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are u sure that Fluttershy isn't supposed to be Pinkie Pie
6936021 don't worry there is a method to the madness, look forward to the next chapter
k cool
Its good so far.
I don't know why she's Fluttershy's bitch, she just gave her a Valentine's day gift.
pfftt, phew. Fluttershy what were you on? must of taken lessons from Angel, with a side of pinkie's sugar!
so much 'happiness' in one place.
it was alright, def felt that role reversal.
consent is for the weak it seems.
6937874 ah the ego, how easily it is bruised, perhaps Rainbow is taking this the wrong way? Stay tuned
Hello. That took a turn.
Following!
iron will would approve.
Jesus Christ, how terrifying...
The story continues, and it really pushes the boundaries of disturbing.
Ohhh hoho. The bitch table has turn.
What the hell?
This was strangely random, but I can't deny I found it strangely fascinating.
More?
6964183 this story is complete but I am working on another right now, but its a comedy not a clop fic
Ok well I'm gonna start off with the possitves and then move on to why I disliked. I hate how people just hit a button but don't give feedback so I'm gonna say a few things I hope will help. First the Idea as a whole isn't a bad one. I'm always happy to see flutterdash and rainbow being pissed about being alone on Valentines day is a fun thought.
The Idea that Fluttershy might break like this is I guess belivible in a head cannon esk kind of way but i feel like there would be more build up to it. The problem I have with this in terms of it being a story is that it goes from zero to sixty. There's a ring at the door and she jumps in her pants. With a character like fluttershy i can't bring myself to really believe this could happen unless we have some background as to how we got here. Even if she was replaced with someone else like AJ I'd still have trouble with the pacing I think. With clop fiction the build up to the pay off is important and you kinda just skipped over that.
Please note this is just my opinion and I'm not trying to ruin your day I'm just giving an honnest opinion. If you find this upsetting I'm sorry in advance it is not my intent to hurt others. I like Rainbow have a fragile ego.
This is the third story I see with that cover image
C'mon RD, you're Flutters' bottom bitch and you know it.
Oooooh gurl
Needs a rape warning. Massively. Wouldn't have read if I'd realized what the tone would be.
That aside, other than pacing, the writing itself was fairly well done. None of the characters really felt in character either, but giving that a pass since out-of-character seems the point...and with Twilight/AJ the brief appearances didn't give much chance to depict them as them.
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Yup