Life is going well for Gordon. Two years ago he won the jackpot on the lottery and decided to build his dream home in the Yorkshire countryside. 6 months after moving in, he wakes up one day and realises that either the hills have moved, or he has.
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Plot twist! Hey big guy what's an adjutant? Or what do they do exactly? But if you don't want to spoil the next chapter by telling that's fine. I can wait.
new chapter NOW!
Hmm, not sure how to take this chapter. On one hand, I kinda liked it... on the other, the sudden addition of soldier background <and a very high rank to boot...> kinda kills it for me. Frankly it just doesn't jive well with the story so far. I could buy an enlisted rank or specialist, maybe even lieutenant who pulled a single tour that saw some bad bad things at a very young age... the reason that I feel this way, is that nowhere in chapters 1-5 is there anything to make the reader feel that Gordon is anything other than a lucky average joe who hit the lotto and the suddenly <bam> war vet! Like literally outta nowhere, suddenly command officer! Who has to this point shown absolutely no knowledge of combat, tactics, self defense... it seems forced. If you were to edit previous chapter to add hints, and tells it could work well enough... as it stands, not so much. Just my two cents, for what it's worth. I want to like this story, and up to the last two sentences of this chapter I did. Ah well, lets see where this goes...
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7552509 In the British Army an Adjutant is a Captain who is the Colonel's personal staff officer. In an Infantry battalion the adjutant controls the battle whilst the CO commands it. In the Foot Guards, the adjutant of the unit in charge of Trooping the Colour is one of three officers on horseback.
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It was pre-planned. And he's not as young as people think. His age will be revealed in the next chapter but his jackpot win was bitter sweet. I don't want to give away too much because it would spoil it. There will be some more surprises to come. Captain is a fairly low rank though, it's only OF-2 on the NATO ranking code.
NNNNNOOOOOOOOOOOOO NOW I HAVE TO WAIT FOR THE NEXT CHAPTER!!!!!
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Sheesh. That sounds like a really taxing job. Also very hard to obtain. Sounds like Our main man there seen some shit. This makes me excited for the next chapter.
7552586 but if he's all that and been through then when he was at the hospital he should not have been so afraid as he was when Celestia got mad at him or "tear up" when Celestia hit him
7552608 I don't want to give away spoilers but he's been through a fair bit of pain. That and being amongst extraterrestrials and the whole welcoming committee shook him a little. Also Celestia slaps really hard.
7552638 true but if he been through so much pain as u say he would have been used to the pain enough that he could have bear it, winced or grunt yeah that is understandable but tear up like it was like getting hit that hard for the first time no it a'int
That's not much of a reveal. At this point there are probably more soldiers in Equestria than there are in the actual military. It's actually more surprising now if the human in an HiE has no dark past of violence.
Great chapter , keep up the good work
And now, I wait.
7552914 Regardless of how cliche it is, you must admit that it is a great way to amplify the character, a peaceful Utopic society suddenly visited by a person with a more dystopic background.
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Holy shit. This guy is a fucking scary right now. I do not want to get in a hand to hand combat with this guy.
So the apothecary not only has means, motive, and opportunity, but also apparently knew the poison was designed to only affect earth ponies. This is after the announcement that the "unicorn" Selena Totallynotluna was also affected, so that bit of information is not common knowledge.
Every claim Apotek made is testable. There's no reason for the inspector to resort to guesswork. Even if they're not going to consider him a suspect, isn't he still their best lead? Shouldn't they at least see if anyone made any suspicious purchases from him?
Why would they just let him go?
7555143 agreed
7557673 damn right. Even my knowledge in hand to hand combat that my Dad teached me (Mexican Police Federal MMA and H2H) I'll get my ass kick in the first round.
Bro, fuckin amazing story.
You have a thumbs up, my respect and my curiosity.
7584019 Thanks. And there's plenty more to come from Gordon and co.
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Ill be waiting.
Well, I have a feeling we will be seeing Apotek again. I never watched Les MIsérables so I have no idea what those songs are or meant. Rainbow might explain her affections towards Gordon, but I want to see what happens after it's over. What exactly was in that room that made Star Cross shed tears? I look forward to reading the next chapter.
7619784 Yes. I think I was watching season 1 episodes of the series (narrated by Ringo Star) and I thought Gordon (my favourite character) was a good name. Gresley is after Sir Nigel Gresley, Chief Mechanical Engineer of the London North Eastern Railway.
7619796 Awesome, I had a feeling when you brought out the model trains .
7619796 My family and I can't decide between Starr and George Carlin as the best narrator.
A common theme in TTTE fics is to give them last names of their creators.
It just so happens that Gordon and Rainbow Dash are considered as each others counterparts (they ain't shipped).
I was expecting SAS, but knew he was military from the moment I heard locked door.
Besides the whole problem I had in the beginning this book is a real page turner it's fantastic. At first i thought the romance was a bit too fast it got better as did your writing.
The last comma should not be there.
Here, a comma is missing. (Did the previous one want to play Hide and Seek?)
‘‘wish to spend time’’
any?
‘‘were sat’’?
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Or MI-6
This was a awesome and heart warming chapter,I hope Aurora is secretly Celestia. It awesome Gordon is a Soldier.
I knew it, the moment the locked door was mention in a previous chapter I knew it was something military related.