7023176 Thank you, I don't think it's too bad for my first ever...however, i know some writers who could have made it twenty times better...just means more to practice.
I liked it. Maybe there can be more chapters, focusing on different males in the town? An episode with Big Mac, for example, or maybe a couple comes in and the nurse and the other mare help get the stallion off?
Overall, I liked it. Stallion milking is one of my favorite fetishes, and this is one of few that I've found (of decent quality, that is) on this site. That said, this story could have used more detailed descriptions when it came to the actual milking portions, instead of simply stating that basically 'it happened'.
7090389 I am thinking of adding in more chapters and making them more detailed, this was the first time I ever even contemplated this kind of fetish, but i think i got a better handle on it for future additions. thanks for commenting.
7090652 I'm glad to hear you're working to improve your work, and that you take criticism well.
For the future chapters you mentioned, perhaps you could consider adding some more variety past just 'hoofing it', as that could be interesting. Perhaps some more...additional stimulation may be entitled for some of those having trouble reaching the finish line? Perhaps they could try some of those machines lining the wall that you mentioned, and see how those work?
Bah, but I'm just spitballing here. I look forward to seeing what you do with this story. Allons y, sur an adventure sexy!
Pretty hot.
7023176 Thank you, I don't think it's too bad for my first ever...however, i know some writers who could have made it twenty times better...just means more to practice.
I liked it. Maybe there can be more chapters, focusing on different males in the town? An episode with Big Mac, for example, or maybe a couple comes in and the nurse and the other mare help get the stallion off?
Overall, I liked it. Stallion milking is one of my favorite fetishes, and this is one of few that I've found (of decent quality, that is) on this site. That said, this story could have used more detailed descriptions when it came to the actual milking portions, instead of simply stating that basically 'it happened'.
7090389 I am thinking of adding in more chapters and making them more detailed, this was the first time I ever even contemplated this kind of fetish, but i think i got a better handle on it for future additions. thanks for commenting.
7090652 I'm glad to hear you're working to improve your work, and that you take criticism well.
For the future chapters you mentioned, perhaps you could consider adding some more variety past just 'hoofing it', as that could be interesting. Perhaps some more...additional stimulation may be entitled for some of those having trouble reaching the finish line? Perhaps they could try some of those machines lining the wall that you mentioned, and see how those work?
Bah, but I'm just spitballing here. I look forward to seeing what you do with this story. Allons y, sur an adventure sexy!
As a brit nice cockney accent
wow way better than last time I read this, I'm glad there is more to read can't wait to see what will happen next.