Caught ya by surprise eh? well I'm sure everyone thought orion would stay with his friends and get stronger every chapter, but im aware this twist is a shocker. Orions story is far from over, all hes been through so far is pretty much a warm up Next chapter is going to be fun to write, and when everypony finds out who the mystery pegasus is...
Wow, when Orion is really angry... hes such a badflank! I loved his heroic sacrifice to save silver and the guest (not spoiling it for anyone who hasnt read it yet) was funny and well in character. But the ending? I never saw that comming. I dont know what will happen now but if that black pegasus is who I think it is... Those Rangers are about to face something they wont have a hope in heck of stopping!
I finally read the chapter, and I must say it was pretty great! I never knew that Orion could act that way. Looks like they'll think twice before messing with him. Also, that ending you have... You purposely leave it like that so we'll need to know what's going to happen next, huh? Well you've done it. I am curious.
Okay, seriously. This is so messed up, you expended an ungodly number of cases of pure 'deus ex machina' to get the kid through all that alive and now the Steel Rangers miles away can just beam him there? What exactly is the point of giving someone a new body and then promptly maiming them?Frankly, I don't see how they could reverse engineer something that needs an AI to operate and would likely be shutdown by said AI immediately. It's an artificial intelligence, not just a fancy voice control.
Put bluntly, you took a passable story and wrecked it's plausibility... Hopefully there will be some improvement.
Also, the whole thing feels a tad disjointed, possibly because all the focus is on the action scenes.
2486219 Beats me on the Discord thing. Maybe he doesn't have a physical body anymore? I think a unified view of exactly what Celestia, Luna, and Discord are exactly and whether the present alicorns are essentially the same or just poor quality copies (by comparison) is kind of important.
P.S. I think Orion is an arrogant idiot. Worse than Rainbow Dash.
2809561 sorry but I have to disagree with you. One thing I found with Lucky's writing is that there's a reason for everything he writes. Before throwing out a judgement like that, Please wait for the next chapter. He always addresses things like that and it makes sense in hindsight. For one Lucky, I'm anxious to see what your reasons for doing that to Orion are. I have my own thoughts but I cant wait to see what you send our way. Waiting on that update!!
3438752 thanks i personly dont think of myself as much of a writer but you guys are the reason i keep writing. with luck, next chapter will be out in a week or so. depending on how bad work screws me for my time off
Oh my god you updated. Why would you do this to me right when I have work to do?
jk I'll read later. :3
That ending.
I was like: wat?
dude... shit just got real.
Caught ya by surprise eh?
well I'm sure everyone thought orion would stay with his friends and get stronger every chapter, but im aware this twist is a shocker.
Orions story is far from over, all hes been through so far is pretty much a warm up
Next chapter is going to be fun to write, and when everypony finds out who the mystery pegasus is...
Wow, when Orion is really angry... hes such a badflank!
I loved his heroic sacrifice to save silver and the guest (not spoiling it for anyone who hasnt read it yet) was funny and well in character.
But the ending? I never saw that comming. I dont know what will happen now but if that black pegasus is who I think it is...
Those Rangers are about to face something they wont have a hope in heck of stopping!
I finally read the chapter, and I must say it was pretty great! I never knew that Orion could act that way. Looks like they'll think twice before messing with him. Also, that ending you have... You purposely leave it like that so we'll need to know what's going to happen next, huh? Well you've done it. I am curious.
Shit just got serious! please make moar! im loven it and im hooked!
PS: y u so mean to orion?
Okay, seriously. This is so messed up, you expended an ungodly number of cases of pure 'deus ex machina' to get the kid through all that alive and now the Steel Rangers miles away can just beam him there? What exactly is the point of giving someone a new body and then promptly maiming them?Frankly, I don't see how they could reverse engineer something that needs an AI to operate and would likely be shutdown by said AI immediately. It's an artificial intelligence, not just a fancy voice control.
Put bluntly, you took a passable story and wrecked it's plausibility... Hopefully there will be some improvement.
Also, the whole thing feels a tad disjointed, possibly because all the focus is on the action scenes.
2486219
Beats me on the Discord thing. Maybe he doesn't have a physical body anymore? I think a unified view of exactly what Celestia, Luna, and Discord are exactly and whether the present alicorns are essentially the same or just poor quality copies (by comparison) is kind of important.
P.S.
I think Orion is an arrogant idiot. Worse than Rainbow Dash.
2809561 sorry but I have to disagree with you.
One thing I found with Lucky's writing is that there's a reason for everything he writes. Before throwing out a judgement like that, Please wait for the next chapter. He always addresses things like that and it makes sense in hindsight.
For one Lucky, I'm anxious to see what your reasons for doing that to Orion are.
I have my own thoughts but I cant wait to see what you send our way.
Waiting on that update!!
dunno why I've been avoiding this story but finally got around to reading it, i really hope the next chapter comes soon
3438752 thanks
i personly dont think of myself as much of a writer but you guys are the reason i keep writing.
with luck, next chapter will be out in a week or so. depending on how bad work screws me for my time off