Life is going well for Gordon. Two years ago he won the jackpot on the lottery and decided to build his dream home in the Yorkshire countryside. 6 months after moving in, he wakes up one day and realises that either the hills have moved, or he has.
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god REALLY!?! THIS STORY IS STRAIGHT UP TOXIC!! You've completely ruined the character development and world building to this. Are you really that bad of a masochist? Do you enjoy hurting your own mentality for your own entertainment. I'm sorry but I can't read this anymore.
Finally it's alive
For some reason the aftermath will be brutal. Mostly for our main boy to probably want to move to the griffons and leave the ponies for good. Especially his ex with how she treated him.
I'm just gonna say it, the sudden change in the story to this bizarre sudden extreme racism and hate despite all the character and story development has ruined what could have been a good story if done correctly, it is like the author suddenly went "buck it" and went off in a strange and bizarre direction with no coherency or though to the story told so far.
I was expecting a bit more of a reaction when the girls found out that Gordon was telling the truth. I hope things turn around soon. Also, Twilight needs to be put on probation or something. Let's not forget, she locked several royal guards in her basement, threatened a doctor, and slapped a restrained patient.
The last two chapters took nothing but 360° turn the last two chapters are very dark kind of creeped me out all we need to do is step one secure Gordon then we do Step 2 ascend from Darkness Step 3 rescue the Sun moon from the dungeon step four unleash the human horde in the changeling hive step five skewer the Queen from the throne step six wield the fists of Harmony step 7 raise hell at the queen
Glad to have you back. It’s good to see that the story is still alive.
Rainbow, AJ, and Twilight are going to practically kill themselves with guilt. As for Gordon, assuming he lives through this, is probably going to ask Luna to move his house to wherever the Maquis live. I know I would if I was treated like crap, then raped.
This proves that Gorgon needs to leave, these ponies are toxic, they can’t let go of their beliefs of humans being monsters. Even after Celestia admitted most of it was bull, they can’t accept it deep down. Hopefully this isn’t one of those stories where he unrealistically forgives them. Just tell them to take a hike and leave that backwater town. Thankfully it sounds like Rainbow is about to lose her dream, which might make the lesson stick. As for Twilight, the “mini Celestia” theory isn’t too crazy, even in the show they never really made her butt heads with Celestia, just mindless obedience. Hopefully that comes back to bite her too, along with the rest of the girls, I’d love to see the relationships Gorden has built with other ponies to destroy the elements. Not literally with fire and brimstone, but definitely something that kicks them down to earth.
Also, my theory for the 180 turn is that instead of using direct mind control, the Changelings just influenced their subconscious fears about Gordon. Basically stoking the prejudice that remained under the surface after centuries of speciesism ingrained into them by sunbutt. Once a stressful situation happened the dam broke and it all came to the forefront. But I’m the end, it was their fault for having those fears, even after Gordon showed he’s not what they “wanted” him to be.
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that is straight from black ops, I like it!
10921670
Not really. I think the girls always had a seed of doubt in their heart about Gordon. And if that seed is not deal with, it only takes a little for it to grow. And that's what happent.
Great to see that this story is still alive
The return of the king
Thank fuck, I thought this story was dead
Let me guess it's going to turn out that Starswirl from 800 years ago was a disguised changeling sent to stoke the hatred flames even further right
If this ends up with Gordon forgiving them easily, I'm gonna be pissed.
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I wouldn't like that either. It always amazes me how often (I can't remember when/ if it happened in this story) ponies try to demonize other races in some stories like this one:
"Only humans could do this"
"Ponies couldn't possibly do this"
And with how often lines like those have been said in this story, or one I remember from Twilight in this:
"What you're saying is humans are just violent monsters"
Yet, everything they condemn, they (or changelings now) have at least attempted to do to him or others associated with him on more than one occasion; vandalism, framing him, theft, harassment, attempted murder, torture, false imprisonment, rape, and more. It's things like this that make me wonder how someone can even think about maintaining the moral high ground when they aren't above doing even worse to them than for less justifiable reasons?
I know if I was in his position, I would be calling them out on every little thing before threatening them with death for the hell that was endured, that they deserve whatever happens. That after everything, I would wish that I actually did do everything they're holding against me so they would actually have a justified reason for half the shit since Celestia made the arrest several chapters ago.
Dude seriously WTF were these last chapters?
I really wanna see something down the line where Gordon in a way 'snaps' at everyone for being so single-minded and makes them feel the (mental) pain for some time to come. Let him go to the Griffins and actually live not be stuck trying to survive in a land like this.
And I agree with others in that him just forgiving would be pathetic. Something akin to genocidal is not easily forgiven over some 'I'm Sorry' 'We promise better' etc. etc.
Like others mentioned, I hope it doesn't end with Gordan forgiving everyone. No matter their justifications(not that they hold anything), no one is going to forgive someone for the amount of trauma produced, honestly surprised some evil magic entity hasn't tried bargaining with him yet for revenge
Sheesh this is just getting deeper and darker... and I love it! Keep up the good writing! I can't wait for what comes next :)
Well shit. Everything just keeps getting worse. I can't wait to watch them suffer.
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Honestly, the least they could do is teleport him and his house to Trottingham. Fuck Ponyville, Fuck Equestria.
Now we just have to wait until next year to find out what happens
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not realy - it has built it up a bit. torture of humans in the everfree castle, changelings hinted when gordon got tortured some slight hint that gordon might be x- son of celestia with his name sounding familiar to her. no clue what the mcgufin from the tree might be other than the thing taking crysalis down. An "Gordon now becomes an hero and will forgive every pony that eksist" or an out if the author gets tired with our bullshit an out of the story.
Instead of using 6-7 chapters with some instanses here and there (maybe even make some changeling interactions in the town with gordon where no one belives him), he could have been drinking tea with lyra and the attack on the cmc might happen f.eks. instead it went "fuck it. everyone is a changleing and changelings have done everything bad and we need gordon in a place where we can force negative changeling interactions to happen"
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at this point he should move in with the changeling resistance and the equestrian humans and the resistance should after the removal of crysalis just fuck of from equestria
This is diving into torture porn territory and unfortunately I've seen this kind of thing outright kill storys.
From a solid 8/10 story to a 1/10
What really suck about the story going in this direction is it give Gordon very few options on what to do that wont derail the story anymore then it already is, the only thing i can think of is leaving and not looking back. Most of these ponies are more or less nazis, Twilight is a straight up sociopath (most her friends arnt much better, how the elements work with them is beyond me) and Celestia is a pretty good approximation of pony Hitler. So yeah what else is their to do.
I kinda see what you did here. The season six finale invasion/takeover. I only hope things will start looking up soon. I don't think many of us readers can take much more.
This story took a turn real quickly. I do hope to see it end soon cause it’s honestly becoming something I despise an do not care to read. But the story is good as stated via other chapters. So again I hope you finish this part soon cause it’s slowly killing it in my opinion for I did not come here for non con porn. Anyways hope to see more chapters soon.
I have been following this story for literal years now. And to see it just turn into torture porn really sucks. Regardless of what you do to the changelings afterward, doesnt change the fact that you tortured 70% of all your own main cast of the story. Not only that, but you also put ZERO non con tags or warnings whatsoever for the surprising amount of rape going on. I dont know what changed in the massive amount of gaps this story gets updated in, but i think everyone else can agree its going down hill. Sucks, because it was an ok story for the longest time. Feels like wasted time now. I dont think i can wait another half year to a year just for another rape torture chapter.
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I agree 100% with you. These past 2 chapters blindsided me so hard that I recoiled seeing that this became rape and misery porn. Like holy fuck it came out of no where and made me sick reading the rape and torture scenes. He needs to put spoilers or give a warning of rape and torture.
If there isn’t like a chapter where gordan gets revenge on everyone that fucked him over I’m gunna get a little sad
What the Fucking hell is wrong with this story everything has gone to shit is gone all going fucking mental now I mean chrysalis is a bitch crazy psychopath child murderer bitch!!!
I hope she fucking dies in Tartarus
This is a waste of my bloody time reading this messed up chapter its nothing but death, betrayal, gore, tortured and rape
Go fuck yourself
This is just becoming a sad cliche I had a little hope but at this point I am not even really reading the chapters anymore its become almost a parody of itself maybe it will get better but right now this is becoming more groan worthy than interesting.
I want gordan to at least get revenge on “not rainbow” for raping him
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Bullshit
ok, who the fuck wrote these 2 chapters
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What do you mean bullshit? That's a real thing.
I think the girls convinced themselves that Gordon is not what they think, but deep inside them there was still doubt, doubt that was never dealt with. So when they suspect Gordon, that little doubt came bursting through.
And if you don't like the story anymore then why are you still here then? Just leave it then.
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I understand that theres a chance that they still don't trust him but I doubt that's even the case. The mane 6 went through great lengths to prove that he's not a bad person. Hell, Twilight even SLAPPED celestia for being a xenophobic. So coming from that to chapters 23 and 24 is weird as hell and destroys the character development that was in the story
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Then what do you think happent?
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Several things must've happened in the the story to get to this point: A. The changelings casted a spell that clouded the mane six judgement on him
B. The mane six still MIGHT not trust him fully
C. All of the above
D. The author got lazy and let someone else write this story but said someone gave a middle finger to the all the character development and world building that this story went through and decided to write something completely different. 😒
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Then I think B.
Look at the Anon-A-Miss stories, in most of them the girls still had a seed of doubt about sunset, what burst through when they suspected sunset.
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Ok but wtf does that have to do with this story? I admit that i haven't read any Anon-a-miss Stories but I'm pretty sure that's a different situation entirely.
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also I think it's C. Because normally the main six wouldn't instantly think that it's him and if they did they would've let him prove his innocents because they know that he wouldn't do evil shit right out of the blue.
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It's because both parties thought they trust the other (sunset/gordon) but when they are blamed for something, they instantly go against them