Love the lenght took me 1hour30min to read this chapter but its was one good read. I made the mistake of somehow starting here instead of the 1st chapter......dont ask i dont know how eaither. Gonna spend the rest of the day reading the start now.
This was worth the wait. Lucky... How could you write something like this? I cried my heart out at the scene with his mother, what happened to Orion... *slow clap* I was shocked, when his luck changes, I never expected things to get that bad, that fast. I want more, please write more and now!
Thanks for bearing with the wait guys! I love you all for reading my ham fisted attempt at a story! Next chapter is already started and i hope to have it finished soon... well sooner than the last one lol. chapter 6 will be a little abstract, you will see what i mean thanks again for reading my work.
That was a really nice chapter. The best of them all so far, if you ask me. Some things were explained, Orion wasn't that much of a "I'm going through it all without a scratch!" character... This story is definitely getting better. Not that it wasn't good from the start ;P Anyway... for Celestia, you start a sentence with capital letter. Beter remember that. Or get yourself a prereader to correct stupid little mistakes like those. I'm curious about the next chapter. I mean: we've seen some character development in this one. I can see that he's acting more like a kid, not like a bloody war hero. I saw some problems with that in the previous chapters. I hope that next one will be even better. Just remember you're writing about a pegasus colt, not about some kind of elite Enclave soldier! Keep up the good work! Waiting for next chapter.
2020550 well the version thats up is unedited, my editor/proofreaders going through it for me as we speak. it was just such a long time between chapters that i wanted to throw it up for you guys who read my stuff
why cant I stop reading and re-reading this story? Lucky, no offense but you are not the best writer out there, you are no Kkatt but i ADORE this fic. Orion comes across as the confused hero, not sure what he is doing but trys to help when he can. Happy is just fun to read as she is nuts! Ironclad seems more confused in every chapter about where his loyalty's lie, to the Rangers or to his friends. Myth is so cool! an earthpony who can kick the flank of anything he sees? genius! I have no idea where this story goes from here, I thought Orion would get stronger and stronger until he can kill with a look. What Azure sky did to him? Its a harsh reminder how weak the little colt is. Please PM me and let me know if Silver will be alright. I dont care about spoilers but I find myself caring about a fictional pony that much, Lucky, This fanfic is amazing, please keep writing it.
I'm going to read the living shit out of this... Tomorrow, cause I got back late from a trip. ;-;
Love the lenght took me 1hour30min to read this chapter but its was one good read. I made the mistake of somehow starting here instead of the 1st chapter......dont ask i dont know how eaither. Gonna spend the rest of the day reading the start now.
This was worth the wait.
Lucky...
How could you write something like this? I cried my heart out at the scene with his mother, what happened to Orion...
*slow clap* I was shocked, when his luck changes, I never expected things to get that bad, that fast.
I want more, please write more and now!
When his luck's good, it's great. When it goes bad...Poor Silver...
Thanks for bearing with the wait guys!
I love you all for reading my ham fisted attempt at a story!
Next chapter is already started and i hope to have it finished soon... well sooner than the last one lol.
chapter 6 will be a little abstract, you will see what i mean
thanks again for reading my work.
I am halfway through it. *Is slow reader* The Great Sweetie Bell demands stuff! I love this story just on how goofy it is at times.
2016588 well it is kinda random at times...
just please dont hate me for the bad stuff...
very good reading Lucky, damn good inspiration to write a super long house or artemis chapter :D
Very good chapter
That was a really nice chapter. The best of them all so far, if you ask me.
Some things were explained, Orion wasn't that much of a "I'm going through it all without a scratch!" character...
This story is definitely getting better. Not that it wasn't good from the start ;P
Anyway... for Celestia, you start a sentence with capital letter. Beter remember that. Or get yourself a prereader to correct stupid little mistakes like those.
I'm curious about the next chapter. I mean: we've seen some character development in this one. I can see that he's acting more like a kid, not like a bloody war hero. I saw some problems with that in the previous chapters. I hope that next one will be even better. Just remember you're writing about a pegasus colt, not about some kind of elite Enclave soldier!
Keep up the good work! Waiting for next chapter.
2020550 well the version thats up is unedited, my editor/proofreaders going through it for me as we speak. it was just such a long time between chapters that i wanted to throw it up for you guys who read my stuff
ok edited version is up! thanks again to the epic deathtap for his help
2024434 You are very welcome.
Oh my god, that was a good chapter.
2034918 thanks :D
please, i need more chapters! this is literal one of my favorite stories and it only has 5 chapters!
why cant I stop reading and re-reading this story?
Lucky, no offense but you are not the best writer out there, you are no Kkatt but i ADORE this fic.
Orion comes across as the confused hero, not sure what he is doing but trys to help when he can.
Happy is just fun to read as she is nuts!
Ironclad seems more confused in every chapter about where his loyalty's lie, to the Rangers or to his friends.
Myth is so cool! an earthpony who can kick the flank of anything he sees? genius!
I have no idea where this story goes from here, I thought Orion would get stronger and stronger until he can kill with a look. What Azure sky did to him? Its a harsh reminder how weak the little colt is.
Please PM me and let me know if Silver will be alright. I dont care about spoilers but I find myself caring about a fictional pony that much,
Lucky, This fanfic is amazing, please keep writing it.
*points to all previous comments* So... when you gonna start to believe me in that you are a GREAT writer.
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