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I haven't read the story yet, and I can tell by the description that you need an editor.
This is not how you write a sentence.
This is how you write a sentence.
"There was a loud crash, and three anthropomorphic stallions in thick plate armor burst into the room, muskets pointed squarely at their chests. Not wanting to anger the big scary horse-men with guns, Wilson and Leo threw their hands up."
See the difference?
7302315 That sounds cool! I like it! But the door was already open because the nurses came in first. How about something the guards rushing in?
7302235 Can't agree with you more, Frank.
Certainly not a bad start and will be waiting for more. You could use an editor but ive seen far worse. The only things that grab me as poxsible probpems, the colors are fine but make sure their consistant. Also i wouldn't consider unicorns more intelligent then the other tribes, maybe more studious but not more intelligent.
7302315
AND THEY STAY THERE!!!
Does anybody know a color code for a brighter blue for Wilson's dialog.
What's up wit all the dislikes? Also the color you're using for Rarity's speech is a bitch to see using darker backgrounds.
7342479 My writing is that of a seasoned writer. Also, dark background?
7342945 If you hit the 'formatting' button at the top right of the chapter you can change the color of the background.
7343460 Oh okay, that's good to know. Also I found a bunch of color codes and will be changing the dialogue colors soon.