in the next chapter with Rarity and Twilight, but...
...can't tell you now. Spoilers and all...
774191
Why, that sounds wonderful, darling! Email my anonymous account, anonymousse21@gmail(dot)com, and then I'll give you my real one. So creepers don't stalk me or anything. Or spam. Spam is bad. Sorry for cluttering up your review space, by the way. 
I can delete it all if you'd like..
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I'll get right on that!
And of course spam is bad! Have you seen what it looks like right outta the can?!
And don't worry about the review space, you delete NOTHING! Now, onto the email thing. I go!
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(Ah, references. XD)
Yay!
Oh, we are going to be the BEST of friends, you and I~
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I do so love the references...
And I managed to finally get the message sent out to you.
You weren't waiting too long, were you?
You aren't mad at me, are you?
Please don't be mad at me!
I DEMAND MOAR!
That is, if you want to
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Mooooooore?! (Please tell me you get that and I don't just read like Twilight
)
Love how this is coming along; that talk under the stars was very touching. The only problem I have with this fanon universe is the certainty that Spike will grow too big to do certain things with Twilight. Is it not possible that he's a unique species that never quite gets that big? Or grows wings?
The only other error I picked up on is the word "persay". It's actually Latin: "per se".
I'm also anticipating the point at which Rarity starts being affected by this change in her day-to-day interaction with Spike. And Princess Celestia's little rule about not thinking about your dragon "that way" certainly adds some intrigue.
@StarLightStarBright,
I got it :)
Also, if you need a pre-reader, I could do it for ya :)
The Princess frowns upon Dragon/Pony relationships, hmm.....? Didn't see that one coming.
Regardless, an excellent chapter with lots of cute Twilight moments! 
You keep 'em coming and we'll keep on reading 'em, 774352.
I'm enjoying this story, slow and steady is the optimum pace for romance stories
Oh, and also
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774191 I love your writing and how you put it on a very slow pace...but I love Spike/Twilight romance even more....a LOT MORE. Anyway, I'm hoping to see the next chapter with Twilight and Rarity soon...hahahaha, understandable, Star, it's all chill. I'm hoping we stay good friends on this site, brought together for the love of Spikelight!!!
775116 Are you kidding, the pacing's perfect!! Right now the small moments are building towards a larger one. It wouldn't make sense if Twilight or Spike suddenly fell in love with the other so soon after Spike's disaster with Rarity. Remember Twi saw him as family before this and Spike was in love with Rarity. Making Twi the rebound girl is not a good idea.
776266 I know bro, I agreed with him and you, I love the slow build up with them, it's prefect...and you right, to my and maybe even your own disappointment, mayn writers make it such so they can fall and love and clop with no build up..don't you hate that? Even more so on such a perfect pair? hmmm...I think of them more as best friends rather then *shivers* family. And your right, being known as the rebound is really painful, but they are going towards true, hoesnt love...not lust, so there is a differance even if it is tough to notice.
I heard that *high hoof*
Aslo, very bad ass pen name.
Oh, the references. You are a genius.
776302 Yeah I can't stand the "omg I'm suddenly in love with this person, now I can't stop thinking about them and they're in my dreams"!
Also thanks, you're name's pretty cool too.
776458 Right...it would be very.....rushed, there is no build up and it's really tough to see it being real love, it's more just like lust and lust for the body alone....no passion, ya know.
I can agree with childhood friends, then they become more over time, start to build up honest true feeling towards one another until they know everything about eachother until they knew them inside and out....after that they start to understand that despise the blocks that others may have and maybe the age differanctice (although you COULD make him older, he does not have to stay a child) that they love eachother more then friends and that maybe if they have the courage that they could experess their feelings and love eachother, with passion not with lust for as long as time allows....I'm sorry...what was the question?
Just kidding.
I hear ya, and that's what makes it funny. True, I have not seen any of the shows yet.
I never could try to resiste it nor will I ever wish to, they are my favorite pairing 100% I have a really warm, happy feeling with Applespike, I like that pairing....but sadly there are not that much of them.
And yeah...read the top of the message that goes from childhood friends to best friends to lvoers and you'll see why I love them so much....best friends becoming lovers is the strongest from of love that can ever be created (in my own eyes that is) and that's why I love Spike/Twilight pairings so much, for that such reason...they know so much about one another, it would be for shame if tehy did not allow that love to grow (and it would tear out my own heart).
Thanks....to be honest, I'm thinking about changing it.
What about yourself? What do you like about this pairing and who is your favorite pair? (Just to let you know and this is my personal view, but I HATE Spike/Rarity with a complete and total passion, but that's my own view, does not mean I'll stop speaking to you or being your friend if you like them)
I approve of most of this. except for the last few lines of her diary entry. twilights a smart girl/filly, she'd either omit such content from her diary(especially if she was as dismissive as she was) or phrase it in a more innocent light.
like so far, am tracking. looking forward to update
Yay! Spike being sincere and twilight being an egghead!
Well written, very well written indeed. I have been looking for a twilight/spike story to top Proteus' "Warming Up". Please keep up the good work. I will be watching.
You continue to pique my interest with each coming chapter. Thank you very much for this story. I have always loved a good spike/twilight ship. I cannot wait to see how you will build up to reveal their feeling for one another. Keep up the work. I will be watching!
776576 Haven't seen the show? Then how are you making up shipping pairing then?
As to why I like the pairing, along the lines of what you said. Their history, the interactions on show and the tender care she can show for him sometimes. I find their relationship interesting because it was the hardest to define on the show. I agree the mother/son thing sends a chill up my spine. Spike is too intelligent to be consider a child or some pet.
As for pairings I'm usually a fan of Spike x anyone else from the main 6 but Rarity stories. Although after certain things that happened in season 2(watch the show) I came to accept Spike x Rarity stories (if done right).
Other pairings I like are Twilight x Luna (or Twilight with Celestia), Appledash, A.J with anyone else in the main 6 before Rarity.
I LIKE IT!!!
I likes it ever since I read it several hours ago.
Yay, sneak peeks!
*Sigh* Ahhh....true love, what a very beautiful, honest emotion.....this is getting better and better with each chapter.
Also, *Slams face on computer* How does Pinkie do it!!! HOWWW???????
Oh my celestia this is awesome
765698 Best pic ever! You go, Spikelight (I think this guy's an even bigger fan then myself about this pairing
) Always a really great thing though.
764568 Normally I would LOVE to get into a fight about this and how everryone has their own views on pairings, but it's my birthday today (June 21) and I'm feeling very relaxed so for once in my life, I'm not going to say anythnig about a person who hates this perfect, honest, heartwarming romantic pair and will tell you to have a great, awesome, ponyful day good sire/madam.
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Thank you! I try my best!
787377 first never question pinkie, two yes this is a good read and rarity has screw up bad, thirdly new paring for me.