Sort of Sequel to: Homework
Having been best friends since kindergarten, when the group of friends started High School, Fluttershy started to grow feeling for her best friend Rainbow Dash. Acting brave she asked her out, with the two lying to they friends about how they feel towards each other.
By dating in secret by telling they friends they are just hanging out as friends, because the two don't do that often anymore. Until a boy shows feelings towards Fluttershy, making Rainbow mad and Fluttershy scared on what everyone will think about them.
Edited by: OmiWriter
Chapters (1)
I liked your story. I thought the characters were written well and the relationship between FS and RD was both believable and cute. The end could have been extended upon in my opinion. I was waiting the entire story for the guy to show up and get told off, but it was over in barely four sentences. Good begining and middle, but the ending seems rushed.
7108104 Well I'm with you I really didn't know how to write that ending. I enjoyed writing this story a lot, one of my favorites to write and with that ending I was thinking on changing it to something else but didn't know what. I guess I could have added a bit more but Flame is just a one of character who wouldn't appear in anything else unlike Lucky Dice and Robin.
Aww, Rainbow and Fluttershy forever.
7108146 No problem. Like I said, I really did like your story and the direction it was taking. I was just looking for a bigger confrontation. Like they go to the bar or out to dinner and this guy starts stiking up a "conversation" with Fluttershy and RD gets jealous rather than "OMG random guy wants to date Fluttershy."
D'aww, the relationship here was really sweet and I'm not normally a fan of this ship. Dunno why, but I'm just not.
The strong point in this story? The portrayal of the characters. Your characters seemed to act mostly in the way I'd want/expect them to. You did alright bro, you did alright.
7111924 Thanks, I had so much fun writing these characters in a relationship and got trapped in the world I created for them.
YAY
I think it seems a bit ironic how I'm writing Fluttershy's Secret, and that story contains a stallion beginning to get feelings for Fluttershy, even though she's with Rainbow Dash. One major difference is that in my story, their friends do actually know about their relationship (except for Sunset Shimmer). When my story reaches it's middle point however, Sunset will learn of RD & FS's 'secret'.
This is a rather cute and adorable story btw. I'm not just saying that because FlutterDash is my OTP, I actually think that the story was good.
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