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A new planet has appeared in the gamma sector. The Enterprise-D and her crew are sent to investigate.
A crossover of Star Trek: The Next Generation and My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic.
Starts at season 3 for Star Trek and after season 5 for Friendship is Magic.
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So how long till Picard realizes that screwing with their magic would not be welcomed. Plus with Discord around I bet he will love to be screwing with all of his "friends". I will be eagerly awaiting for future chapters!
...That's in the 23rd century AKA Original Series Era. Specifically between The Squire of Gothos and What Are Little Girls are Made Of?.
DITL.org and Memory Alpha have a complete list of the stardates of each episode.
Additionally, the events here are happening rather fast.
I dunno the whole "Disregard the prime directive" thing doesn't sound like something Picard would go along with, or going immediately for Away teams instead of observing the planet from a closer ranger first. There are plenty of ways to get the Enterprise Crew involved with Equestia that don't involve ignoring the prime directive or aggressive actions against the populace. Also the Federation does know about ESP and such but I don't think long ranger sensors could detect it, I think they would need to be in orbit to determine the number of sapient species and radiation magic gives off. Just feels like they have way too much info for being so far from the planet. I understand you want to get to the "meat" of the story but it feels like your rushing and ignoring important details of the of the way the Federation and the Enterprise crew do things. An anomalous planet investigation and first contact aren't things they wouldn't rush into.
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My bad. I've changed it to a more proper time.
It's more likely they'd detect unusual sub-space distortions than detecting the inhabitance bending things to their will. Also, slow down... sheesh. This is a cool premise, but there's way too much clunky exposition in the first chapter. And how does Celestia know aliens are coming? Can she scan space?
Sorry but that line by itself killed the story for me. After milenia protecting her Ponies and powering a cloaking spell to safe guard them she just up and decides to blow the planet at the first sign of trouble instead of facing it off?
Specially since in this story she HAS the power to blow up a planet?
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Well the reason Celestia believed that they coming towards the planet was because the dream she had of the Enterprise. She gained power in the season 4 finale where she saw Tirek going stronger.
Slowing down might very good idea from now on.
I'll work on slowing down.
6874901 She was stating the worse case scenario. She would never just blow it up without trying first.
She is just very unsure so she was preparing her sister for the possibility.
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That doesn't sound like considering the worst case scenario to me, more like downright psychosis.
6875098 I suppose that works. I'll be curious to see how you blend that element to the story.
40759.5 (2363) Enterprise launched from Utopia Planitia in Mars orbit.
48650.1 (2371) Enterprise crash landed on Veridian III (thanks Deanna).
47*** dates or 2370 is during the war between the Maquis and the Cardassians. A bunch of stuff that happens during Voyager's later seasons have their origin this year. We find a ship (USS Pegasus) with an illegal Starfleet cloaking device that Riker helped test. Deanna Troi got promoted, eventually leading her to be in the big chair when the ship crashed a year later on Veridian III. Wesley leaves Starfleet Academy to join The Traveler. Ro Laren came back for that one episode.
In any case, are you sure you want to base your story in what is basically Season 7 of TNG? You know what might work for future story development? Season 3. 43*** (2366). Data creates Lal. Dr. Crusher is back. Geordi and Worf get promotions. Sarek has Bendii Syndrome. Worf gets a discommendation. Best part is you can set yourself up for the Borg encounter at Wolf-359 and next seasons Klingon Civil War.
Good reason to be there, maybe not so much for violating the Prime Directive.
Yes.
That might be a good reason to go down there.
Yikes. Must be something awfully important down there that Starfleet is interested in. Probably something they haven't told Picard about.
Send a shuttle? Send some probes first? Scanners work like spy satellites when you're in orbit?
Who really only had that weird rainbow from the keybox power at the Season 4 ending. Said keybox turning in to a oddly-shaped tree castle. You know, the one that violates a bunch of zoning laws and had a road already leading to it. Yeah, that one. But hey, Magic of Friendship.
Because you should know by now that Rarity is going to have like 30 suitcases for a two day trip.
That castle is not going to be standing at the end of this story.
I like where this is going, but this chapter feels rushed. Plus there are probably ways of going around the Prime Directive that don't involve douchy Starfleet being a douche. The way the sound effects are written out is a little off-putting, but not a deal breaker. Maybe Celestia didn't need to drop that bomb about literally dropping a bomb on Equestria. I get why she would consider that, but that was a little much for chapter 1.
I can't believe I forgot about this: Want to get your technobabble on? You really should mention the oddity that is the sun's geo-centric orbit of E-12. Which is is stark contrast to Earth's helio-centric orbit of Sol.
6875477 You bring up a lot of interesting points.
I did mess the up the stardate again.
Although this does bring about the possibly of the Borg, which I'm highly in favor of bringing them into the conflict. So I have to agree with switching over to season 3.
There are more than a few logic errors and all parties are written ooc. It is going to be a pass on reading and a downvote I am afraid.
6875146 lol this clarifies things a wee bit more, though honestly do you think she would even want to consider this unless her visions suggested it was needed? I know it's a dramatic and sudden plot device that brings the reader in more but it just feels wrong. Perhaps VERY deep in her subconscious but unless there was valid reason to consider it, I imagine such a morbid ultimatum would not even cross her mind.
6876571 Even though you didn't enjoy it. I appreciate you stopping by and giving your thoughts on the story.
I've seen better-written fanfics, but this is promising. The only problem with It is that Starfleet would NEVER authorize breaking the Prime Directive for anything short or a major disaster. If anything, they'd just send the Enterprise to survey the planet and study its population in secrecy.
How is the next chapter progressing for you?
7408949 It's being worked on. I just have to figure out the captain's reaction. Maybe re-watch some episodes and that will help. But anyways it should be out any day now.
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Sweet!
I never imagined someone being that cowardly. Huh, it's kind of fascinating in a twisted way.
Because those would be so effective against innocents. I get the feeling that trying to use the Elements against an innocent would result in them (the Mane Six) being smote by the Rainbow of Sparkly Doom instead. Even if you used them against a bad guy, that isn't "unnatural" or "anti-reality" or something, so they probably wouldn't work, anyway. Personally, I doubt they'd even work against Chrysalis simply because she wasn't unnatural, she was just the enemy.
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That depends, since when has Equestria (founded by ponies from the north) been a planet? Did it break off, float away, and grow a new planet like some sort of cosmic starfish when I wasn't looking?
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Actually, the stardates were chosen randomly in the original series (dunno about other series), so technically, it is not necessarily in the 23rd century.
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http://memory-alpha.wikia.com/wiki/Stardate
Also, the stardates in TNG, DS9, and VOY are all roughly 1000=1 year.
Additionally, stardates for that era have five digits before the decimal. Encounter At Far Point took place between 42353.7 and 42372.5 while Nemesis took place on 56844.9.
And Jesus Christ is that an old comment.
7436891 Considering everything else that seems to happen there?
Wouldn't surprise me!
7436897 Gene Roddenberry had placed the Star Dates to make NBC broadcast each episode in the order that HE wanted. But, NBC (like the other networks) broadcasted episodes the way THEY wanted.
When some viewers complained about the star dates going back and forth, from one episode to the next, Mr. Roddenberry came up with the ingenious idea: that the star date was dependent on where the Enterprise was relative to the center of the Milky Way galaxy... smokescreen BS.
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I see, thank you. I had read that Roddenberry claimed the stardates were arbitrary. Your explanation makes more sense and is likely more truthful than someone else's second-hand knowledge. I'm totally ignoring the fact that I'm also receiving second-hand knowledge from you because I like you better.
8028110 My source comes from an old paperback entitled "The Making of Star Trek" by Stephen E. Whitfield and Gene Roddenberry. It is a very good read.
Stardate 43050.5 would put it right before the start of the 3rd season of TNG.
At that time, there is NO WAY Picard would have ignored the Prime Directive, and would have been shocked at Starfleet Command even suggesting he do such a thing, and likely reported such a suggestion to the Federation President as evidence that the admiral who suggested such a thing had gone insane.
Also, there is no such place as Gamma Sector. There is the Gamma Quadrant.
Also, there is a TON of empty unexplored space in the Alpha and Beta quadrants, which is what the Enterprise-D was exploring.
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7436922 Encounter at Farpoint was Stardate 41153.7
With TNG, the second number was the season number.
For DS9 and VYG, they just kept the count going. (Last season of Voyager happened it what would have been the 14th season of TNG. So, yeah, Paramount cheated and crammed 21 seasons of Star Trek into just 14 by having DS9 overlap both TNG and VYG)
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That comment was 40 weeks old and I am completely aware of that fact. I was aware of it at the time too.
What you found was a 40 week old set of typos