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Have you ever woken up and nothing is as you remember? Last thing I remember, the world was controlled by an evil overlord using animals to enforce her will. Now she is playing the part of compassionate pony, who wouldn't hurt a fly. It's got to be a trick, and I'm not falling for it! I will find a way to Escape Fluttershy.
Special Thanks to DreadNought for keeping my insanity in check.
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Is a Pterolykos puppy a real kind of dog?
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Pterolykos is a mythological creature. Wolf with wings. But I shall stay with this type for "genetics".
I absolutely love this story. I'm surprised there isn't more of a viewing for this story.
7156122 Yeah I don't know maybe it's the way I have the synopsis, or the story idea itself.
You requested me to check on your story so here is my review:
There were some instances of bad grammar such as:
Which should have been:
I found more than that one but they were all minor things that didn't really impact the experience of the story. Additionally i didn't like Angel having this spontaneous effect on stopping the main character from leaving. You could fix this by adding in some small details about it.
Another small thing you could fix is by using the word "as" less and replace it with similar words.
Other than that i found your story enjoyable, funny and original.
7158148 thanks for the feedback. I will definitely utilize it.
This is not badly written, although it does have some pretty obvious mistakes. I would suggest getting an editor, maybe?
This story is not good. The idea is original, but the execution is complete garbage. Like for instance having it change perspectives. It should mainly be single person if writting something like this.